Here are my suggestions:
"Nowadays, machines display a
more and more important role not only in daily life but also in manufacturing.
I strongly agree that humans are becoming subservient to machines, but,
in fact, machines are continually improving our lives. We can see machines in everywhere from our houses to assist housewives to in factories to help workers or engineers in manufacturing.
In the daily life, machines make our life more and more comfortable. With appearing of electrical goods, the housewives can do housework easily because of the
cooker, oven, microwave, washing machines,
and so on. It makes housewives save their time and helps them in heavy
works. In the past the women used to spend the whole day for housework, but now with the assistance of machines, they have more time to care themselves and also to relax. Machines really change women's lives.Admittedly in education,
the role of machines can be denied. When the computer was invented, it contributed to improve the education and assist in teaching more effectively. Nowadays, electronic libraries gradually replace conventional
libraries in storing books and in searching books. Moreover, with computers
connected internet, students can search books from many resources on the internet for studying, and with specialized software for the
computer, they can do experiment in many areas of science
such as biology, physics, chemistry,
and so on. The roles of machines in education
, machines exist
in all parts of factories. Machines step by step replace workers in producing
products on the assembly line
and workers only operate the machines. Machines prevent workers from dangerous work spaces
such as in construction sites
and nuclear reaction piles.
assistance of machines, people can create products with better quality and in larger amounts
. Machines make manufacturing more and more developed (Is this the best word here? What bout "productive" or "efficient?")
In sum, although humans are depending on machines, machines still keep an important role in
improving our lives. With
machines, people can develop in many areas of life,
from daily life to manufacturing
I am not sure if you need to mention where you get your examples in the essay, because the prompt says that you should use examples from the book, real life, etc. but I'm unclear as to whether you need to state that in your piece or not; something to think about.
You've got good structure and organization here; each paragraph is contained, and you move cleanly from one point to the next.