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Success means that the desire was strong enough? To what extent do you agree or disagree?

3 - Tinash, there are many small mistakes in your essay.For instance,peoples-people,be the attributed for ,must has to graduates from a university-must have...

Writing Feedbacktinash - Nov 13, 2014
Domain
Nov 15, 2014
Ielts task 1: Pass rates of undergraduates in their first academic year

2 - As can be easily seen, the amount of percentage of/figure for students did not fail at the end of the semester...

Writing Feedbackthuyvu - Nov 13, 2014
eddies
Nov 14, 2014
My Writing Improvement - I don't have a lot of writing experiences, especially in English

8 - It would be better to enhance your conclusion. Write in addition how your writing skills will help you in the...

Writing Feedbackfadoola123 - Nov 13, 2014
Opuntia
Nov 14, 2014
Some international student choose American roommates. Others choose students from their own country.

3 - "all the time" is redundant can help build better understanding of America and its culture.

Writing FeedbackVns9x - Nov 13, 2014
Robert_T
Nov 14, 2014
Both art and science greatly influence our world in a positive manner - Artists vs scientists

2 - Is there a word limit to this essay? I feel like your argument could be drawn out a little more. What...

Writing FeedbackVns9x - Nov 13, 2014
shanexo
Nov 13, 2014
Why do many people use Facebook? (cause and effect essay)

2 - It has become important and necessary to our lifes. lives

Writing Feedbackanmaihung - Nov 12, 2014
Vns9x
Nov 13, 2014
UM-Twin Cities Educational Interests American Studies

5 - vengiespen Thank you very much for your help! I corrected my sentences as you indicated, and I could manage to...

Writing Feedbackkitakaname - Nov 11, 2014
kitakaname
Nov 13, 2014
Clothes have always played a leading role when it comes a person's behavior.

2 - Any more advice would be helpful.

Writing FeedbackVns9x - Nov 12, 2014
Vns9x
Nov 13, 2014
Along with job, marriage, having a child comes the moment when you cannot escape from being an adult

4 - All throughout the essay, you made it clear that you were speaking on general terms, that means you were discussing a...

Writing FeedbackVns9x - Nov 11, 2014
vangiespen
Nov 12, 2014
High salaries and not disturbing during work are the key factors of encouraging people to teach

4 - - Abdurasul, I suggest that you learn how to discuss each of your reasons as separate paragraphs so that you...

Writing FeedbackAbdurasul - Nov 10, 2014
vangiespen
Nov 12, 2014
People should use phone in correct occasions and should not use it in specific public areas; IELTS

5 - First of all, it is obvious that human have rights to do their favorable things which is are not illegal ....

Writing Feedbacklogo3098 - Nov 11, 2014
Vns9x
Nov 12, 2014
It is significant that zoos are used to protect rare animals - IELTS essay

5 - thank you very much.

Writing Feedbacklogo3098 - Nov 6, 2014
logo3098
Nov 11, 2014
Telling the truth is the best policy that a person can adopt in his life.

5 - thanks

Writing Feedbackebrahimsangsefi - Nov 11, 2014
ebrahimsangsefi
Nov 11, 2014
Willy Loman - Family Man, Father, Fake, Fraud - [High School] [Death of a Salesman]

4 - Thanks a lot, this helps very much and is sure to give me an edge over my classmates, as no one...

Writing Feedbackorlandok - Nov 10, 2014
orlandok
Nov 11, 2014
Is soaring petrol price the best way to tackle traffic congestion and pollution?

1 - Do not utilize 5 body paragraphs. In other words, try to merge some of your reasons. In fact, by doing so,...

Writing FeedbackChrissiePK - Nov 11, 2014
logo3098
Nov 11, 2014
It takes failure to achive success. SAT

3 - - I suggest that you bring this up as your introductory paragraph. It has an intriguing hook that makes the...

Writing Feedbackmilamiller - Nov 11, 2014
vangiespen
Nov 11, 2014
A new now technology will soon become out of date or even useless; education for further development

3 - - Trung, this is an effective opening statement but it lacks the most important part in an opinion essay, your...

Writing FeedbackCE_15 - Nov 10, 2014
vangiespen
Nov 11, 2014
Traditional music has the least amount of listeners and this number is more and more shorten

3 - Thank you very much, I ll read your essay when I ll have more free time. thank you again :)

Writing Feedbackel_lee88 - Nov 6, 2014
el_lee88
Nov 11, 2014
Difference between the book and computer

3 - I know but I need ideas for essay and I asked help. if you can please,and if not bye!

Writing FeedbackDaniellePeazer - Nov 11, 2014
DaniellePeazer
Nov 11, 2014
Would I rather be loved for the imperfect person that I am, or for amazing qualities I don't have?

2 - thank you for the clarification, I'll try to be on point from now on

Writing Feedbacksunny17 - Nov 11, 2014
sunny17
Nov 11, 2014
People's life expectancy is getting longer and longer due to many external factors

5 - Shon, you still need to do more work on this essay. Please refer to my notes as suggestions for further improvement:...

