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Argumentative essay - Rich and poor children - school work


ThuyChi 3 / 8  
Oct 5, 2008   #1
"Are rich children are always happier than those who come from poorer families?"

There is a general belief that children who come from rich families (therefore refers as rich children) are always happier than those who come from poorer families. Rich children have luxury things and good living environment, which parents with lower income can not afford. It makes people think that they must be happier than their friends. However, from my point of view, I disagree with this thought.

Children who come from a rich and well-educated family are usually expected and desired to excel in their school work. They are not allowed to get any mark but A. Beside that, they also have to excel in their social activities. Their parents pin all their hopes on them. Being a "good" child, instead of balancing their time to play and study, these rich children must push themselves hard to be successful. If they are not successful or fail in any aspect, they could bring disgrace on their family and become ignominy of these families. Otherwise, children from normal families can make their parents proud of them simply because they have passed their primary school leaving exam. For these children, happiness is much simple than their friends who come from rich families.

In a family with high income, parents usually do not realise that their children not only need their money but their love. They usually busy working and leave their responsibility of taking care of their children for nursemaids. As a result, children from rich family usually lack of love and lack of "family atmosphere". They tend to not share their feeling with parents when they are in their teen-age, as they think their parents will not listen to them when they are busy working. It will be worse when they have nobody beside them when they need a piece of advice, so they do what they think, and go on the wrong way. "Rich children" usually land in impasses, feel unhappy and disappointed because they do not know what to do. In spite of that, children from families with lower income always can ask their parents for advice, and their parents always are there to share their feeling. They never have to solve their problems by their selves. In additional, these children know how to share their feeling, and it makes them happier than "rich" children, who can not say that they are depressed and then keep this feeling inside them forever.

In conclusion, I hold firm to my belief that rich children are not happier than children from poorer families. Whether they are happy or not depends on the way they were brought up, no matter which families they come from.

Can you please take a look and check it for me? It's my school essay (English language).

Thank you so much.

Thuy Chi
OP ThuyChi 3 / 8  
Oct 5, 2008   #2
I think that the last paragraph is too short, but I don't know how to make it longer. I also afraid that the whole essay is quite short, 441 words is not enough for this topic, isn't it? (I'm grade 10th student).
OP ThuyChi 3 / 8  
Oct 9, 2008   #3
Thank you so much. I've added some points before handed in yesterday. Thank you for your suggestions.

It's my first academic year in a English-speaking country. I hope I'll pass English paper :( I still have problems with my English essays :(

Do you think it's ok for international students to study English literature ('cos I'm thinking of studying English Literature next year)?
EF_Team5 - / 1,586  
Oct 9, 2008   #4
Good morning.

You're welcome; good luck!

I think it's a great idea for international students to study English lit; not only will it help you with your language skills, it will help you understand the culture during various times in history.

Regards,
Gloria
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