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It is often alleged that many teenagers want to reach their higher education after finishing school.


davechau 1 / 1  
Mar 4, 2015   #1
Here's my introductories about IELTS Writing Task 2.

Ex1: Some people think that all teenagers should be required to do unpaid work in their free time to help the local community. They believe this would benefit both the individual teenager and society as a whole. Do you agree or disagree ?

My introduction: There has been increasing interest in teenagers should spend their spare times working on a volunteer basis in the local community. Many people believe that this approach brings an excess of benefits for both individual and society. Personally, I entirely agree with this statement.

Ex2: When choosing a job, the salary is the most important consideration. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

My introduction: It is often alleged that many people choose their jobs depending on the size of the salary proposed. Based on my experiences and observations, on the balance, I totally disagree with the idea that money is the vital consideration when getting jobs because I think that the other factors are equally principal.

Ex3: Some people believe that studying at university or college is the best route to a successful career; while others believe that is it better to get a job straight after school. Discuss both views.

My introduction: It is often alleged that many teenagers want to reach their higher education after finishing school. While other individuals argue that it would be better to get a job. Based on my experiences, I would argue that attaining the advanced education is how to pave the way to success.
anhminh3105 3 / 7 1  
Mar 5, 2015   #2
There has been increasing interest in teenagers should spend their spare times(this is grammatically incorrect and hence it cant be understandable) working on a volunteer basis in the local community. Many people believe(people use this to begin their introduction or to repeat the task in the conclusion, I suggest you should bring this to your beginning) that this approach brings an excess (can you try to use another words? because its meaning is not appropriate) of benefits for both individual and society. Personally, I entirely agree with this statement.

I will suggest mine:" it is argued that young people should spend their spare times working on a voluntary basis because it can be beneficial for the individual and society as a whole. personally, I strongly disagree that we should force all teenagers to work without payment."
OP davechau 1 / 1  
Mar 5, 2015   #3
I mean " working on a voluntary basis" equal "working on a volunteer basis". I asked my teacher and she told me that's complete meaning.
anhminh3105 3 / 7 1  
Mar 5, 2015   #4
yes I know but I referred to the sentence preceded. >>There has been increasing interest in teenagers should spend their spare times << this guy


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