Writing FeedbackVns9x - Nov 9, 2014
vangiespen
Nov 10, 2014
IELTS essay question: if international collaboration is the only way to tackle most problems?

1 - Many people believe that the world's most urgent problems can only be solved by international collaboration, Do u agree or disagree...

Writing FeedbackJeffGC - Nov 10, 2014
mvettri
Nov 10, 2014
Technology is the tool that reinforce people to get numerous knowledge overnight

7 - Shon, it will certainly boost your essay score because it will show that you are comfortable with the English language, since...

Writing FeedbackVns9x - Nov 9, 2014
vangiespen
Nov 10, 2014
By 2000, in Australia, the level of electricity generated through hydropower slightly increased

2 - Thank you *confusing girl "*second sentence confusing! how was it different? that was two sentences combined!" - Yes, I absolutely...

Writing Feedbackhokagepato - Nov 9, 2014
hokagepato
Nov 9, 2014
Write an essay that either supports or opposes the use of cell phones.

6 - This essay reminds me of a picture that you could reference if you please, it's a picture of everything that cellphones...

Writing Feedbackjk98 - Nov 8, 2014
STEMkid
Nov 9, 2014
Topic: Causes Reducing the amount of book-reading "READING-CULTURE WHETHER IT STILL EXISTS"

3 - Thien, it is important that you learn how to outline your essay before you write the draft. The outline will help...

Writing Feedbackhnlt1093 - Nov 8, 2014
vangiespen
Nov 9, 2014
People in the past ate healthier (food) than people do today

3 - An increasing number of people begin to discuss whether people in the past ate healthier food. Many people are of the...

Writing Feedbackthegreatwall - Nov 8, 2014
Vns9x
Nov 9, 2014
Events like FIFA world cup can positively improve the international relationships

4 - It is certainly true that international sporting occasions like foot ball cups are very popular incidents, so I strongly agree with...

Writing Feedbackabdelrashed - Nov 4, 2014
Vns9x
Nov 9, 2014
Effect of popular events on our life

10 - -I listed elections with sad events because in most countries, elections are met with violence and death rather than jubilation....

Writing FeedbackShaimaa - Nov 4, 2014
vangiespen
Nov 8, 2014
Headaches suffered by the residents of Mentia - GRE / Argument

4 - Dear Louisa, Thanks for the time that you have given for me to advice about English writing. I have a...

Writing Feedbackstrider10 - Nov 6, 2014
strider10
Nov 8, 2014
Repairing our current roads would lead to many positive consequences

5 - Now this essay version definitely aligns itself with the prompt and shows us that you have a clear understanding of how...

Writing FeedbackVns9x - Nov 4, 2014
vangiespen
Nov 7, 2014
Animals are waiting for us to be rescued

4 - Here is a list of terms that you used in the wrong context: - All animals, just like...

Writing FeedbackVns9x - Nov 7, 2014
vangiespen
Nov 7, 2014
Friendship; constantly borrowing money can lead towards a plenty of negative results

1 - - Borrowing money between friends is something that happens due to circumstances. Depending upon how the loan is approached, it...

Writing FeedbackVns9x - Nov 7, 2014
vangiespen
Nov 7, 2014
The city which I enjoy the most is a combination of history and modernity - TOEFL essay

3 - Firstly, congrats your essay contain lots of knowledge and information about historical buildings which is a huge plus for you. However,...

Writing Feedbackappleguo - Nov 7, 2014
Vns9x
Nov 7, 2014
Seeking a bright future in the land of opportunity

3 - You can definitely use this essay for that prompt. In fact, is specifically addresses the needs of the essay so you...

Writing Feedbackchinita89 - Nov 6, 2014
vangiespen
Nov 7, 2014
Minimum age (21) of legal drinking has not saved as many lives by itself as once thought

1 - M.G. the reason that you are unable to write the body of this essay properly is because you have not properly...

Writing Feedbackmpg109 - Nov 6, 2014
vangiespen
Nov 6, 2014
I followed several organizations to increase my knowledge about Petroleum Geology - Royal Holloway

2 - Vangiespen, I have passed your meaningful words to her and already inform her to make some changes based on yours....

Writing Feedbackandial - Nov 6, 2014
andial
Nov 6, 2014
The effective leader should try to make other members feel that they are part of decisions.

3 - Gaiyaunqi, Alina meant to say "Initiative" and not "Insiative". Having read your essay though, I believe that you should not be...

Writing Feedbackgaiyuanqi - Nov 5, 2014
vangiespen
Nov 6, 2014
IELTS Essay: The effects of people getting married and having children in their thirties

5 - Hi, Sekar. Many thanks for your attention and useful comments. It was much help. I agree that it is written...

Writing FeedbackRemansou - Oct 31, 2014
Remansou
Nov 6, 2014
IELTS - despite the obstacles found in the new place, traveller could obtain some new experiences

5 - Travelling is one therapy for some people in order to refresh them from their daily activities. Travelling is one therapy...

Writing Feedbackmaritsanur - Oct 31, 2014
zhugege
Nov 6, 2014
Compulsory Service and why is Necessary in the U.S.

