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Ielts: job inquiry - guide tourists in you town for a travel company

3 - also, you need to put space between paragraphs to show the differences between them

Writing Feedbackganggang - May 28, 2014
fikri
Jun 12, 2014
[IELTS] The two approaches to life: change or unchange? Personal preference?

4 - yeah I know, but if I'm comparing based on two criterias, then they must be used in the paragraph right?...

Writing FeedbackSalMon - Jun 11, 2014
SalMon
Jun 12, 2014
Chart - contribution of selected categories in total spending of five countries

2 - Second part of first paragraph is not a sentence. Respectively includes more than one factor.

Writing FeedbackHung Arsenal - Jun 5, 2014
iamchop
Jun 11, 2014
Nuclear weapons, boon or curse ?

5 - Dear Madam, I am really grateful to you for reviewing and correcting bits and parts of my essays ! I'd like...

Writing FeedbackRevin - Jun 7, 2014
Revin
Jun 11, 2014
TOEFL integrated task, personality called universal risk taking

4 - Thank you!!

Writing FeedbackAngelaB - May 31, 2014
AngelaB
Jun 11, 2014
IELTS: Do young people have much greater influence nowadays than it was?

3 - Any information or event in one part of the world can be easily reach the other, due to the...

Writing FeedbackShokhusrav - May 29, 2014
fikri
Jun 10, 2014
IELTS- CAPITAL PUNISHMENT; 51% countries have polished death penalty

5 - People often ask me how to give a balanced answer for "agree or disagree" questions. Take this question for example:...

Writing Feedbackthanhmai - May 30, 2014
fikri
Jun 10, 2014
IELTS; Letter to a friend - he agreed to look after your house and pet

3 - here, it is not a problem if you put it/ his to change the word 'dog/my dog' but, pay...

Writing FeedbackJoyce68 - May 30, 2014
fikri
Jun 10, 2014
IELTS: The three-column figure illustrates a survey of 1000 teenagers

2 - Thanks for your comment.

Writing Feedbacklindaqueen - Jun 10, 2014
lindaqueen
Jun 10, 2014
Always prefer prevention from the every first stage of any health problem

1 - Presently, people do not take the problem seriously until it to a harmful stage. For example, the awareness that...

Writing FeedbackHumza33 - Jun 9, 2014
ibk
Jun 10, 2014
IELTS: How to teachers' gender are taking part in the six different school

2 - Thanks misterwandering, I really like your sentences, those inspire me to imitate them.

Writing FeedbacktiaDS - Jun 9, 2014
tiaDS
Jun 10, 2014
IELTS: Steps in the hiring process

4 - Sorry it's biased not unbiased. I'll try to research regarding the use of personal pronouns in IELTS but I think that...

Writing Feedbacklewyne - Jun 9, 2014
tinubalde
Jun 10, 2014
IELTS pie chart and table - agricultural crisis

7 - Sheiz, your format on task 1 is different from mine but your work is good. You just need a little bit...

Writing Feedbacktinubalde - Jun 5, 2014
lewyne
Jun 9, 2014
GRE- Technology and human ability to think.

1 - Although the above statement is quite extreme but both facets of technology have to be taken into consideration. Technology is the...

Writing Feedbackhimanshimathur - Jun 8, 2014
Vihuynh
Jun 9, 2014
old and new generation; role of young and elder people in the society

5 - I think you should not give an example in the very first line of the introduction paragraph. Thank you.

Writing Feedbackreza10977 - May 30, 2014
Humza33
Jun 8, 2014
IELTS Task 1: Share expenditure for selected categories in four countries

10 - Dear Ahmad, Thanks for your detail correction. I really appreciate for advice. Tinubalde, thanks for a new...

Writing FeedbacktiaDS - Jun 4, 2014
tiaDS
Jun 8, 2014
What is one thing you will do to improve your community?

6 - Thank you for spending your time ^^

Writing Feedbackjm06633 - May 30, 2014
jm06633
Jun 8, 2014
IELTS - Tourism: good or bad? - it's a modern form of colonialism

13 - Thanks! Now I got it !

Writing FeedbackSalMon - May 27, 2014
SalMon
Jun 7, 2014
IELTS sports and games are devised to spend the leisure time; patriotic emotions

4 - Peeking back at the history of mankind, sports and games are devised to spend the leisure time of the people....

Writing Feedbacknarjisfatima - Jun 2, 2014
dumi
Jun 7, 2014
There has a lot of changes in the town or city where you are living

3 - Quang binh is a poor area township (or village .......... you need to specify) in the North Central Coast. In recent...

Writing Feedbacknam120600218 - Jun 3, 2014
dumi
Jun 7, 2014
IELTS - If Police should carry guns or not?

