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Line graph; percentage of radio and television spectators around the clock in UK in year 1992

1 - Firstly, what a hard task. What is this task for? Besides, my tips : 1. I would prefer...

Writing FeedbackKsangha - Sep 21, 2014
sa1na
Sep 21, 2014
TOEFL: People benefit more from coming computers into their lives; pros outweigh cons

3 - Of course it is better to include some negative information too. However you should concentrate on your position and proving...

Writing Feedbackhamedmas - Sep 20, 2014
xatutik
Sep 21, 2014
GRE: The replacement of any leader should be considered individually

2 - Thanks Louisa, it is so pleasant to hear such a words from you :) I will revise my essay following your...

Writing Feedbackxatutik - Sep 20, 2014
xatutik
Sep 21, 2014
IELTS- celebrities set a bad example to young people?

1 - Sam, while your paper does have grammar errors, we can't begin to fix those until you have perfected the content of...

Writing FeedbackSAM2014 - Sep 21, 2014
vangiespen
Sep 21, 2014
Learning Economics? It's not only useful for high school students but also for all educated persons.

2 - thank you very much

Writing Feedbacknmshafie - Sep 19, 2014
nmshafie
Sep 21, 2014
IELTS: Writing Task 2- Crime in The World

3 - To sum up, crime still occurs almost in all parts of the globe. The crime happens with same cases even new...

Writing FeedbackMann_ms - Sep 20, 2014
SAM2014
Sep 21, 2014
"A little love, a little pain, a little work then it's all over" - DEATH

3 - I guess you write it by mobile phone or there are something wrong when you copy it from your file.

Writing Feedbackylarial - Sep 20, 2014
SAM2014
Sep 21, 2014
Increase in flights - IELTS WRITING TASK 2.

2 - Welcome Rakhmat! Let me see if I can help you out :-) - Such as? Mention some problems...

Writing FeedbackRakhmat - Sep 20, 2014
vangiespen
Sep 21, 2014
TOEFL: "My shy girlfriend" - people should be honest

11 - oh yeah:) thank you

Writing Feedbacknickyzhi - Sep 17, 2014
nickyzhi
Sep 21, 2014
TOEFL: The reasons of keeping our old friends

2 - Thank you for your suggestions. I wondered how the title has been changed to that sentence. The correct question is...

Writing Feedbackbeginner1010 - Sep 20, 2014
beginner1010
Sep 20, 2014
IELTS: Arts are crucial to government to gain successful incomes by some events

3 - You wrote well. Here I do a slight suggestion. I suggest you to omit "be" with the strong verbs to clear...

Writing FeedbackAnfalia - Sep 18, 2014
SHanafi
Sep 20, 2014
[IELTS Task 1] Strategic area for a new school in the town of Canterbury.

3 - Hello, tiaDS You made a little mistake, please separate your overview with the introduction. where is the place of...

Writing FeedbacktiaDS - Aug 28, 2014
SHanafi
Sep 20, 2014
IELTS: Climate change is a threat for the earth regardless of people's actions.

3 - I on his side, please put a space between your paragraph. This a bulky sentence and contain the...

Writing FeedbackAnfalia - Sep 19, 2014
SHanafi
Sep 20, 2014
Ielts: it is necessary that parents should be obliged to protect their offspring by vaccination

8 - Breaking your idea here into some sentences.. A possible suggestion A medical research proves that children with the...

Writing Feedbackthu van nguyen - Aug 9, 2014
SHanafi
Sep 20, 2014
IELTS: Regulation regarding advertisements' unnecessary impact on people's lives

6 - It doesn't give any value to your conclusion. I am too keen using a conclusion signal. Probably you can use...

Writing Feedbackamalxavier - Aug 20, 2014
SHanafi
Sep 20, 2014
The factor of sense of fulfillment is more important than the factor of salary; Mother Teresa

1 - Many people prefer a job with high salary. Although the salary is one of the important factors to a good job,...

Writing Feedbackwahdee489 - Sep 20, 2014
beginner1010
Sep 20, 2014
I went to Thailand this summer for a school service trip - Narrative Essay

6 - For the first sentence, instead of directly restating the question, try to change it so that you are answering...

Writing FeedbackGilchrist2014 - Sep 16, 2014
m924
Sep 20, 2014
"Treaty No.7" - The TV show that I like the most

1 - hey neoy, There are some clear faults in your grammar, I'll pick it out :) how about...

Writing Feedbacknguyentuandhmdc - Sep 20, 2014
nickyzhi
Sep 20, 2014
'The argument draws conclusion based on poor and insufficient information'; "Woven baskets"

4 - So familiar with the prompt, because I just pass my GRE exam several months ago. I have some good review...

Writing Feedbackxatutik - Sep 19, 2014
nickyzhi
Sep 20, 2014
IELTS: Balance Diet; people should pay attention to other aspects for their health

3 - My promt is "Eating a balance diet is the most important factor for a health life" To what extent do...

Writing FeedbackMann_ms - Sep 19, 2014
Mann_ms
Sep 20, 2014
GRE issue- Should society try to save every plant and animal species regardless of needed resources?

