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IELTS Essay Task 1: 'popularity peak took place in 1980' - Teenage vegeterians

4 - * based on my understanding.. In IELTS writing task, if you use overall, you don't need write...

Writing Feedbackmilamiller - Aug 19, 2014
Mann_ms
Sep 19, 2014
IELTS: government should focus on investment both of arts and public service; equally important

5 - Hello) Financial support from government plays an important role for developing country. Many arguments reveal that sponsorship from government should...

Writing FeedbackMann_ms - Sep 18, 2014
Abdurasul
Sep 19, 2014
Ielts task II : Vegetarianism vs meat-containing diets.

5 - Thank you for your feedbacks)))

Writing FeedbackAbdurasul - Sep 4, 2014
Abdurasul
Sep 19, 2014
What should kids do when parents are too busy to accompany their child? TOEFL EXAM

7 - Focus on your beginning and conclusion. Your beginning was not abrupt which is good. But the conclusion is not upto the...

Writing FeedbackAdamtong - Sep 15, 2014
NoumanAhmad
Sep 19, 2014
If the students study the same nation curriculum then they can equally perform in all the field

NEW - A nation should require all of its students to study the same national curriculum until they enter college. Write a...

Writing Feedbackkumawatakki - Sep 19, 2014
'Modern time makes all people busy with their job' - how to solve traffic problem?

1 - Yulis, can you clarify the prompt for me? I just need to get an idea of what the prompt requires you...

Writing FeedbackYULIS - Sep 19, 2014
vangiespen
Sep 19, 2014
What life would be like without the internet?

3 - Truc, while you presented a good discussion. I believe that in order to answer this essay, you should merely look to...

Writing FeedbackTrucMai - Sep 19, 2014
vangiespen
Sep 19, 2014
[IELTS Task 2] Pollution and damage of environment are resulted from a country developing.

6 - In the one hand, the development in poverty country can effect environment. A developing country adheres to its principles to establish...

Writing FeedbacktiaDS - Sep 4, 2014
YULIS
Sep 19, 2014
Theme : about alternative medicine treatment and dangerous risk from it

8 - thanks sir...i'll try to make it better

Writing FeedbackYULIS - Sep 17, 2014
YULIS
Sep 19, 2014
Working for the same or different company for all life. Discuss both view and give opinion (IELTS)

2 - kttrung, the essay is asking you compare the advantages and disadvantages of working with the same company for life, or constantly...

Writing Feedbackkttrung - Sep 18, 2014
vangiespen
Sep 18, 2014
Once I was; now I am

3 - I thought that I would wake up at 8.15 and will each exam center by 8.50. That is reach, not...

Writing FeedbackNoumanAhmad - Sep 18, 2014
NoumanAhmad
Sep 18, 2014
TOEFL essay: A good shopping center can decrease our effort for shopping.

2 - thank you for your suggestions. I always thought that I should discuss only one side of the topic. I try...

Writing Feedbackamirtaghavi - Sep 17, 2014
amirtaghavi
Sep 18, 2014
I helped Tony - this event marked my transition to the adulthood

1 - Mantoes, you must be commended on the way that you developed your story. From the first paragraph onwards, I felt totally...

Writing FeedbackMantoes - Sep 18, 2014
vangiespen
Sep 18, 2014
The best gift for a child? Books help to learn more skills such as pronouncing and reading

3 - In conclusion , a book is the very best gift to give to a child since that's when he or she...

Writing Feedbacksara waled - Sep 17, 2014
m924
Sep 18, 2014
A leader should admit if they made a bad decision? Toefl exam.

12 - conviction!that's the word. sometimes,I just cannot figure out another way to illustrate my point,even though i am not satisfied with...

Writing FeedbackAdamtong - Sep 16, 2014
Adamtong
Sep 18, 2014
'good mental and body conditions' - people have different interpretation of enjoyment; TOEFL

7 - Thank you for your great and helpful idea. I try to do my best

Writing FeedbackKian1378 - Sep 16, 2014
Kian1378
Sep 17, 2014
Assigning homework every day to students is necessary or not ?

5 - Thank you Lusia:) Definitely :) I change it again ad now I ithink my essay is well-done :)...

Writing Feedbackhamedmas - Sep 17, 2014
hamedmas
Sep 17, 2014
TOEFL: different types of tasks endow more colors to our life

5 - thank you for your commend !! I'll try a longer conclusion :)

Writing Feedbacknickyzhi - Sep 16, 2014
nickyzhi
Sep 17, 2014
Average distance in miles traveled by English person per year 1985 and 2000.

2 - Including the picture of the graph is a must. The picture helps readers understand the logical order easily. Thanks...

Writing FeedbackEmma Le - Sep 17, 2014
eddies
Sep 17, 2014
IELTS Writting task 1: UK adolescents following a vegetarian diet.

7 - You write well. However, you need to pay particular attention to the appropriate language of change. Please allow me to describe...

Writing Feedbackvandon92 - Sep 15, 2014
eddies
Sep 17, 2014
While the wealthy nations are getting richer, developing countries are struggling with the poverty

4 - hey vangi, I'm curious how to quote other's essay and make comment? I can just label some...

