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Advertisement makes us know what is the recent product available in the market; impact on our choice

3 - Hi there.. its not bad for the first essay, but you have to pay attention for some point like this :...

Writing Feedbackbassamfarah - Oct 8, 2014
Fardhani Putri
Oct 8, 2014
Ielts: Animal testing is used in important medical researches.

2 - Thank you for your response...

Writing FeedbackAbdurasul - Oct 7, 2014
Abdurasul
Oct 8, 2014
Academic Writing IELTS about numbers of computer users - graph

5 - Hi.. in your essay i didn't find about your position as agree or disagree so it is important if you...

Writing Feedbackbaj_roman - Oct 6, 2014
Fardhani Putri
Oct 8, 2014
TOEFL: In twenty years cars will be gradually exchanged into other transportation systems

1 - Jen, the sentiments that you tried to convey within your essay are very good. You only have a problem expressing yourself...

Writing FeedbackSmile_Jen - Oct 8, 2014
vangiespen
Oct 8, 2014
IELTS - Cinema viewers in the four various countries: India, Ireland, New Zealand and Japan

2 - A few details to share: The table chart illustrates the figures for cinema viewers for films in four different countries...

Writing Feedbackrubz_girl23 - Oct 7, 2014
eddies
Oct 8, 2014
Eeating food in home has many advantages for family relationship

4 - It is good but I think you can explain more about each of your reasons.

Writing FeedbackSmile_Jen - Oct 7, 2014
maryailt
Oct 8, 2014
Ielts: Parents should be more involved with their children's upbringing.

7 - please.... do not try to make my sentences correct if you are not sure!!!! Gbekil, yea,,,, you are absolutely right....

Writing Feedbackhandsome78boy - Oct 2, 2014
handsome78boy
Oct 7, 2014
"Hey my son Military writ came for you" - should national service be mandatory for young adults?

3 - Thank you so much for your help.I am just beginner but i hope that i will improve. i will include your...

Writing FeedbackKhusel - Oct 7, 2014
Khusel
Oct 7, 2014
Altruism and sacrifice - people donate money for a reason

1 - Vns, what is the prompt for the essay? I realize that it is a commentary on a previously assigned reading material...

Writing FeedbackVns9x - Oct 7, 2014
vangiespen
Oct 7, 2014
Experiencing is much more pivotal than reading a book because it is more realistic.

1 - Millions of people are reading books since it has numerous useful information to comprehend. Yet, the rest are always learning something...

Writing FeedbackVns9x - Oct 7, 2014
IHaile
Oct 7, 2014
A job should mean a job for life!

3 - Vns, you show a thorough understanding of the essay prompt and have managed to use very informative, logical, and analytical pieces...

Writing FeedbackVns9x - Oct 6, 2014
vangiespen
Oct 7, 2014
Teachers should not instill their social or political points to students.

2 - Maxine, you really presented a solid argument in support of your position . Even the way that you presented the restated...

Writing FeedbackMaxineee - Oct 7, 2014
vangiespen
Oct 7, 2014
Upward trend in the national and international call lines and the # of minutes in the mobile calls

1 - national and international fixed line, and mobiles that the two other classes (what?? I think here you have a...

Writing Feedbackrubz_girl23 - Oct 7, 2014
sa1na
Oct 7, 2014
IELTS: the advertisement aimed at children should be restricted or even banned

3 - Please, some more feedbacks...:)

Writing FeedbackAbdurasul - Oct 6, 2014
Abdurasul
Oct 7, 2014
A Revolutionary Mindset; cultural and political characteristics of revolutionary America

1 - The peoples of America have always been diverse. Our colonial settlers came from many different backgrounds, for various reasons, and this...

Writing Feedbackrichardjolly - Oct 6, 2014
rubz_girl23
Oct 7, 2014
It's certainly true that happiness is an essential component of every human life - IELTS

4 - Thank you for the feedback Vns9x! If I have time during the exam, I will add some more examples...

Writing Feedbackbayratak - Sep 30, 2014
bayratak
Oct 7, 2014
IELTS: established preparation at school to become good mother and father?

3 - Hi mate :D This paragraph is of many big ideas (a closer look at the red ones). I like if...

Writing FeedbackFardhani Putri - Oct 6, 2014
eddies
Oct 7, 2014
The increase in selecting to live individually helps people have a better life; some cons though

1 - Hello) I would like to give you my opinion about your essay:-) The usage of linking words is good,...

Writing FeedbackKalyn17992 - Oct 7, 2014
Abdurasul
Oct 7, 2014
"better things that are learned are contained in experiences" - experience vs books knowledge

1 - Your essay has a number of flaws that I will be addressing below. Please consider other ways of presenting the information...

Writing Feedbackshigaogui - Oct 7, 2014
vangiespen
Oct 7, 2014
IELTS Task 1 : Wheat exports

2 - Where the chart is ? Please re-check your content before uploading.

Writing FeedbacktiaDS - Oct 6, 2014
SHanafi
Oct 7, 2014
TOEFL: Make decision by myself or by parents.