1 - Hi Dunguyen, your essay is pretty good. Your position and reasoning are clear and logical. adapt to environmental...

Writing Feedbackdunguyen - Sep 19, 2014
xatutik
Sep 20, 2014
It is vital for arts to have prolific conditions to thrive and be accessible for people

6 - some fields if I'm not mistaken it should be plural. good luck! :)

Writing Feedbackxatutik - Sep 18, 2014
Anfalia
Sep 20, 2014
Keeping dogs and cats as companion. How it influences ownership and the community?

3 - in the fact, pets not only can be friendly animal but also dangerous for people. the parallel structure between...

Writing FeedbackYULIS - Sep 19, 2014
Anfalia
Sep 20, 2014
Life is easier? Positive view about everything always help us for having a good life in every times.

2 - To write an introductory paragraph, you have to show background information and thesis. For this moment, you did. Yet, we...

Writing FeedbackKian1378 - Sep 19, 2014
eddies
Sep 20, 2014
IELTS: Without communication technology and transport, the foundation of modern life will crumple

1 - - Solid introduction with a good thesis statement. This essay is off to a very good start. However, I seem...

Writing Feedbackcy20070324 - Sep 19, 2014
vangiespen
Sep 19, 2014
IELTS Essay Task 1: 'popularity peak took place in 1980' - Teenage vegeterians

4 - * based on my understanding.. In IELTS writing task, if you use overall, you don't need write...

Writing Feedbackmilamiller - Aug 19, 2014
Mann_ms
Sep 19, 2014
IELTS: government should focus on investment both of arts and public service; equally important

5 - Hello) Financial support from government plays an important role for developing country. Many arguments reveal that sponsorship from government should...

Writing FeedbackMann_ms - Sep 18, 2014
Abdurasul
Sep 19, 2014
Ielts task II : Vegetarianism vs meat-containing diets.

5 - Thank you for your feedbacks)))

Writing FeedbackAbdurasul - Sep 4, 2014
Abdurasul
Sep 19, 2014
What should kids do when parents are too busy to accompany their child? TOEFL EXAM

7 - Focus on your beginning and conclusion. Your beginning was not abrupt which is good. But the conclusion is not upto the...

Writing FeedbackAdamtong - Sep 15, 2014
NoumanAhmad
Sep 19, 2014
If the students study the same nation curriculum then they can equally perform in all the field

NEW - A nation should require all of its students to study the same national curriculum until they enter college. Write a...

Writing Feedbackkumawatakki - Sep 19, 2014
'Modern time makes all people busy with their job' - how to solve traffic problem?

1 - Yulis, can you clarify the prompt for me? I just need to get an idea of what the prompt requires you...

Writing FeedbackYULIS - Sep 19, 2014
vangiespen
Sep 19, 2014
What life would be like without the internet?

3 - Truc, while you presented a good discussion. I believe that in order to answer this essay, you should merely look to...

Writing FeedbackTrucMai - Sep 19, 2014
vangiespen
Sep 19, 2014
[IELTS Task 2] Pollution and damage of environment are resulted from a country developing.

6 - In the one hand, the development in poverty country can effect environment. A developing country adheres to its principles to establish...

Writing FeedbacktiaDS - Sep 4, 2014
YULIS
Sep 19, 2014
Theme : about alternative medicine treatment and dangerous risk from it

8 - thanks sir...i'll try to make it better

Writing FeedbackYULIS - Sep 17, 2014
YULIS
Sep 19, 2014
Working for the same or different company for all life. Discuss both view and give opinion (IELTS)

2 - kttrung, the essay is asking you compare the advantages and disadvantages of working with the same company for life, or constantly...

Writing Feedbackkttrung - Sep 18, 2014
vangiespen
Sep 18, 2014
Once I was; now I am

3 - I thought that I would wake up at 8.15 and will each exam center by 8.50. That is reach, not...

Writing FeedbackNoumanAhmad - Sep 18, 2014
NoumanAhmad
Sep 18, 2014
TOEFL essay: A good shopping center can decrease our effort for shopping.

2 - thank you for your suggestions. I always thought that I should discuss only one side of the topic. I try...

Writing Feedbackamirtaghavi - Sep 17, 2014
amirtaghavi
Sep 18, 2014
I helped Tony - this event marked my transition to the adulthood

1 - Mantoes, you must be commended on the way that you developed your story. From the first paragraph onwards, I felt totally...

Writing FeedbackMantoes - Sep 18, 2014
vangiespen
Sep 18, 2014
The best gift for a child? Books help to learn more skills such as pronouncing and reading

3 - In conclusion , a book is the very best gift to give to a child since that's when he or she...

Writing Feedbacksara waled - Sep 17, 2014
m924
Sep 18, 2014
A leader should admit if they made a bad decision? Toefl exam.

12 - conviction!that's the word. sometimes,I just cannot figure out another way to illustrate my point,even though i am not satisfied with...

Writing FeedbackAdamtong - Sep 16, 2014
Adamtong
Sep 18, 2014
'good mental and body conditions' - people have different interpretation of enjoyment; TOEFL

7 - Thank you for your great and helpful idea. I try to do my best

Writing FeedbackKian1378 - Sep 16, 2014
Kian1378
Sep 17, 2014
Assigning homework every day to students is necessary or not ?