7 - It is very common that in various countries the police are carrying carry guns when they are on patrol in many...

Writing Feedbackyirunli - Jun 3, 2014
dumi
Jun 7, 2014
IELTS : Vegetarianism - why some people are choosing to become vegetarian?

8 - This is not quite so true as there were and still are many communities that consist of very strict vegetarians....

Writing FeedbackPyon9x - May 29, 2014
dumi
Jun 7, 2014
pros and cons when children were learned foreign language in primary shool

5 - So, communicating by being able to communicate in foreign languages has was become one of the important factors to make...

Writing FeedbackVihuynh - May 29, 2014
dumi
Jun 7, 2014
Media plays a huge role in bringing to the sight of people the latest news

4 - Media plays an inevitable role in bringing to the sight of educating people with the latest news on various topics....

Writing FeedbackRoar - May 28, 2014
dumi
Jun 7, 2014
IELTS - Zoos are cruel or useful?

6 - it seems extremely unbalanced, try to make it balance by giving more details in the third paragraph,

Writing Feedbackyirunli - May 28, 2014
fikri
Jun 7, 2014
IELTS - To encourage old people using mobile phones and the internet

3 - small mistakes may decrease your score,,be more careful,, can better our life it should be can make our life...

Writing Feedbackyirunli - Jun 6, 2014
fikri
Jun 7, 2014
[IELTS] FUTURE INFORMATION TECHNOLOGY: POSITIVE OR NEGATIVE?

9 - thanks for your help :)

Writing FeedbackSalMon - May 29, 2014
SalMon
Jun 6, 2014
If people have opportunity to get a secure job, they should take it right awayI

4 - ............... well, I have a problem with this sentence. I agree that secure job is not necessarily be a motivating factor....

Writing Feedbackpeyman_np - Jun 4, 2014
Pahan
Jun 6, 2014
Community service in high school has many benefits

2 - thanks! :) I'm waiting to see your ideas

Writing FeedbackVihuynh - Jun 5, 2014
Vihuynh
Jun 6, 2014
IELTS: The zoo deserves maintenance and public respect

17 - oh thank you :) very helpful to me :)

Writing FeedbackSalMon - Jun 1, 2014
SalMon
Jun 6, 2014
IELTS TASK 2 : government involvement in people life syle

5 - There is no doubt that the inhabitants' lifestyle in one particular country determines some important aspects of the country's development

Writing Feedbackandial - Jun 3, 2014
Vihuynh
Jun 5, 2014
IELTS: THE ADVERSE OPINION OF SCHOOL LEAVERS

5 - There are several potential factors can be named as the that can cause causes of this situation. Firstly, a majority...

Writing FeedbackAnh Nguyen 265 - Jun 3, 2014
dumi
Jun 5, 2014
IELTS TASK 2 : Universities provide students with the additional skills

4 - ............ My view is that the last sentence is not really necessary as it does not provide any value addition to...

Writing Feedbackandial - Jun 3, 2014
dumi
Jun 5, 2014
Would individuals bring about positive effects to society?

5 - Take the amazing industrial achievement development achieved by of former Soviet Russia as an example.The whole nation achieved 90 per...

Writing FeedbackGBoyka - May 8, 2014
dumi
Jun 5, 2014
IELTS - Introductions; living in modern world/ world poverty/ traffic problem

5 - If you organize the order other way, I feel it would be more interesting; Some people find these changes offer...

Writing FeedbackPyon9x - May 27, 2014
dumi
Jun 5, 2014
IELTS TASK I : US Crude Oil Imports (15 countries)

6 - [Link / Image / Video / Quote]

Writing FeedbackSHanafi - Mar 19, 2014
SHanafi
Jun 4, 2014
IELTS Letter - Write to a friend inviting him/her to watch a movie

4 - I find no errors in here other than the ones edited. Nice one dude. This is a good start for a...

Writing Feedbackrims - Jun 2, 2014
Est2k
Jun 4, 2014
One of the interesting differences in culture between America and Vietnam

5 - thanks a lot ;) your treatment is really helpful ;)

Writing FeedbackTranAnh - Jun 2, 2014
TranAnh
Jun 4, 2014
IELTS: Learning a foreign language at elementary school brings lots of benefits

5 - Since you expressed your opinion supporting the statement, it is better to continue justifying your opinion rather than talking about...

Writing Feedbackharry137181143 - Jun 1, 2014
dumi
Jun 4, 2014
Ielts: "International Day" - Letter to the principal

1 - I am so happy to hear the news that a great event "International Day" is going to hold be held...

