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Does a person's character determine that person's success in life ?

2 - Thanks for help

Writing FeedbackAnouar - Aug 20, 2014
Anouar
Aug 21, 2014
IELTS: Athletes are very magnificent and important role models for people in their young ages.

4 - This is a poor beggining :( You should begin your essay with a catchy sentence that is meaningful and...

Writing Feedbacksoon_Ielts - Aug 9, 2014
dumi
Aug 21, 2014
TOEFL: The Face-to-Face communication makes it easy to understand emotion senses.

6 - As With the rapid development of technology, many communication tools make have made it easy easier for us to communicate...

Writing Feedbackhamedmas - Aug 17, 2014
dumi
Aug 21, 2014
IELTS: The earlier ages for learning the second language the better

4 - Nowadays, you can find every parents lookSing forward to plan teaching a foreign language for their children at early ages. Some...

Writing Feedbackzovaa - Aug 20, 2014
eddies
Aug 20, 2014
Unlimited Golden Stars- MIT essay

1 - Writing research papers has come fairly easily easy

Writing Feedbacktdshah1 - Aug 19, 2014
Anouar
Aug 20, 2014
a Table about proportion of female & male genders in sports

4 - It is not necessary to provide an example for ielts task 1. Your task is to present this report with...

Writing Feedbacksssenyoritaa - Aug 19, 2014
eddies
Aug 20, 2014
IELTS :Some people think that professional athletes make good role models for young people

4 - this sentence is too long, it will seem better if you make it as two sentences,

Writing Feedbacklatkhan - Aug 12, 2014
fikri
Aug 20, 2014
UK: significant increase in the using of debit cards and a steady rise in the using of credit cards

3 - Thanks a lot. There are 153 words

Writing FeedbackNaiman - Aug 17, 2014
Naiman
Aug 20, 2014
TOEFL: the part-time job can let students experience the real adult life and know more about it

2 - I don't think this is a very good start ......... The first sentence of your introduction, ideally a good hook,...

Writing FeedbackDearbhailS - Aug 18, 2014
dumi
Aug 20, 2014
SAT topic: Is knowledge a benefit or a budern?

2 - Knowledge used to stand a dispensable role in the society due to different levels of classes, and it is even regarded...

Writing Feedbackd_ooo70189 - Aug 18, 2014
dumi
Aug 20, 2014
Virtual learning beneficials

3 - Let see how I can contribute to you :D Not only the Internet is in urgent need of communities...

Writing Feedbacksssenyoritaa - Aug 19, 2014
dumi
Aug 20, 2014
GRE: Woven baskets were passed from Palea to Lithos not the vice versa? It's doubtful.

2 - Thank you so much for the reply!! I have never seen the list of logical fallacies before, just googled it, great...

Writing Feedbackteresassssun - Aug 18, 2014
teresassssun
Aug 19, 2014
IELTS: World Wide Web has been very beneficial invention for humanity

4 - There are a lot of online shopping websites where that allow people can to purchase or buy anything from the comfort...

Writing FeedbackAbdurasul - Aug 15, 2014
dumi
Aug 19, 2014
IELTS: Music has come to human kind as a valuable gift that is necessary for a better life

4 - Life without the melody of sound would be robotic. People listen to music for many purposes and in many cases...

Writing Feedbackvmtct - Aug 18, 2014
dumi
Aug 19, 2014
Extinction of some languages will make life easier through improving the efficiency and employment

8 - Some minority languages are dying out due to rapid population growth. People without the little language skills...

Writing Feedbackkevin1983 - Jul 20, 2014
eddies
Aug 18, 2014
TOEFL, "Tell the truth" - People need to have some friends who are trustful.

3 - Second, although by telling lies sometimes One day their lies after just a short time he/she feelswill feel conscience Telling...

Writing Feedbackmarger - Aug 17, 2014
DearbhailS
Aug 18, 2014
[IELTS] A discursive essay on visitors' attitude toward other countries's culture.

2 - I think you've done a good job argumenting from both sides, I agree with your view. "Foreigners from other...

Writing Feedbackthanhthanhdo10 - Aug 17, 2014
Stevie
Aug 17, 2014
"Captain America" - What motivates people to change themselves?

1 - Avoid contraction in formal writing This sentence needs subject verb agreement This is confusing. You...

Writing FeedbackA106810421310 - Aug 15, 2014
SHanafi
Aug 15, 2014
'the real achievement is when we can help others' - Summarize your accomplishment

2 - Dear Gagan, About grammar and tenses I strongly agreed with you. Here my self correction, please give me another feedback...

Writing FeedbackSHanafi - Aug 13, 2014
SHanafi
Aug 15, 2014
ielts - The transformation from childhood into adulthood are every important in each person's life

6 - Ur welcome :D You have good content, keep writing and good luck

Writing Feedbackngoctrang123 - Aug 13, 2014
SHanafi
Aug 15, 2014
'I am always exhilarated when doing my social work job' - the reason for leaving

4 - Can I say that reader would like to see what the candidates proof rather than what they dreaming...