1 - Tia, the essay is good, but it centers on only one reason for the need or benefit of compulsory military service...

Writing Feedbacktia2129166 - Nov 5, 2014
vangiespen
Nov 5, 2014
Saving some lands! Ultimately, animals will be our number one priority

2 - Any more advice would be helpful.

Writing FeedbackVns9x - Nov 3, 2014
Vns9x
Nov 4, 2014
Drivers have to pay a fee for driving in busy city streets when there is a great amount of traffic.

1 - There are some minor grammar problems. After can, we do not s. Can benefit not can benefits.

Writing Feedbackmoow77 - Nov 3, 2014
Vns9x
Nov 4, 2014
TOEFL - more happy live and more chance to become successful for kids raised up less strictly

3 - update: Undoubtedly, every devoted parents have a yearning for their children's success in the future - children are excepted to...

Writing Feedbackmophicyao - Nov 3, 2014
mophicyao
Nov 3, 2014
TOEFL: If a student needs extra help with his schoolwork, it is better to ask a friend for help

3 - In addition, tutor's helping dosen't make feeling problem. Friends may make a trouble each other when he or she helps his...

Writing FeedbackEUNICE_06 - Oct 22, 2014
Vns9x
Nov 3, 2014
Free time can help us to relieve our stresses; play with kids rather than educating them

3 - Free time vs "Educating"..... Talk about the benefits of free time, i.e stress reliever, develop new skills, time to bond,...

Writing FeedbackVns9x - Nov 3, 2014
santablue
Nov 3, 2014
Study 11 months a year can improve students' efficiency in learning much better than long-time learn

3 - Could you provide a proper prompt for us ?

Writing Feedbackmoow77 - Nov 2, 2014
Vns9x
Nov 3, 2014
Best invention - development of the treatment against cancer would change people's lives

1 - You have to make your essay more detailed. In fact, in can be done by providing some examples .

Writing Feedbackzuf - Nov 3, 2014
Vns9x
Nov 3, 2014
IELTS Democracy has given an opportunity for the people to express their feelings; freedom of speech

3 - I don't think this essay has enough 250 words. BTW, you should check your lay out carefully when you post something...

Writing Feedbacktest_ielts - Oct 29, 2014
violethoang
Nov 3, 2014
Right way to spend money

1 - Hi Shon Do, I'm sorry to say this but if I were you, I would try to write the whole thing...

Writing FeedbackVns9x - Nov 2, 2014
Charphil
Nov 2, 2014
The best and most cheerful memories we have from our children time

4 - Would i be able to improve in just 1 week since the exam is on 8th?And is it possible to correct...

Writing FeedbackGman97 - Nov 1, 2014
Vns9x
Nov 2, 2014
I live independently, enjoy favorite activities and study the subjects that I would like to learn.

5 - Well, firstly, try to provides some examples in order to contribute to your ideas. Secondly, if you do not come up...

Writing Feedbackpeeraya - Nov 2, 2014
Vns9x
Nov 2, 2014
It is interesting to point out that the number of people buying books in Germany consistently rose

1 - First sentence is a little lengthy. Try condensing it to. It can clearly be concluded that the population of Germany,...

Writing FeedbackGman97 - Nov 2, 2014
nik18
Nov 2, 2014
TOEFL: constructing public transportation systems in cities is good?

10 - This writing is good. However, it contains over 400 words, which I think that if you deal with such words in...

Writing Feedbacklephuc - Oct 11, 2014
eddies
Nov 1, 2014
We recommend maintaining Grove College's tradition of all-female education - GRE AW

1 - I would reinforce the message of the conclusion and convince the reader more deeply. JUST THE CONCLUSION

Writing Feedbackpeyman_np - Nov 1, 2014
jdlr22
Nov 1, 2014
Travelling in a group you will have to fully rely on your leader or your members

3 - Hi Vns9x, I believe that you need to explain in the introduction if you agree or disagree with...

Writing FeedbackVns9x - Nov 1, 2014
JuniorR
Nov 1, 2014
TOEFL: wearing a uniform by students, when they go to school, is a big timesaver for them

3 - Many people believe that students should wear uniform when they go to school. Others do not. In my case, I do...

Writing Feedbacklephuc - Nov 1, 2014
4theluvofgod
Nov 1, 2014
Direct communication is always better than emails or telephone calls or letters

3 - Face-to-face communication is always better than emails or, telephone calls or letters. Even though, an abundance of people tend to use...

Writing FeedbackVns9x - Oct 31, 2014
4theluvofgod
Nov 1, 2014
I hate smoking the most. People know about smoking's harmful effect, but they still smoke?

4 - thanks to all. i'll correct my mistakes

Writing Feedbacksontrang_s2 - Nov 1, 2014
sontrang_s2
Nov 1, 2014
A family in small village have superb natural resources and weather

2 - Thank you vangiespen. actually I'm beginner to writing an essay but I know the IBC and I didn't explain completely about...

Writing Feedbackmrh54ir - Oct 31, 2014
mrh54ir
Oct 31, 2014
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