Writing Feedbackd96nguyen - Sep 16, 2014
nickyzhi
Sep 17, 2014
IELTS: "CLIMATE CHANGE" - politicians should take a step to save our environment

4 - CLIMATE CHANGE IS NOW AN ACCEPTED THREAT TO OUR PLANET, BUT THERE IS NOT ENOUGH POLITICAL ACTION TO CONTROL EXCESSIVE CONSUMERISM...

Writing FeedbackYULIS - Sep 15, 2014
Pyon9x
Sep 17, 2014
Free time or money? Spending time with family brings more advantages for both workers and companies

3 - Omit base on the hours, so as to avoid writing redundancy. Everyone knows that wage is according the number of...

Writing Feedbackhamedmas - Sep 15, 2014
eddies
Sep 16, 2014
Writing Task 1 - IELTS Academic - Post-school qualification in Australia according to gender 1999

4 - If I were you, I prefer writing an overview paragraph instead of conclusion paragraph. Writing task 1 needs an...

Writing Feedbackbocahnakal - Sep 13, 2014
tiaDS
Sep 16, 2014
The main reason worldwide for agricultural land becoming less productive is over-grazing; IELTS

2 - A pie chart shows the information about some causes of agricultural degradation in the world and the table illustrates...

Writing Feedbackcoriandrum - Sep 16, 2014
tiaDS
Sep 16, 2014
Awareness among people about a healthier lifestyle leads to the need to look for a specific food

2 - Thanks

Writing Feedbackpriskeith - Sep 3, 2014
priskeith
Sep 16, 2014
John Wayne once said: "Tomorrow is the most important thing in life" - IELTS task

4 - to solve it, try to use synonym of these words or phrase, try to paraphrase, make another sentence which...

Writing FeedbackAshlyn - Sep 16, 2014
fikri
Sep 16, 2014
GRE: Nation's culture and traditions are mainly maintained and generated in major cities

2 - Thank you very very much for your comments and suggestions. In fact they are always very helpful :)

Writing Feedbackxatutik - Sep 16, 2014
xatutik
Sep 16, 2014
Modern technology, such as chemical fertilizer is dangerous to human health and local communities

7 - 1. Pay attention to use personal pronoun. 2. I worry to use many connectors will be overusing. 3. Some inappropriate...

Writing Feedbacknasir1112 - Sep 16, 2014
tiaDS
Sep 16, 2014
[Toefl] By excessive use of cars in the roads, the number of accident has increased.

6 - Thank you Dear Louisa.I understood how to use questions in my conclusion by the summery you have wrote....

Writing Feedbackhamedmas - Sep 13, 2014
hamedmas
Sep 16, 2014
TOEFL: Students would receive a better education if attending classes for 11 month of a year

5 - thank you xatu, may you get a good GRE score :-)

Writing Feedbacknickyzhi - Sep 11, 2014
nickyzhi
Sep 16, 2014
One of the dangerous threat to our planet is climate change - ielts task 2

1 - There are a number of sentence structure and grammar errors in the paper but we cannot address those problems until we...

Writing Feedbackwirawiri - Sep 15, 2014
vangiespen
Sep 15, 2014
Should we take action at once? 'patience have great range influence in our life'

5 - Mabel, don't worry. You will get to my level of writing through constant practice. So don't stop writing essays and more...

Writing FeedbackMabel Ye - Sep 12, 2014
vangiespen
Sep 15, 2014
Living in country or city? Answer depends on the ages, hobbies and gender of each person.

2 - I think the answer for this question depends on the ages , hobbies , and gender of each person....

Writing Feedbacksara waled - Sep 15, 2014
fikri
Sep 15, 2014
'Lack of proper education system' - fixing the existing gap between the rich and poor countries

1 - demand aid from the developed countries

Writing Feedbackderine - Sep 15, 2014
masghar
Sep 15, 2014
School curriculum - It should be optional for students to choose their favorite subjects to follow

2 - I try to rewrite this and hope that it's better than the first one. Please feel free to give your feedbacks....

Writing Feedbackboo2601 - Sep 14, 2014
boo2601
Sep 15, 2014
My girlfriend says that money is everything, but we need yet have more care about public recognition

3 - nickyzhi:When I ask my girlfriend which do you prefer, money or public recognition, she shouts:" Definitely money, money is everything!" Though...

Writing Feedbacknickyzhi - Sep 15, 2014
d96nguyen
Sep 15, 2014
'It was at that moment I realized my mistake' - sample from my autobiography; college essay

1 - - You should have put "It was then that I realized my mistake" at the end of the paragraph because...

Writing Feedbackjakobymeyers - Sep 14, 2014
vangiespen
Sep 15, 2014
Use of water in agriculture had increased dramatically from about 500 km3 (1900) to 3000 km3 in 2000

1 - The graph shows the worldwide (u should also point out that the data belong to two countries were specifically gathered...

Writing Feedbackworstmanz - Sep 14, 2014
ah_zafari
Sep 14, 2014
I'm a nice person that is always trying to help others. Self-evaluation for my teacher

4 - This is incomplete. What are you going to accomplish? Your goals? If that so, better state it clearly :)...