5 - Thank you Lusia:) Definitely :) I change it again ad now I ithink my essay is well-done :)...

Writing Feedbackhamedmas - Sep 17, 2014
hamedmas
Sep 17, 2014
TOEFL: different types of tasks endow more colors to our life

5 - thank you for your commend !! I'll try a longer conclusion :)

Writing Feedbacknickyzhi - Sep 16, 2014
nickyzhi
Sep 17, 2014
Average distance in miles traveled by English person per year 1985 and 2000.

2 - Including the picture of the graph is a must. The picture helps readers understand the logical order easily. Thanks...

Writing FeedbackEmma Le - Sep 17, 2014
eddies
Sep 17, 2014
IELTS Writting task 1: UK adolescents following a vegetarian diet.

7 - You write well. However, you need to pay particular attention to the appropriate language of change. Please allow me to describe...

Writing Feedbackvandon92 - Sep 15, 2014
eddies
Sep 17, 2014
While the wealthy nations are getting richer, developing countries are struggling with the poverty

4 - hey vangi, I'm curious how to quote other's essay and make comment? I can just label some...

Writing Feedbackd96nguyen - Sep 16, 2014
nickyzhi
Sep 17, 2014
IELTS: "CLIMATE CHANGE" - politicians should take a step to save our environment

4 - CLIMATE CHANGE IS NOW AN ACCEPTED THREAT TO OUR PLANET, BUT THERE IS NOT ENOUGH POLITICAL ACTION TO CONTROL EXCESSIVE CONSUMERISM...

Writing FeedbackYULIS - Sep 15, 2014
Pyon9x
Sep 17, 2014
Free time or money? Spending time with family brings more advantages for both workers and companies

3 - Omit base on the hours, so as to avoid writing redundancy. Everyone knows that wage is according the number of...

Writing Feedbackhamedmas - Sep 15, 2014
eddies
Sep 16, 2014
Writing Task 1 - IELTS Academic - Post-school qualification in Australia according to gender 1999

4 - If I were you, I prefer writing an overview paragraph instead of conclusion paragraph. Writing task 1 needs an...

Writing Feedbackbocahnakal - Sep 13, 2014
tiaDS
Sep 16, 2014
The main reason worldwide for agricultural land becoming less productive is over-grazing; IELTS

2 - A pie chart shows the information about some causes of agricultural degradation in the world and the table illustrates...

Writing Feedbackcoriandrum - Sep 16, 2014
tiaDS
Sep 16, 2014
Awareness among people about a healthier lifestyle leads to the need to look for a specific food

2 - Thanks

Writing Feedbackpriskeith - Sep 3, 2014
priskeith
Sep 16, 2014
John Wayne once said: "Tomorrow is the most important thing in life" - IELTS task

4 - to solve it, try to use synonym of these words or phrase, try to paraphrase, make another sentence which...

Writing FeedbackAshlyn - Sep 16, 2014
fikri
Sep 16, 2014
GRE: Nation's culture and traditions are mainly maintained and generated in major cities

2 - Thank you very very much for your comments and suggestions. In fact they are always very helpful :)

Writing Feedbackxatutik - Sep 16, 2014
xatutik
Sep 16, 2014
Modern technology, such as chemical fertilizer is dangerous to human health and local communities

7 - 1. Pay attention to use personal pronoun. 2. I worry to use many connectors will be overusing. 3. Some inappropriate...

Writing Feedbacknasir1112 - Sep 16, 2014
tiaDS
Sep 16, 2014
[Toefl] By excessive use of cars in the roads, the number of accident has increased.

6 - Thank you Dear Louisa.I understood how to use questions in my conclusion by the summery you have wrote....

Writing Feedbackhamedmas - Sep 13, 2014
hamedmas
Sep 16, 2014
TOEFL: Students would receive a better education if attending classes for 11 month of a year

5 - thank you xatu, may you get a good GRE score :-)

Writing Feedbacknickyzhi - Sep 11, 2014
nickyzhi
Sep 16, 2014
One of the dangerous threat to our planet is climate change - ielts task 2

1 - There are a number of sentence structure and grammar errors in the paper but we cannot address those problems until we...

Writing Feedbackwirawiri - Sep 15, 2014
vangiespen
Sep 15, 2014
Should we take action at once? 'patience have great range influence in our life'

5 - Mabel, don't worry. You will get to my level of writing through constant practice. So don't stop writing essays and more...

Writing FeedbackMabel Ye - Sep 12, 2014
vangiespen
Sep 15, 2014
Living in country or city? Answer depends on the ages, hobbies and gender of each person.

2 - I think the answer for this question depends on the ages , hobbies , and gender of each person....

Writing Feedbacksara waled - Sep 15, 2014
fikri
Sep 15, 2014
'Lack of proper education system' - fixing the existing gap between the rich and poor countries

1 - demand aid from the developed countries

Writing Feedbackderine - Sep 15, 2014
masghar
Sep 15, 2014
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