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The best solution to over coming traffic problems in your city


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Nov 30, 2009, 09:38am   #
Topic: The best solution to over coming traffic problems in your city.



Any country all over the world. "Heavy traffic" is one of the best headache problems. Here we are, this problem has been happenning in Ho Chi Minh city, Vietnam.
The world has been developing, our country is not also way. Becoming a developed country we must invest and affiliate which attract many people come to big city in order to develop their job. The population increase days by days and not go down. In an urban city, digging the road improve sewerage every day many along blockhouse on the street obstruct the traffic, it be also a result of heavy traffic in HCMC. The pollution by many motorbikes or cars ... to reduce the problems, the goverment need to solve the diffcult problems especially circulation is quickly. Beside reinforcing many one ways and collecting toll before the vehicles comr into heart city. Many people said that: "Heavy traffic" problem is the work of administrative power and traffic police, this isn't a truth those duties are themself.
All in all, which I gave above, aim a purose make our society become wonderful and non stress problem about heavy traffic.
Nov 30, 2009, 11:57am   #
Any countryies all over the world.

The population increases days by days and not goes down.

All in all, which I gave above, aim a purose makes our society become wonderful and non gets rid of stress problem about heavy traffic.

two verb in above sentence?

make & become

I tried to give some opinions ^^, if I have something wrong, correct me, plz
In countries all over the world, heavy traffic is one of the biggest headaches for people. Here we are, t This problem has been growing in Ho Chi Minh city, Vietnam.
The world has been developing, and our country is also developing. Becoming a developed country we must...

Many people say: "Heavy traffic" is a problem that is the work of administrative power and traffic police. this isn't a truth those duties are themself. What are you trying to say here?
All in all, of the points I made above, aim a purose the main idea is that I hope we can make our society become wonderful and stress-free by reducing the problem of heavy traffic.

I hope these revisions help you, but your English still needs a lot of work. It is hard to understand what you are trying to say. Keep practicing! Your English sure is better than my Vietnamese!
Yes, idefinitely agree.
This paragraph needs a lot of work.
Especially take care about using unnecessary full stops and commas everywhere.
The paragraph isnt cohesive.Try writing out the points and the data you already have in mind, create a structure in your mind of what you would include in each sentence, and then writing out your paragraph.
Hope i am of some help to ou :D
Cheers!
Archie



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