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IELTS Essay What are the benefits of living in big cities, as opposed to rural areas?


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Aug 15, 2012, 12:15am   #
Question: What are the benefits of living in big cities, as opposed to rural areas? What are the problems of rural areas and how can they be solved?


Many people opt to live in large cities rather than country side because they believe there are more advantages residing in metropolitan area than remote areas. Such, benefits are employment, transportation facilities and up to the edge lifestyle. This essay will point out some difficulties living in rural area and will suggest some solutions.

Most common reason why people prefer to live in metro cities is the employment opportunity. Getting a desired job and working at well reputed company is the first choice for people. Apparently, these jobs are mainly available in developed cities. For instance, It can be seen at recruitment websites such as WWW.abcrecruitment.com that the number of jobs in well known companies are noticeably higher in city areas than rural areas. Another reason is the easy availability of transportation services, large complex network maps of buses and trains covering almost all surrounding suburbs of city, which can save a lot valuable time spent by traveling with own vehicle. These two are the important factors when considering living either in city or rural area. Apart from those, entertainment facilities, well developed infrastructure and living with latest trends are other reasons for living in cities.

As mentioned above, the benefits living in big cities are the disadvantages for living in rural areas. Firstly,to mitigate the problem of employment government should try to offer tax deductions to the companies, which are ready to establish their branches in such places. As a result, there will be more work available in job market. Government should also provide sponsorship to people who have required skills and offer them some benefits like residency, travel and family benefits. Thus, those who are interested will come forward and will help rural economy to boost. In addition to this, increasing availability and expanded transportation network would also attract more people to come and work in such developing areas. Also, developing some nearby entertainment and leisure facilities will also help local people to retain in these places for long time without missing city life.

To sum up, it is in the hands of the authority who can help develop rural areas by offering some advantages to both industrial world and people in need.

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Thanks for reading!!!
The most common reason why for people prefer to live in metro cities is the multitude of employment opportunities. Getting a desirable job and working at well a reputable company is the first choice a goal for many people. Apparently, these jobs are mainly available in developed cities. For instance, It can be seen at Recruitment websites such as www.abcrecruitment.com show that the number of jobs in well known companies are noticeably higher in city areas than rural areas. Another reason benefit of city life is the easy availability of transportation services. Typically, there is a large and complex network maps of buses and trains covering almost all which lead to the surrounding suburbs of a city. which As opposed to driving a car, these can help a person save a lot of valuable time and money. spent by traveling with own vehicle. These two are the important factors when considering comparing life in either in the city or a rural area. Apart from those, entertainment facilities, well developed infrastructure and living with latest trends are other reasons for living in cities. attractions for people.
Aug 15, 2012, 11:32pm   #
Hi Jennifer,
Thanks a lot for your reply.
I believe, I still need to work on my grammar especially articles and prepositions, and also essay structure.
As mentioned above, the Some additional reasons for living in big cities are due to the disadvantage for of living in rural areas. Firstly To mitigate the problem of employment, the government should try to offer tax deductions to the companies which are ready to establish their branches in such places. (I edited this sentence, but it is too long, split it into 2 sentences) As a The result would be there will be more work available in the job market. The government should also provide sponsorship to people who have required skills and offer them some benefits like residency, travel and family benefits. (This is not a good supportive argument) Thus, those who are interested will come forward and will help to boost up the rural economy. to boost. In addition, to this, increasing the availability and expanded transportation network would also attract more people to come and work in such developing areas. Also, developing some nearby entertainment and leisure facilities will also help local people to retain in these places for long time without missing city life.
( I think you are not quite on topic, because you are discussing more and more solutions to the disadvantage of living in the countryside, but you should be giving more examples of benefits of city life)
(Plus, in these modern times, there are many small towns that have good employment rates, people take better care of each other because there is a greater sense of togetherness, many people work from home and garden or keep farm animals for food, lots of people prefer to live outside of the city)
Aug 20, 2012, 09:39am   #
I think punctuation marks are not used in correct places: Such, benefits are or Apart from those, entertainment facilities, well developed
correcting this problem is very easy. Is not? :)
Aug 22, 2012, 07:33am   #
Hi Jennifer.
Now, I am working on my grammar and very soon post another one with less mistakes.
I appreciate your time and effort.
Thanks a lot.
I hope my comments be useful

Most common reason why people prefer to live in metro cities is the employment opportunity opportunities.
i would improve this statement in this way if i were you Getting a job with high salary and good social statues and working at well reputed company are people main priorities.



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