When an individual is searching the information from the media, whatever the type of the media like film books or the Internet is, he/she is
(acting) on their own will. It means the information from the books or the Internet reflects the needs of the real world
. It is undeniable that some information from those media has bad influence on young people. Hence, some people think such information(coverage,avoid repeating the same word) should be supervised or banned. I would agree with this opinion. However, should we thinks
(?)a bit deeper about how we should act more respons(i)bly in the real life instead of just simply banning those information from the media.Information on the media reflects the needs of real world
. We can not
(cannot) stop other people from searching the information whatever they need from the books or the Internet. However, a better way we would do
(to acheive this) is guiding people, especially young people, to search(find out. still avoid repeating) the right and useful information by using the media. Some information like pornography videos, sociopathic activities, violence or even racism from the film books or the internet could
(negative)impact on young people's mind(s) who still might not have the capability to distinguish
what is wrong and what is right
(between right and wrong). Obviously, those information should be controlled or supervised. But if the young generation is well educated, they may not even have a bit of interest to have a touch on them. Even if those information has been through people's mind, they are harmless.
There are too much repeatitions.
For instance, 'information from media' can be replaced by the reports by the media
= the coverage
= what they obtain from the newspapers and internet
I suggest you practising more paraphase for IELTS writing.