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integration problems for people living abroad (%)

2 - Hi, Kindly find my help below; The bar chart illustrates many kinds of problems which people have when they...

Writing Feedbackirhame - Apr 11, 2015
justivy03
Apr 11, 2015
In the past, people usually stayed in one place throughout their life. These days, people often move

7 - Hi, jawahir .. i am tremendously enthusiastic about your writing here, while let me give you some suggestion. I hope...

Writing Feedbackmohjawahir - Apr 7, 2015
Liliy
Apr 11, 2015
Universities should accept equal numbers of male and female students in every subject.

3 - overall, i like your ideas^^.. i just write some corrections here, hope it helps^^ Some universities do not have equal...

Writing FeedbackMuhammadImho - Apr 10, 2015
ririchwang
Apr 11, 2015
Traffic jams - people should be attracted to use common transportation rather than using private car

2 - hope this helps

Writing Feedbackayeshy - Apr 11, 2015
ah_zafari
Apr 11, 2015
IELTS-Writing task 2: Accepting an equal proportion of degree students is looked at by the gender

2 - These days, some people believe that universities have accepted the proportion of student looking at their gender particularly between male and...

Writing FeedbackLiliy - Apr 10, 2015
EF_Jasmine
Apr 10, 2015
IELTS-Writing task - work for unemployed individuals outbalances the lack of jobs

4 - Ahh I see!

Writing FeedbackLiliy - Apr 9, 2015
EF_Jasmine
Apr 10, 2015
Proportional number of gender in education system

5 - I am going to go through your piece sentence by sentence with comments and suggestions in blue There are many...

Writing FeedbackAinunAlfatih - Apr 10, 2015
sblack
Apr 10, 2015
Some personal data about me, my family and plans for the future - Introducing myself

5 - Thank you for your correct the mistakes for me. I will try my best in the future. Do you the online...

Writing FeedbackSeven_Daly - Apr 6, 2015
Seven_Daly
Apr 10, 2015
Is watching television better for learning about another countries? Is there another way?

5 - Some suggestion for your writing : There are two questions and a task which ask your opinion about the...

Writing Feedbackirhame - Apr 7, 2015
AinunAlfatih
Apr 10, 2015
Smoking law that was inflicted on Quebec, use examples in relation to Jeremy Bentham

2 - Hi Geoff, Kindly find my help below; 2. (smoking law that was inflicted on Quebec, use examples in relation...

Writing FeedbackGeoff - May 28, 2009
justivy03
Apr 9, 2015
Journal essay (welfare state)

3 - Hi Geoff, Kindly find my help below; 1. Do you think that the state has a responsibility to provide...

Writing FeedbackGeoff - May 28, 2009
justivy03
Apr 9, 2015
Giving work to unemployed people is a good idea for better life in society.

3 - Hii, I have some discussion and suggestion for your writing, I hope it can help you. As such, according...

Writing FeedbackWindachan - Apr 9, 2015
fadlanmuzakki
Apr 9, 2015
As the media are growing, their influence are becoming more widely

2 - Hi, Kindly find my help below; Question: It is becoming more and more difficult to escape the influence...

Writing FeedbackAinunAlfatih - Apr 9, 2015
justivy03
Apr 9, 2015
Should young people choose their professions, or should their parents choose for them?

4 - Hi shintacandrade, Kindly find my help below; ******************* In your opinion, should young people choose their professions(, -...

Writing Feedbackshintacandrade - Apr 9, 2015
justivy03
Apr 9, 2015
Cheap Labour - allowing unemployed to work is a good way to help them to pass their poverty line

2 - 1) Strong 1st paragraph. Your position is clear. 2) 2nd paragraph- Make sure you change is to are, because you are talking about...

Writing FeedbackAinunAlfatih - Apr 9, 2015
lcturn87
Apr 9, 2015
Evaluation of today's urbanization. Are modern buildings ruin our cities or towns?

8 - Overall it is a good essay as you have tried to cover all point of your thesis statement in your body...

Writing FeedbackStacy Handayani - Apr 7, 2015
akhfan
Apr 9, 2015
IELTS: Should unemployed people be made to work for their benefit payments?

3 - Some suggestion for your writing : 1. First, unemployed people will be productive. They will produce money to fulfill their...

Writing FeedbackFirda Umairoh - Apr 9, 2015
AinunAlfatih
Apr 9, 2015
Is the criminality among youngsters caused by the lack of the social and emotional learning?

4 - in my opinion, your writing is excellent, however, it will be better if you use more complex sentences

Writing Feedbackmumtazdinar - Apr 3, 2015
salindri
Apr 9, 2015
The current phenomenon of purchasing books online

5 - [[Topic is online shopping for books is increasing popular.]] Nowadays, life is busier. So, I agree that online shopping for...

Writing Feedbackkulina - Apr 6, 2015
EF_Carol
Apr 9, 2015
Is there anything we can learn about another country by visiting it, instead of watching programmes?

