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'a very beautiful young woman who is very ambitious' - Describing a friend


Nii Kommey 1 / 1  
Dec 6, 2011   #1
Born on the seventh day of May 1993 is a very beautiful young woman who is very ambitious and goal oriented. This beautiful young woman's dream and goal for the future is to become a passionate and devoted bank manager. She also dreams of becoming a mother of four and the best of wives to her husband. She is no other than Edwina Nyame Nhyira Reynolds Baiden. Edwina as most people affectionately call her is a Fante and comes from Salt Pond in the Central Region. Edwina speaks Fante (her local dialect), Twi and English. She lives at East Legon with both parents Mr. Jim Baiden and Mrs. Joyce Baiden who really love and adore her. She is the last amongst three children and is the family's human pet. Edwina being so adorable is the heart of her family since she is the last and youngest in her family.

Edwina is a bold and brilliant girl who had her education in Mother Care Nursery, Englebet Primary, North Ridge, and Akosombo International then presently in Ashesi University. She's a girl who cherishes her education and gives the needed attention to her books. She always aims for the best in her education and excels in every examination she takes. After College, Edwina has the dream of having her masters at Oxford University in the United Kingdom. Edwina is also a devoted Christian.

A mystery or trick to get Edwina's full attention is to bring up topics or talk about Music especially gospel rap songs, talk about movies specifically horror movies, shoes and also and sneakers. Edwina is so much in love with four by four cars and could do anything reasonable to get the latest Toyota four by four car. One thing Edwina cherishes a lot is money and her Bible. Edwina loves food a lot and she claims it is hereditary. Any food with corned beef, Edwina is into it, her mouth goes wet. Even though Edwina is female, she is very interested in football and will not mind watching a game with a thousand boys in a room. Edwina has yellow and lilac as her favorite colors.

Edwina being quiet and reserved at times could put up with many behaviors from people. But for a person who boasts and blows his own trumpet or a talkative person out of the question. Edwina dislikes people who go all out feeling all good thinking they have got all it takes to rule or buy the world. She rather prefer a boring old man to a person who boasts. Edwina Reynolds also dislikes talkative people.

To describe Edwina's physical appearance one will run out of adjectives. One might think he or she has committed blasphemy after describing her. The true fact is that Edwina is just one of God's wonderful creations. Edwina is about 5.8 feet tall and slender with a very beautiful well carved shape from top to bottom. Edwina is very pretty and eye catching. She could qualify for the first five prettiest girls everywhere she goes to. Her physical appearance is something a person could write hundred pages about. Summarizing everything, Edwina is fine.

Edwina is a very confident, beautiful, self-expressive and an interesting girl. She's a friend most people will dream of having, even the president of the United States of America. Edwina goes straight forward to the point without beating around the bush. She goes according to her principles and values in life. She's flexible in decision making and is already to correct her accept and mistakes. Edwina is also very friendly and sociable.

Describing Edwina in three words, I will say she is Beautiful, Eloquent and "WOW." Edwina is loving, lovable and loved by all around her. She is of course a friend most people will like to have and I will not mind having her as a wife
hwei1994 2 / 7  
Dec 6, 2011   #2
Great essay! Some minor advice for revising:
1. In the last sentence of your first para, the word 'family' is appearing too much. You may hope to delete one on them because just one is enough and to avoid a discomfort on syllables when reading.

2. You may hope to review your essay and shorten some long sentences, while it's also fine if you prefer not to do so.

The depiction of Edwina's figure is enlivened and of triple dimension. That's awesome.
I really like your 'loving, lovable and loved' words!
OP Nii Kommey 1 / 1  
Dec 11, 2011   #3
Thank you very much. I had A-


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