Writing FeedbackSHanafi - Aug 13, 2014
SHanafi
Aug 14, 2014
TOEFL: respect and loyalty are the conspicuous qualities that all children should have

3 - you seem to lack examples for your ideas. besides, the consequences you mention are all assumptions, therefore, you should change them...

Writing Feedbackhamedmas - Aug 13, 2014
garung1187
Aug 14, 2014
The dominance of imported entertainment is harmful to the culture of these countries.Do you agree?

3 - Nevermind Zahra :). This is commonly occured for new member Would you kindly give us the prompt (the question...

Writing Feedbackz_ansari - Aug 13, 2014
SHanafi
Aug 14, 2014
Scandals can only be solved by a combined effort of all the people of the society - GRE essay

1 - Overall, the essay's main point is clear. It needs some attention given to correcting grammar and a few typographical errors (e.g....

Writing FeedbackInfernuS - Aug 12, 2014
EF_Sheri
Aug 13, 2014
Toefl Essay :: Travel within group is always safe and brings more recreations to everyone

4 - Yur essay is very clear and it easy to understand. Yu give many ideas to support for a topic. But try...

Writing Feedbackhamedmas - Aug 11, 2014
ngoctrang123
Aug 13, 2014
New restaurant that may be built in your neighborhood will disturb residents of this area

1 - this introduction has not a hook statement. he was nervous by...

Writing Feedbackjacky5421 - Aug 12, 2014
hamedmas
Aug 13, 2014
'disagreement can cause stress and inhibit learning' - Agreement or disagreement? GRE Issue Essay

1 - What most inspires one to learn more, agreement or disagreement? The speaker believes it is the former....

Writing FeedbackComcop - Aug 11, 2014
EF_Susan
Aug 12, 2014
Studying in foreign university should be very helpful for everybody who does not afraid difficulties

3 - ........ yes, it is much improved now and follow a very good approach too :) A few suggestions; ....... this...

Writing FeedbackNortT - Jul 31, 2014
dumi
Aug 12, 2014
Most people believe that adult should provide all child demands, because they not are independent

9 - I like if you reorganize the introduction and also align it more with your prompt. This is how I would...

Writing Feedbackhamedmas - Jul 23, 2014
dumi
Aug 12, 2014
Ambition motivate people - without it life would be mechanical or meaningless

3 - It is true that ambition motivates you to make your dreams come true. (OR, "It is true that ambition motivates one...

Writing FeedbackJwala - Aug 9, 2014
phoebedominique
Aug 12, 2014
'remarkable rise with slight fluctuations' - Japanese tourists on the trip

5 - If I were you, I prefer writing overview paragraph rather than conclusion. Based on IELTS writing task 1 band descriptor, Overview...

Writing FeedbackAngel Lolla - Aug 10, 2014
tiaDS
Aug 11, 2014
IELTS : Lately more and more work has to be done by machines.

2 - too long sentence. Make it simple to show clarity. use one of them, I worry it will be overusing....

Writing Feedbacklatkhan - Aug 10, 2014
tiaDS
Aug 11, 2014
Government should take the responsibility to make appropriate regulation about the dangerous sports

2 - Actually, people engage in a wide range of sports. So, I like if you change this sentence to; People in...

Writing Feedbackheylie - Aug 11, 2014
dumi
Aug 11, 2014
Prunty County must undertake the same kind of road improvement as the Butler County; GRE Argument

1 - In the statement given, it is said that in the Prunty County, even after reducing the speed limits on the highway,...

Writing FeedbackAmal098 - Aug 3, 2014
EF_Susan
Aug 10, 2014
Not only governments and big companies are responsible for environment but also the whole community

1 - For me your introduction is bit unclear, I have rephrased your introduction. However i am a learner too, trying...

Writing Feedbacktrantrunghieu - Aug 10, 2014
latkhan
Aug 10, 2014
GRE: Highway Safety in Prunty and Butler County - Argument Topic

1 - The author of the essay states that in order to improve the safety of highways, Prunty County should imply the safety...

Writing Feedbackpinaksalvekar - Aug 3, 2014
EF_Susan
Aug 9, 2014
TOEFL: High stress job paid a lot of money or low stress job with just enough to live on?

2 - Thank you for your useful advice, Aichen. I clearly see your point and try to improve them in further writing...

Writing FeedbackAudi - Aug 8, 2014
Audi
Aug 9, 2014
task 2 for ielts: the wealth sharing among countries always have two sides

6 - Thus, the support should stop at providing food, education and health care. --> So the needy country should avoid...

Writing FeedbackTuti gunner - Jul 8, 2014
devabe2005
Aug 9, 2014
IELTS: bar chart - average retirement age among seven countries in 2004 and 2008

6 - be careful when you are using commas in your sentences, i observed so many comma mistakes in your report

Writing Feedbackdigitalidea - Jul 18, 2014
handsome7boy
Aug 9, 2014
We always like to make progress in our life and it gives us a good sense - Toefl Essay

3 - Thank you for your contribution to correct my essay I accept whatever you say Thank you :)

Writing Feedbackhamedmas - Aug 7, 2014
hamedmas
Aug 9, 2014
IELTS: In many countries recently young single people have been living far from their parent

6 - Is it fine to mention immigration and having to learn new life/culture as an advantage? Or is it a bit off...