4 - Hallo, intiaiqbal92, your writing is really good. I just have a few correction here:

Writing Feedbackintiaiqbal92 - Apr 7, 2015
Firda Umairoh
Apr 9, 2015
Choosing profession for a young people - IELTS-Writing task 2

3 - Thank you Mr.eddies for your suggestion, it can be useful for me to improve my writing. How about this...

Writing FeedbackLiliy - Apr 8, 2015
Liliy
Apr 9, 2015
Nowadays, advanced buildings adorn many places in a country.

6 - Merged: discuss about modern buildings impacts in towns and cities! Some people say that modern buildings are ugly and...

Writing Feedbackirhame - Apr 7, 2015
irhame
Apr 9, 2015
Can living in the same location make people close to their family and friends? Isn't that boring?

4 - Merged: merits and demerits of staying in one place and moving around in several different places in the past,...

Writing Feedbackirhame - Apr 7, 2015
irhame
Apr 9, 2015
People should learn other country culture from their own experience, rather than just by watching TV

4 - as to have a high-rated achievement there is no verb there is still sort of things they cannot find by...

Writing Feedbackririchwang - Apr 8, 2015
irhame
Apr 9, 2015
There are many ways to know about other countries - neither only by watching TV programmes nor films

9 - Hi Tuthy, let me give you some correction here .. i hope that can improve your writing. Stay...

Writing Feedbackthutyedaniel - Apr 7, 2015
Liliy
Apr 9, 2015
In the past, people lived in the same places since they just born until died.

9 - On the other hand, people today always move to other places for living. This is the best way for them to...

Writing Feedbackthutyedaniel - Apr 7, 2015
irhame
Apr 9, 2015
Evaluation of sample introductions for some essay questions.

5 - one of best ways to know all the customs immediately

Writing FeedbackFaisal_Aceh - Apr 7, 2015
irhame
Apr 9, 2015
Lower crime rate and bigger nation's income are the main benefits of employment non working people.

2 - Hi, Imho .. i am tremendously enthusiastic about your essay here, nevertheless let me give you a few correction here....

Writing FeedbackMuhammadImho - Apr 9, 2015
Liliy
Apr 9, 2015
How to behave in doing business internationally? An example - saying "No" in different cultures.

4 - [Link / Image / Video / Quote]

Writing FeedbackWindachan - Apr 8, 2015
Firda Umairoh
Apr 9, 2015
Nowadays the big cities are endeavoring to provide their inhabitants with more magnificent buildings

5 - Merged: Modern buildings are ugly and are ruining towns or add variety in a city. Some people say that...

Writing Feedbackintiaiqbal92 - Apr 7, 2015
intiaiqbal92
Apr 9, 2015
It's easy to turn into a dictator but it's difficult to preserve as a good leader - leadership essay

3 - Hello @Yoss, your essay is excellent, but your introduction is too bulky. I think better you do not mention some examples...

Writing FeedbackYoss - Mar 24, 2015
intiaiqbal92
Apr 9, 2015
Families who do not send their children to government-financed schools should not be required to pay

4 - Public school are managed by government. The fee of public school is quite affordable. Majority of students studying in public school...

Writing Feedbackstriker - Apr 8, 2015
Windachan
Apr 9, 2015
Trending of high class building

4 - Towns and cities having various imposing buildings have become trend nowadays. For some people, this condition can grab public attention as...

Writing FeedbackIqbalThemi - Apr 7, 2015
Stacy Handayani
Apr 9, 2015
Source of information choice - Learning by Watching or Learning by Visiting?

5 - Here are some points; Television programmes and films are the greatest source of information for people (I like the way you...

Writing FeedbackStacy Handayani - Apr 7, 2015
eddies
Apr 9, 2015
Around the world in 101 days with Semester at Sea!!

3 - Hi, let me check your essay grammatically^^ .. overall, it's good but you should reduce writing a long sentence as it's...

Writing Feedbackhyphen2013 - Apr 8, 2015
ririchwang
Apr 9, 2015
I like to cook myself - homemade food are healthy, low cost, and it's just my hobby!

2 - Hallo, Ladansh. Your writing essay is good, but i think it is too general. I'll recommend you to write this:...

Writing Feedbackladansh - Apr 8, 2015
Firda Umairoh
Apr 9, 2015
Learning about foreign countries by watching and travelling

4 - Well IqbalThemi, There's a huge difference with just watching movies so you learn about a country to going there, being...

Writing FeedbackIqbalThemi - Apr 7, 2015
justivy03
Apr 9, 2015
Young people have a right to choose suitable profession due to their own will

3 - Thank you very much for your suggestion, it is very beneficial for me to improve my writing skill

Writing FeedbackMuhammadImho - Apr 8, 2015
MuhammadImho
Apr 8, 2015
Young people know best their natural skills and it is better when a future job is selected by them

3 - Thank you Ms. ES_Jasmine. That's all nice corrections for me. It is beneficial to improve my writing skills.

Writing FeedbackWindachan - Apr 8, 2015
Windachan
Apr 8, 2015
In different parts of the world kids are involved in some paid jobs, but it is harmful to them.

4 - Thanks for the suggestions.

