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Advertising encourages us to buy things we don't really need, should be regulated?


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Hi, this is my essay
Some people say that advertising encourages us to buy things we don't really need. Others say that advertisements tell us about new products that may improve our lives. Which view point do you agree with?

Advertising is an integral part of any modern person's life. It is everywhere on the streets, on transport, on TV, on the Internet. It is impossible to imagine modern society based on economic laws without advertising. There are two sides of the coin, like anything in our world.
Some people say that advertising encourages us to buy things we don't really need. In other words, advertising inspires people that possessions of some things made them happy and successful. Succumbed to these influences, people just have a kind of sickness because they can't stop. Everyone start buying more and more, but their needs grow too and it is never enough. Advertising methods especially affect children so they make their parents buy billions of toys and sweets making scenes at shops.
On the other hand some people have an opposite point of view. Advertising brings us some information and it is not always useless torrent of information. There things which can improve human's life, and after all we always can choose and decide by ourselves. Much more important than this, there is also social advertising telling us about the damage of smoking or the danger of AIDS and others, which call us to help poor people and orphans. Absolutely, we can't call it bad thing in conclusion.
As for me, I think that advertising makes our life better rather than not. However, it must be regulated by 100 percents government laws.
What are u think about?

Hi :) I can make some suggestions to help you improve your paper. You have some excellent ideas and you have thought about the subject well.

The purpose is to essentially choose what your argument is to be in regards to the question. Therefore, your paper should be based on your opinion. The only real glimpse of your own thought is when you state "As for me, I think that advertising makes our life better rather than not. However, it must be regulated by 100 percents government laws." I would mention which side you are on close to the beginning of the essay.

Some people say that advertising encourages us to buy things we don't really need.
Try not to repeat the exact words in the original question, instead build upon what reasons you gave to support your argument.

There are some sentences that need grammar editing:

1) In other words, advertising inspires people that possessions of some things made them happy and successful.

2) Succumbed to these influences, people just have a kind of sickness because they can't stop. Everyone start buying more and more, but their needs grow too and it is never enough.

3) Advertising brings us some information and it is not always useless torrent of information. There things which can improve human's life, and after all we always can choose and decide by ourselves.

4) However, it must be regulated by 100 percents government laws.
Hi, yes I can help you with these things :)



1) In other words, product advertising influences people to think that possessions can make them happy, beautiful, and successful.

2) When a person succumbs to these messages, these feelings snowball, and it is like a sickness that spreads. Everyone starts buying more and more, thinking the products are necessary, but that leads to unhappiness when they try to live an expensive lifestyle.

3) Advertising has other purposes than promoting products, and it is not always useless torrent of information. Of course, many products are things that can improve human's life, or make everyday tasks more convenient. However, we always have a choice and can decide whether or not to make a purchase.

4) Ideally, the government would closely regulate advertisements, in order to protect citizens from being misled.



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