Writing Feedbacklatkhan - Aug 1, 2014
Monloi
Aug 9, 2014
How did you get over your fear to speak in English? - Learning From Mistakes

1 - As a non-native speaker it was really hard to say even few sentences out loud, when I didn't really have had...

Writing Feedbackflorszi - Aug 7, 2014
EF_Kevin
Aug 8, 2014
To tweet or not to tweet?" This is one tough question to answer

1 - This is an interesting piece of writing. The title is a reference to Shakespeare. To be, or not to be -...

Writing Feedbackqiao2014 - Aug 6, 2014
EF_Kevin
Aug 8, 2014
"Situation after Reunification of Korean peninsula" - prediction essay

1 - Do not capNot capitalize a word that comes after a,. Only capitalize the first letter of the sentence. Also, capitalize...

Writing Feedbacksamuela - Aug 7, 2014
EF_Kevin
Aug 8, 2014
IELTS: Taxpayers don't need pay for public education system in which their children are not enrolled

1 - For instance, the recent bridge construction scam exposed by the media amounts Where ? I am new...

Writing Feedbackmvettri - Aug 7, 2014
latkhan
Aug 8, 2014
IELTS - 'the chart also predicts the proportions in 2040' - quantity of the population aged 65

5 - You must write overview paragraph in writing task 1 because overview is important instead of conclusion. In this prompt, there is...

Writing FeedbackHiruni - Jul 30, 2014
tiaDS
Aug 8, 2014
IELTS 2: CONSIDERING DISADVANTAGES OF TOURISM

6 - While the prompt requires us to state our agreement, better if you add in your essay "agree or...

Writing Feedbackeirehc - Jul 15, 2014
SHanafi
Aug 8, 2014
Ielts: why and how parents teach their kids the importance of money?

10 - Is this college essay? If it is, then you shouldn't set (4-paragraphs) structures for it because it will limit your writing...

Writing Feedbackningo - Aug 4, 2014
huyenluv
Aug 7, 2014
"WE FIND COMFORT AMONG THOSE WHO AGREE WITH US - GROWTH AMONG THOSE WHO DON'T"; PPST Writing TOPIC

1 - Because people who don't agree with us find many flaws and mistakes in us and due to this we get chance...

Writing Feedbackeperry1 - Aug 5, 2014
Binte Rasheed
Aug 7, 2014
Efficient presentation saves time, makes the points clear, satisfies its audience

1 - Exactly, one thing more i would like to add is that put many pictures in your presentation so that listener can...

Writing Feedbackahsam - Aug 5, 2014
Binte Rasheed
Aug 7, 2014
Independent TOEFL essay , Judging people on their appereance

1 - based on their appearance Judging a person on his external appearance

Writing FeedbackBasilMostafa - Aug 5, 2014
florszi
Aug 7, 2014
Celebrities are more famous for the look and wealth than for talents and contribution to their field

1 - I think the crossed phrase is redundant. In addition, I suppose you need to develop or explain more clearty...

Writing Feedbackmvettri - Aug 6, 2014
Anh Nguyen 265
Aug 7, 2014
IELTS: CELEBRITY'S ROLE - influence of celebrities to the youth is as well positive as negative

7 - As I said that, 'effort' can be either endeavor or attempt. With the relation to your example, 'effort' means attempt...

Writing FeedbackAnh Nguyen 265 - Aug 6, 2014
Anh Nguyen 265
Aug 7, 2014
Advertising has too much influence on what people buy?

3 - Hence, the effect of advertising on the type of goods which people buy is undeniable=> I thought this sentence is the...

Writing Feedbackparand - Aug 5, 2014
parand
Aug 7, 2014
A company has announced that it wishes to build a large factory near your community. Discuss the adv

1 - there will be a great increase

Writing FeedbackEyadBosy - Aug 3, 2014
sayes
Aug 6, 2014
Mixed education provide added opportunity for either sex to develop interpersonal skills

1 - consider the example of a separate boy's school. Firstly,

Writing Feedbackizhar - Aug 5, 2014
sayes
Aug 6, 2014
To me studying alone is more useful - students choice

1 - As I know that, we do not use 'but', 'and' at the begining of a sentence. how...

Writing Feedbackahmadaz - Aug 5, 2014
Anh Nguyen 265
Aug 6, 2014
IELTS Competitiveness is a positive quality for people to have among most societies.

5 - the competitiveness is increasingly strict in today

Writing Feedbacksundin928 - Aug 4, 2014
digitalidea
Aug 6, 2014
Money as a reward can be beneficial, but compliments and comfortable working environment are better

1 - sometimes, the words that receive "strike" are not wrong. It's just because you have repeated...

Writing Feedbackmanh - Aug 5, 2014
SalMon
Aug 6, 2014
Movies, television - entertainment and hobby that we can learn a lot from

1 - to the new modern television, which can be installed (i guess you mean the application or softwares for viewing films, but...

Writing Feedbackafaghfarhadi - Aug 5, 2014
izhar
Aug 5, 2014
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