2 - Thank you for your advice. It help me to improve English a lot.

Writing FeedbackYuuukily - Oct 6, 2014
Yuuukily
Oct 7, 2014
As the essential resource for people's lives, easier prepared food means easier to improve our lives

2 - Thanks for your reply, I find it's better for my essay. But I have a question about that. "the modern...

Writing FeedbackLittleCa - Oct 6, 2014
LittleCa
Oct 7, 2014
How is energy wasted in school?

1 - is a necessity and essential to modern life - I believe this has a slight grammatical problem- either you should change...

Writing FeedbackEst2k - Oct 6, 2014
sa1na
Oct 6, 2014
[IELTS] Cheap flights should not be discouraged

3 - - zjxhz, that is exactly what I was pointing out to you. You must always present a clear point of...

Writing Feedbackzjxhz - Oct 6, 2014
vangiespen
Oct 6, 2014
Marijuana - what it is to you? Rough Draft Compare and Contrast

2 - Greetings! Yes, it is a lot of information. However, it is imperative that it is this long so that I meet...

Writing FeedbackBrandonBritts - Oct 4, 2014
BrandonBritts
Oct 6, 2014
Sports facilities should be adopted parallel with sports contests and health events

1 - Kyrsten,excellent introduction even though you forgot to present your point of view. As you know the essay asks you...

Writing FeedbackKrysten Mai - Oct 6, 2014
vangiespen
Oct 6, 2014
IELTS- Should foreign visitors pay more than local visitors for tourist sites?

1 - Sam, I will revise and review your essay by showing you how the content can be improved. My comments will be...

Writing FeedbackSAM2014 - Oct 6, 2014
vangiespen
Oct 6, 2014
IELTS: fathers and mothers are used to set role models to their children

6 - why it is so obviously? You can give more explanations It seems wrong in terms of grammar.

Writing FeedbackAbdurasul - Sep 28, 2014
SAM2014
Oct 6, 2014
IELTS - Education should be considered as the most important factor in a country's success

13 - I think your argument here is weak. It seems that you are talking about people, rather than the success of...

Writing Feedbackphuoc - Sep 4, 2014
SAM2014
Oct 6, 2014
IELTS; having purpose of life and being helpful as the main factors to achieve happiness

3 - Hello ritairianti, Let me try to write an introductory paragraph which is in three aspects; an attention-grabbing...

Writing Feedbackritairianti - Oct 5, 2014
tiaDS
Oct 6, 2014
Drugs, alcohol and messy sex lives - Celebrities news has negative impacts on children; [IELTS]

9 - Thanks for your comment. Yes recently I have realized that maybe it is better to develop one idea further, instead...

Writing Feedbackzjxhz - Sep 15, 2014
zjxhz
Oct 6, 2014
IELTS-Task 2: children should take formal training to become good parents

4 - eddies your feedback is unique and professional. I will try to apply it in my next easy. Thank you...

Writing Feedbacklourance - Oct 5, 2014
lourance
Oct 6, 2014
Kobe vs Lebron? Lebron James is still the King of this basketball planet; Contrast essay

4 - it has to 750 plus words.

Writing FeedbackGilchrist2014 - Oct 4, 2014
Gilchrist2014
Oct 5, 2014
As a student I always prepared my own food - it is a considerably more expedient choice

3 - Gbekil, the only advice I can give you is to keep reading English materials and watching English films and...

Writing Feedbackgbekil - Oct 5, 2014
vangiespen
Oct 5, 2014
Naturtint vs. Tom's of Maine - Compare and Contrast 2 advertisements

3 - A few more suggestions to polish the essay :-) - that made Tom's... -... scene for the product....

Writing Feedbackbehendrix - Oct 2, 2014
vangiespen
Oct 5, 2014
There are no such things as freedom and security without independence - importance in your life

1 - There are no such things as freedom and security without independence. It is simply impossible. You cannot live freely and secured...

Writing FeedbackVns9x - Oct 5, 2014
IHaile
Oct 5, 2014
Our rights as people define who we are as individuals - SAT ESSAY; CENSORSHIP

1 - Our rights as people define who are we are as individuals. Our individual rights in society allow us to express our...

Writing Feedbackboston1002 - Oct 5, 2014
IHaile
Oct 5, 2014
Do you want do everything by your own hand without expecting to rely on somebody? Work on your own!

6 - PLEASE DO NOT START A NEW THREAD ON THE SAME TOPIC - CONTINUE IN THE OLD ONE INSTEAD! Attached on...

Writing FeedbackVns9x - Oct 5, 2014
Vns9x
Oct 5, 2014
Watching television together makes communication among friends and family stronger

4 - i will give you some patern : 1. introduction you should paraphrasing this issue, and write clearly with two sentences...

Writing Feedbackgbekil - Oct 3, 2014
ritairianti
Oct 5, 2014
All schools have got an aim to prepare their students to be a professional individual of the society

2 - Thanks a lot. I appreciate it. How much score could I get from this essay in GRE ?