Writing Feedbackronny12 - Sep 14, 2014
niesaysi
Sep 14, 2014
Responsible tourists to preserve about culture and environment

4 - This is a very meticulous essay and then I suggest that you pay more attention concerning the overall arguments unless...

Writing Feedbacksyabring - Jan 3, 2014
profes
Sep 14, 2014
IELTS writing Task-2 which type of teaching is better indoor or outdoor

5 - I think that the introduction needs more reformulation to delver a good impression to the corrector at first you should make...

Writing Feedbackroop1 - Mar 3, 2014
profes
Sep 14, 2014
The law need the flexibility in each verdict of criminal behaviours

3 - this is a new idea in your essay. do not mention new idea in conclusion:)

Writing Feedbackd96nguyen - Sep 13, 2014
hamedmas
Sep 13, 2014
GRE Issue: Great nations should be assessed by general welfare of its people

1 - You have a solid start for your introduction. There is a slight problem though. You were supposed to agree or disagree...

Writing Feedbackdunguyen - Sep 12, 2014
vangiespen
Sep 13, 2014
[IELTS] - Earlier Technologies vs Recent Technologies

7 - It is because you did not include the essay's prompt, so I do not know whether you have paraphrased the...

Writing FeedbackJwala - Aug 16, 2014
eddies
Sep 13, 2014
GRE: Scandals are really a way of information spreading, yet it often spread unwarranted information

4 - Thanks :)

Writing Feedbackxatutik - Sep 11, 2014
xatutik
Sep 13, 2014
IELTS: 'Women absolutely dominate in two fields' - male and female teachers

7 - This is not clearly referred.It is also not fair while the graph shows man's worker outnumber women in University and...

Writing Feedbackmilamiller - Aug 16, 2014
SHanafi
Sep 13, 2014
which one have an important role in order to success of students in school?classmate or parents?

8 - Thank you vingie, It is regretful that I don't know how to give...

Writing Feedbackhamedmas - Sep 12, 2014
nickyzhi
Sep 13, 2014
TOEFL: to be an expert in one field is not better than to have broad knowledge of many subjects

4 - the flow interrupted while you are not explain what is the specific reasons effecting your sister struggle in...

Writing FeedbackDearbhailS - Aug 10, 2014
SHanafi
Sep 13, 2014
MONEY IS THE ROOT OF ALL EVIL

3 - I wonder that you can write the prompt and purpose of the essay. It is addressed for IELTS, TOEFL or perhaps...

Writing FeedbackMariuxi - Aug 11, 2014
SHanafi
Sep 12, 2014
GRE essay: Many important discoveries or creations are accidental

3 - omit the last placed comma. this sentence needs a conjunction. This sentence needs a conjunction.

Writing Feedbackasdsa111 - Aug 14, 2014
SHanafi
Sep 12, 2014
GRE; Welfare of the nation and the desire of corporations to maximize profits

2 - Personally I think you need a stronger thesis statement in the introductory paragraph. It is ambiguous which side you are taking...

Writing Feedbacksnowcones - Oct 21, 2013
dunguyen
Sep 12, 2014
Toefl - 'members can learn more' - live a life without any burdens

1 - - Sayes, before you offer your opinion on the matter, you need to first introduce the concept of group relationships...

Writing Feedbacksayes - Mar 31, 2014
vangiespen
Sep 12, 2014
Consequences to Uselessly Building in Wildlife/Natural Areas

1 - My first question would have to be, what essay format is this supposed to be in? I see you have in-text...

Writing Feedbackhalhante - Mar 4, 2013
vangiespen
Sep 12, 2014
Truth is most important factor in making a romantic relationship persistent

1 - - The debate about whether telling the truth is an important factor in any kind of relationship has been going...

Writing Feedbackm64 - Oct 20, 2013
vangiespen
Sep 12, 2014
TOEFL Essay: How does advertising influence people's behaviour?

4 - today's market a tight race Obviously, team and copywriters. However, we. (Write However,...

Writing FeedbackHaydi - Mar 23, 2014
eddies
Sep 12, 2014
People go to college because they need to learn more things about the world - TOEFL

3 - Well come to this forum :) Please do not use words repeatedly: try to use other substituted words such as...

Writing Feedbackinecula - Jun 13, 2013
hamedmas
Sep 12, 2014
TOEFL: Public health. Should government introduce a law or is it a personal issue?

6 - I'll present both a comment and some advice as to how you can better word the statement so that it can...

Writing FeedbackXiaokai Jin - Sep 11, 2014
vangiespen
Sep 12, 2014
[TOEFL] Parents are our teachers from the very early time in our life.

5 - Lian, I have the same problems with my essay writting as you do. Sometimes I even realize that I do know,...

Writing FeedbackLian Li - Sep 11, 2014
MarianaS
Sep 12, 2014
[TOEFL] 'Firstly, people want to have more knowledge' - why attend to college or university?

2 - :-) Thank you Vangiespen. You have helped me a lot. Thank you. And because I wrote my essays with time...

Writing FeedbackLian Li - Sep 11, 2014
Lian Li
Sep 12, 2014
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