Writing Feedbackcldales - Apr 8, 2015
cldales
Apr 8, 2015
Children, in accordance with their passion, understand better what jobs are more suitable for them.

4 - A better future for children has proved elusive. As such, young people should be driven to make important decision about...

Writing FeedbackFirda Umairoh - Apr 8, 2015
eddies
Apr 8, 2015
Risks and Benefits of Single-Sex Class

2 - Paragraph 1: The first sentence I would just change to "will be deprived of learning" and "they will have less...

Writing Feedbackashleyvaldez - Apr 6, 2015
lcturn87
Apr 8, 2015
Ethic and doing business internationally

5 - [Link / Image / Video / Quote]

Writing FeedbackMuhammadImho - Apr 8, 2015
Liliy
Apr 8, 2015
In order to avoid confusion of difference behaviour, many companies have developed a guideline

3 - International business activities are where people from different cultural background exchanges goods and services in a timeless world. Here, international people...

Writing FeedbackFirda Umairoh - Apr 8, 2015
eddies
Apr 8, 2015
In today's world the high class buildings become a landmark for each town and city.

5 - Nowadays ( as the common rule, you need to put a comma in between) high class buildings could be as a...

Writing Feedbackthutyedaniel - Apr 7, 2015
eddies
Apr 8, 2015
Some people say that modern buildings are ugly and are ruining our towns and cities

5 - Merged: modern buildings are ugly and ruining our towns and cities Some people say that modern buildings are ugly...

Writing Feedbackmohjawahir - Apr 7, 2015
mohjawahir
Apr 8, 2015
Staying in one location has benefits, but it will not outshine the merits of living in many areas

8 - Therefore, I would argue that even though living in one location gives benefit benefits, it will not outshine the advantages of...

Writing FeedbackIqbalThemi - Apr 7, 2015
mohjawahir
Apr 8, 2015
Merits and Demerits of Nomadic Lifestyle

5 - Hi, handaiani,... your essay is great but I have few comment for correcting.... A nomadic lifestyle is becoming more popular...

Writing FeedbackStacy Handayani - Apr 7, 2015
IqbalThemi
Apr 8, 2015
Now it is almost impossible to avoid the influence of the media on our lives

4 - give me like and thumb when you think my comment is helpful :)

Writing FeedbackWindachan - Apr 7, 2015
fadlanmuzakki
Apr 8, 2015
Once people grew up in one place, now it is changing. Staying in one place or moving around oftenly?

5 - Hi cwang, your writing is excellent, but I have some suggest for your writing. Growing up in the same place...

Writing Feedbackririchwang - Apr 7, 2015
IqbalThemi
Apr 8, 2015
Should children be educated during their free time?

2 - Hii, Auntum_waltz, I have several discussion and suggestion for your writing, I hope these can help you. I am...

Writing Feedbackautumn_waltz - Apr 8, 2015
fadlanmuzakki
Apr 8, 2015
Volkswagen Passat - the car description

3 - [Link / Image / Video / Quote]

Writing FeedbackVarlamow - Apr 7, 2015
Windachan
Apr 8, 2015
Life now is better than it was 100 year ago. Agree or disagree?

6 - Thanks a lot for all of your feedback. It helps so much.

Writing FeedbackFirda Umairoh - Apr 7, 2015
Firda Umairoh
Apr 8, 2015
Once people experience puberty they are potentially be able to produce children.

8 - @Stacey: Svetlana is really good at writing, but I'm not his/her teacher :)) I'm an English learner too :)

Writing Feedbackah_zafari - Mar 27, 2015
ah_zafari
Apr 8, 2015
People's lives are more preferable nowadays than a century ago?

4 - Please note that studies related to 'global warming' have recently changed so if you quote a source from 2012 it's most...

Writing Feedbackshintacandrade - Apr 7, 2015
EF_Stacey
Apr 7, 2015
There are more opportunities today to buy a book. We can get each one even without leaving our home.

3 - Thank you very much for the advice and assistance.I will deploy and make it better. Thank you again.

Writing FeedbackKwang - Apr 7, 2015
Kwang
Apr 7, 2015
Observing children copy the watched parents - IELTS Sample Essay

3 - It should be stressed that parents, not adults, are responsible for their children. Humans are not a herd of cows who...

Writing FeedbackmMaftuna - Apr 7, 2015
Rich Monte
Apr 7, 2015
Ielts: mix of both - competition and cooperation should be taught to the student

3 - Thanks for correcting my flaws. I will work on them

Writing Feedbackzeref - Apr 7, 2015
zeref
Apr 7, 2015
Over-grazing of agricultural land was the main cause of its degradation in the nineteen nineties.

2 - What you have written about is the actual pie graph shown. The pie graph gives us all of the information that...

Writing FeedbackBambusaMX - Apr 7, 2015
ransom2092
Apr 7, 2015
Horse Therapy for People with Limitations

2 - You have very good writing. Please read your paper again so you can see how the changes help. 1) 1st...

Writing FeedbackStamas - Apr 5, 2015
lcturn87
Apr 7, 2015
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