Writing FeedbackFuadAzeri - Oct 5, 2014
FuadAzeri
Oct 5, 2014
There are three main things that matter to me: God, family, and country. Stanford Essay

2 - Patriot, while you do present very good examples of things that matter to you, there is a big problem with your...

Writing Feedbackpatriot1776 - Oct 4, 2014
vangiespen
Oct 4, 2014
Security vs freedom - living freely is much more important than security.

1 - Vns, while you offer a very good argument in support of your stand, you have failed to recognize the most important...

Writing FeedbackVns9x - Oct 4, 2014
vangiespen
Oct 4, 2014
I think, no one can't live these days without a mobile phone and a computer.

3 - rokajo, before I comment on your essay as a whole, I feel that you need to be informed about how we...

Writing Feedbackrokajo5 - Oct 4, 2014
vangiespen
Oct 4, 2014
I was only thirteen at the time but old enough to understand that Leukemia was cancerous; UC essay

3 - Wow! Can I just say that your introduction was so unexpected? I loved your essay. It really pulled me in and...

Writing FeedbackTeeddy - Oct 3, 2014
eldubb
Oct 4, 2014
What are the advantages and disadvantages of traveling by air?

4 - Thank you for your comment. It really helps me. That was the first essay in my life so I just don't...

Writing FeedbackKristy Nguyen - Oct 3, 2014
Kristy Nguyen
Oct 4, 2014
TOEFL: Pets not only can be our best and helpful friends but they also bring happiness for us.

3 - yes it is better

Writing Feedbackmaryailt - Oct 4, 2014
maryailt
Oct 4, 2014
My Castle - it all started from one brick. This is the place I feel comfortable in.

1 - KM, I can see that you are trying to go for an abstract description of the place where you feel comfortable...

Writing FeedbackKM97 - Oct 4, 2014
vangiespen
Oct 4, 2014
Mahatma Gandhi, is the most important spiritual guide in contemporary world; important world leader

3 - good advise thank you very much

Writing Feedbackmaryailt - Oct 4, 2014
maryailt
Oct 4, 2014
'For many years the city of Grandview has provided annual funding for the Grandview Symphony'; GRE

2 - Thank you so much for your comments dear Tbontb. I will fix all of the mistakes.

Writing Feedbackpeyman_np - Oct 3, 2014
peyman_np
Oct 4, 2014
motives of people applying for work / forms of transport used for journey - IELTS Task 1

3 - Thanks you bros! I think that before writing two detailed paragraphs, I have mentioned an overall trend as an alternative to...

Writing Feedbackvincentfreeman - Oct 3, 2014
vincentfreeman
Oct 3, 2014
Too much attention on small things!

3 - Vns, you can add more to this introduction so that you can strengthen your opinion on the matter. Remember the...

Writing FeedbackVns9x - Oct 3, 2014
vangiespen
Oct 3, 2014
Response to an article "Struggle for perfection"

2 - Thanks a lot. That really means to me.

Writing FeedbackNoumanAhmad - Oct 3, 2014
NoumanAhmad
Oct 3, 2014
The first and foremost consideration is to be able obtain a stable job, satisfaction would be next..

1 - - William, you forgot to introduce the topic statement prior to entering your full discussion. Without the topic statement, your...

Writing Feedbackwilliam731 - Oct 3, 2014
vangiespen
Oct 3, 2014
Zoos may not act as the best interest of animals since they are profit earning entities.

2 - Thank you for your correction. I agree with your other comments but I think "whose" is used to describe...

Writing Feedbackwilliam731 - Oct 2, 2014
william731
Oct 3, 2014
Internet is the most considerable invention due to its simplicity of gaining new knowledge.

5 - As analysed above/ For many reasons mentioned above, I consider Internet is the THE most significant invention ever/...

Writing FeedbackVns9x - Oct 1, 2014
vincentfreeman
Oct 3, 2014
The content of the Internet controlled by a single powerful global agency?

3 - Thanks a lot :)

Writing Feedbackchucnt - Oct 2, 2014
chucnt
Oct 3, 2014
IELTS: children should studying hard or playing sport? Both can improve their future

6 - It is always good to simplify the prompt:Should children study hard at school, instead of spending time to play sports?....

Writing Feedbackritairianti - Sep 28, 2014
eddies
Oct 2, 2014
'health is a primary need' - alternative forms of medicine

7 - Do not commence your essay with those words such as i agree or disagree, save it for the conclusion :D

Writing Feedbackwirawiri - Sep 23, 2014
Vns9x
Oct 2, 2014
Modern Technology is creating a single world culture?

3 - woow, you so keep up to date I think :D, This is a nice idea to speak about recent...

Writing Feedbackhamedmas - Oct 1, 2014
hamedmas
Oct 2, 2014
IELTS writing task 2: Opinions about a four-year high school education proposal

4 - Oh, that really surprised me that my essay is high assessed like that. Thanks you very much guys!!! I hope...

Writing Feedbackvincentfreeman - Oct 1, 2014
vincentfreeman
Oct 2, 2014
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