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Awareness among people about a healthier lifestyle leads to the need to look for a specific food


priskeith 1 / -  
Sep 3, 2014   #1
Preparation of food has become increasingly easier in the world we live in.Thereby making it a better place to live in.This is made possible by the way food can be stored, processed and transported.

In general awareness among people to lead a healthier lifestyle leads to the need to look for specific kind of food.For example including fruits and vegetables in one's diet is considered healthy.But seasonal fruits and veggies may not be available year round.Inventions like the refrigerator, freezer has taken the concept of storage to another level.Thereby foods which one may not get in certain times of the year can be frozen, and later consumed accordingly.In addition food can be transported in huge freezer container from one part of the world to another.

Microwave is another key instrument which makes cooking faster in the fast paced world we live in.Although it may not be the healthiest option.Oven's also is a invention the present day population is thankful for.It is a better option than deep frying.

In addition i have also noticed the availability of food products in the supermarket.It certainly makes the life of the consumer easier.Pre cooked, ready to throw in the microwave or oven products.Precut vegetables, marinated meats all these make it less time consuming.Thereby improving the way we live.

In days past cooking was a chore and time consuming.We are able to spend and focus time on other priorities like spending time with family and friends, per suing career or sport.

In conclusion food preparation has become a much easier task and improved the quality of life to which i totally agree.
MarianaS 5 / 14 8  
Sep 3, 2014   #2
I like that you use transitional words such as "in addition", "in conclusion" to emphasize the structure of your essay. However, I would like to introduce some improvements.

First of all, let me fix some punctuation mistakes in your essay.

Second, you should rephrase the second passage, as it begins with the sentence that repeats the title of the essay. In the whole, the second passage must say more about the reasons for your choice but not the general idea. There is no place for this in the main body of your essay. I hope, you understand what I mean. Besides, "in general" should be replaced be "first of all" or something similar to this.


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