Writing Feedbackganggang - Jun 4, 2014
dumi
Jun 4, 2014
IELTS Task 1: Visitor from and to UK

5 - in the fist paragraph , international travellers

Writing Feedbackandial - May 9, 2014
ganggang
Jun 4, 2014
IELTS Task 1 : Hydro Electric process

6 - ... it is not accurate in this occasion. you may say the process begins when the sunlight hot up...

Writing FeedbackSHanafi - May 21, 2014
andial
Jun 3, 2014
IELTS Task 1: Channel one news viewing figures

3 - It climbs to.. , I think it is redundant to write "climbs a slight incline"

Writing FeedbacktiaDS - Jun 3, 2014
andial
Jun 3, 2014
IELTS: Pizza, fish and chips consumed by Australian Teenagers

5 - Sorry Tia, it has nothing to do with the article.:-) I mean 'first period' here is not obvious enough...

Writing FeedbacktiaDS - Jun 1, 2014
andial
Jun 3, 2014
[IELTS] Prevention is better than cure. Agree or not? 'materialistic diversion'

8 - Oh I see...Your way is much better! I will try with my next essay :)

Writing FeedbackSalMon - Jun 2, 2014
SalMon
Jun 3, 2014
IELTS TASK 2: increased sport facilities vs other measures. Discuss both views.

7 - where does it refer to? you put 'on the other hand' in the beginning of the paragraph, it shows...

Writing FeedbackAbdurasul - May 27, 2014
fikri
Jun 3, 2014
My pets - chicks; Yun Tai Mountain attractions

2 - ............ I wish you changed the order of this sentence; When I was ten years, my parents had me accompanied with...

Writing Feedbacka35817126as - Jun 2, 2014
dumi
Jun 3, 2014
IELTS Task 1 : Injuries and Incidents

4 - Hi, leoking ... thank you for correcting. :D Hi eddies, Yap, I understand.I often do writing with...

Writing FeedbackSHanafi - May 21, 2014
SHanafi
Jun 3, 2014
IELTS Task 1: The number of visitors to three London museums.

7 - Overview should actually present the general information or the main trends of the graph which may come...

Writing FeedbacktiaDS - May 27, 2014
andial
Jun 3, 2014
IELTS: working in team enhances the students' efficiency in the study process

8 - Introduction could have been better.

Writing Feedbackstronglee - May 26, 2014
rims
Jun 2, 2014
IELTS: young school leavers have a negative attitude towards learning

7 - yeah thank u , i think this is a good advice, i will give my point in the introduction,...

Writing Feedbackthanhphongct1 - May 30, 2014
thanhphongct1
Jun 1, 2014
IELTS - ACADEMIC - INTERNET vs CLASSROOM FOR LEARNING LANGUAGES

5 - It is good that you organize your ideas very clearly. But I think it can be better if you add some...

Writing Feedbackcandy07 - May 31, 2014
harry137181143
Jun 1, 2014
Parents - the main factor effect personality on person; Fatherhood vs motherhood

4 - Well I understand most of your ideas. However you need to practice writing quite hard :) you need to...

Writing FeedbackVihuynh - May 27, 2014
SalMon
Jun 1, 2014
Combustion of Food to Find Stored Energy-Mini Evaluation

2 - Thanks for your feedback!

Writing Feedbackclassified9988 - May 29, 2014
classified9988
May 31, 2014
[IELTS] THE MAINTENANCE OF TRADITIONAL SKILLS AND WAYS OF LIFE?

6 - try this to find me via fb : Dang Cao Thanh Phong , i couldnt type my full email address 'cause...

Writing FeedbackSalMon - May 30, 2014
thanhphongct1
May 31, 2014
GRE Argument: A recent study of eighteen rhesus monkeys..

1 - On the first paragraph, it is stimulation.. so far I will rate it a 5.. i think you passed your message...

Writing FeedbackKMeghji - May 27, 2014
christy6789
May 30, 2014
A caste less society is the need of the hour-IGNOU

1 - Hey dear, On the fourth paragraph, Instead of 'this further increases caste divide" rather it is " this will further the...

Writing FeedbackGrasshopper - May 29, 2014
christy6789
May 30, 2014
TOEFL: keep your old friends or make new friends? I've ever had just few friends

4 - Thank you dumi! I am going to look for these threads, hoping that help me to improve my weak introduction!

Writing FeedbackAngelaB - May 27, 2014
AngelaB
May 30, 2014
Smoking should be made prohibited in public places : IELTS

3 - Well, your prompt has asked you - ....... this is more direct and asks you about your opinion....

Writing Feedbackdil77 - May 27, 2014
dumi
May 30, 2014
Task 1 : Line graph essay of expenditure on phone services in America

4 - ............. "average yearly the consumer pending"? This phrase spoils your intro........ Also, mention the period in more details (for e.g....

Writing FeedbacktiaDS - May 26, 2014
dumi
May 30, 2014
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