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IELTS: Advantages and disadvantages of wearing uniform


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Topic: Some companies and organizations require their employees to wear uniform. What are the advantages and disadvantages of wearing uniform?


Many companies and organizations demand their staff to wear uniform. Some people believe that wearing uniform has a lot of advantages, while others disagree. In fact, wearing uniform has both merits and demerits.

One of many advantages is that uniform can distinguish employees of different companies and organizations, so we are able to know practically which company or organization an employee is in. Indeed, uniform is a representation of a company or an organization. Another good point of wearing uniform is that it can promote the brands of the companies and the names of the organizations to be known by more people. Moreover, there is a strong bond between staff who wear ....



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Also, I would like to get some ideas for another essay topic. That topic is : some people believe that tourists should accept social and environmental responsibility, while others believe that tourists should not accept any responsibility at all. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
I would like to know what tourists' social responsibility is.
Apr 24, 2011, 04:51am   #
Many companies and organizations demand their staff to wear uniform. Some people believe that wearing uniform has a lot of advantages, while others disagree. In fact, wearing uniform has both merits and demerits.

One of many advantages is that wearing uniform can distinguish employees of different companies and organizations, so we are able to know practically which company or organization an employee is in. Indeed, uniform is a representation of a company or an organization. Another good point of wearing uniform is that it can promote the brands of the companies and the names of the organizations to be known by more people. Moreover, there is a strong bond between staff who wears the same uniform. Actually, uniform is able to encourage employees in a company or an organization to cooperate and work hard together because they feel that they belong to the same group of people and are not left out.

Everything in the world is like the double-edge weapon and wearing uniform is not an exceptional, despite many plus sides. One minus side is that some workers do not want to wear uniform that their companies or organizations require them to wear. Therefore, they might feel uneasy at work and their productivity might decline.

In conclusion, the advantages of wearing uniform outweigh the disadvantages. As far as I am concerned, I think the demerit of wearing uniform at work can be avoided if there is a discussion about the kind of uniform that makes both the manager and the staff in the company or the organization satisfactory
Apr 24, 2011, 11:20am   #
It is a good essay with a good format, and variety of vocablary; however, there is something that needs to be corrected.
If you intent to take both two sides to discuss, advantages and disadvantages, you should provide more details for your second side "disadvantage".
for example, boring atomosphere without any new outfit in their work place.
Bahareh
Scientiana:
I would like to know what tourists' social responsibility is.

This is an important issue. Tourism is a great source of $$ in developing nations, so the whole culture changes to accommodate tourism. Also, tourists litter everywhere. Here is something to help you.... search google for this: GLOBAL CODE OF ETHICS
FOR TOURISM.

Many companies and organizations demand require their staff to wear uniforms.

Some people believe that wearing a uniform has a lot of advantages, while others disagree.

In fact, wearing uniform has both merits and demerits.


Everything in the world is like the double-edged sword, and wearing uniforms is not an exception, despite many plus sides.

As far as I am concerned, I think the demerit of wearing uniform at work can be avoided if there is a discussion about the kind of uniform that will satisfy both the manager and the staff in the company or the organization.----That is a wise idea!!!!!!
May 23, 2011, 12:54am   #
Scientiana:
Topic: Some companies and organizations require their employees to wear uniform. What are the advantages and disadvantages of wearing uniform?


Many companies and organizations demand their staff to wear uniform. Some people believe that wearing uniform has a lot of advantages, while others disagree. In fact, wearing uniform has both merits and demerits.

One of many advantages is that uniform can distinguish employees of different companies and organizations, so we are able to know practically which company or organization an employee is in. Indeed, uniform is a representation of a company or an organization. Another good point of wearing uniform is that it can promote the brands of the companies and the names of the organizations to be known by more people. Moreover, there is a strong bond between staff who wear the same uniform. Actually, uniform is able to encourage employees in a company or an organization to cooperate and work hard together because they feel that they are belonging to the same group of people and are not left out.

Everything in the world is like the double-edge weapon and wearing uniform is not an exceptional, despite many plus sides. One minus side is that some workers do not want to wear uniform that their companies or organizations require them to wear. Therefore, they might feel uneasy at work and their productivity might declined.i am not sure.

In conclusion, the advantages of wearing uniform outweigh the disadvantages. As far as I am concerned, I think the demerit of wearing uniform at work can be avoided if there is a discussion about the kind of uniform that satisfy both the manager and the staff in the company or the organization.


very excerlent. but i think in very beginning you may talk more about the situation of the hot debate. i mean give readers some better undertanding of the topic.
HI Scientiana,

A well written essay but what I feel is that there is lack of ideas.You have to write examples and expand your ideas.I would like to add some ideas to improvise your essay and one more thing read a lot of books to improve your vocabulary.Learn new words by understanding the meaning.


1.It reduces distraction and increases the productivity-advantage.
2.Deprive the individuality and curb self expression-Disadvantage.

Hope my suggestions are helpful to you,
Many thanks,
Cheers,Vinu.
I have added the ideas that all those kinds people gave to me into this essay and I have improved it by giving more examples. Please help me to correct this new essay. Thanks in advance!

Topic: Some companies and organizations require their employees to wear uniform. What are the advantages and disadvantages of wearing uniform?

Nowadays, wearing uniform is an obligation in some companies and organizations. They demand their staff to wear uniform because they believe that it has a lot of advantages. However, some others disagree. In fact, wearing uniform has both merits and demerits.

One of many advantages is that wearing uniform can distinguish employees of different companies and organizations, so we are able to know practically which company or organization an employee is in. Indeed, uniform is a representation of a company or an organization. Another good point of wearing uniform is that it can promote the brands of the companies and the names of the organizations to be known by more people. Moreover, there is a strong bond between staff who wears the same uniform. Actually, uniform is able to encourage employees in a company or an organization to cooperate and work hard together because they feel that they belong to the same group of people and are not left out. In addition, wearing uniform at work will reduce distraction and increase productivity. Generally, people do not feel interested in looking at the clothes that are the same as their own, so they do not distract from their work and they might work harder. The last, but not least, is that wearing uniform will help those people who are indecisive about what clothes they should wear in their workplace. For example, a person may feel relax when he or she sees that he or she does not wear clothes which are lower standard than the other workers. Thus, every worker feel equal in their workplace.

Everything in the world is like the double-edge weapon and wearing uniform is not an exceptional, despite many plus sides. One minus side is that some workers do not want to wear uniform that their companies or organizations require them to wear. Therefore, they might feel uneasy at work and their productivity might decline. Additionally, wearing uniform limit self-expression and the individuality. For example, a person would like to wear clothes that are suitable for her, so she is able to show her beautiful figure, but she could not wear them due to the wearing-uniform rule of her company. Another disadvantage of wearing the same clothes in the company or organization is that people will be bored with their working atmosphere because everyone wears the same things.

In conclusion, the advantages of wearing uniform outweigh the disadvantages. As far as I am concerned, I think the demerit of wearing uniform at work can be avoided if there is a discussion about the kind of uniform that satify both the manager and the staff in the company or the organization.
Nowadays, wearing uniforms is an obligation in some companies and organizations.

They require their staff to wear uniforms, because...

Actually, a uniform policy is able to...

Everything in the world is like the double-edged sword, and wearing uniform is not an exception, despite many plus sides.

...the demerits of wearing uniform at work can be...

:-) Great job!!! I just made a few small changes here. Do you have questions about them?



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