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Learning a new language at any age is an anormously rewarding experience in many ways

4 - As the word " very important" is too vague, you can add a specific reason why you say so. Let's...

Writing FeedbackFaisal_Aceh - Feb 1, 2015
eddies
Feb 2, 2015
I would argue that globalization influences people to learn foreign language, English especially

5 - I like the way you write the introduction. However, such intro needs more improvements as to form a line with...

Writing FeedbackAinunAlfatih - Jan 31, 2015
eddies
Feb 2, 2015
Agree or disagree: Students need one year of break after finishing high school

6 - Luisa, I became really really confused with this line of your comment. In different IELTS writing books I read that...

Writing Feedbackah_zafari - Jan 28, 2015
ah_zafari
Feb 2, 2015
We have to balance between learning second language and other subjects.

3 - Hi Frt247, I would like to give several comments and suggestions for your writing. GRAMMAR ISSUES I...

Writing Feedbackfrt427 - Feb 1, 2015
fadlanmuzakki
Feb 1, 2015
Movements to stop and prevent global warming have been getting tractions in the past few decades.

3 - Hey, thanks for commenting. The thing is, I don't have the complete prompt either. This is just what someone recalled after...

Writing Feedbackmotoja - Feb 1, 2015
motoja
Feb 1, 2015
PTE Essay: A Computer can perform simple but repetitive tasks much faster than a human can

2 - The issues are well argued. However, I think the ideas should be in different paragraph to be clearer, i.e the first...

Writing Feedbackmotoja - Feb 1, 2015
Linhpt
Feb 1, 2015
Latin or Greek - should we teach dead languages?

2 - Something is missing in your prompt such as asking for your opinion and examples, but anyways here are some advice for...

Writing Feedbackmotoja - Feb 1, 2015
Vns9x
Feb 1, 2015
The only remedy for this problem, is to set up a more powerful law. Smoking and its aftermaths!

3 - Any advice is welcome!

Writing FeedbackVns9x - Jan 31, 2015
Vns9x
Feb 1, 2015
While there are benefits of studying, there are good reasons why doing a job is worth a try.

3 - Thank you! Shon Do, it is really helpful. Eventhough i always get high marks at my literature (My mother toungue language...

Writing Feedbackkatherina - Jan 31, 2015
katherina
Feb 1, 2015
The data suggest that, as time goes by, more individuals prefer games software and DVDs over CDs.

4 - eddies, ah_zafari Thanks for the tips guys, if you guys do not mind, can i use them as a...

Writing FeedbackVns9x - Jan 30, 2015
Vns9x
Jan 31, 2015
I completely disagree with the idea of making new regulations in school.

6 - Many thanks for your help. It is really meaningful for me.

Writing Feedbackkatherina - Jan 28, 2015
katherina
Jan 31, 2015
There are some reasons why children learn better and faster than adults.

2 - A children(A children? It must be "A child", right?) should study a foreign language in school starting in the early grades....

Writing Feedbackwina - Jan 31, 2015
ah_zafari
Jan 31, 2015
Drug is the thing that has always been prohibited in this world - Drugs and teenagers essay

2 - It has always been a polemical topic when it comes to drug abuse of young people. Awkward sentence. Try rephrasing like...

Writing FeedbackVns9x - Jan 30, 2015
katiecohen96
Jan 30, 2015
Parents claim that although advertisement provides information, children are misled by these adverts

5 - o conclude after discussing both the views , I feel that parents argument has got strong points and are practical in...

Writing Feedbackvijaypj - Jan 30, 2015
Vns9x
Jan 30, 2015
A/D: Children will have less financial problems if they are given a certain amount of money weekly

3 - Thanks TJ, very helpful corrections. Wish I receive your comments on my future works :)

Writing Feedbackah_zafari - Jan 29, 2015
ah_zafari
Jan 30, 2015
Internet, automobiles, aeronautical and medical advancements - 21st Century Scientific Changes

9 - Hi Vns9x, I am afraid that "has been seen" is incorrect here; the original "has seen" is right. Also, it...

Writing Feedbacksambhavsh - Jan 24, 2015
TJLuschen
Jan 30, 2015
Essay writing; Parents should send children to school or not to be good members of society .

10 - Thanks for your clear explanation, Sekar.

Writing FeedbackPedram - Jan 21, 2015
Pedram
Jan 30, 2015
Advertisement motivates us to imitate others rather than being unique according to our interest

3 - Thank you so much. I'll surely consider your correction.

Writing Feedbackvijaypj - Jan 29, 2015
vijaypj
Jan 29, 2015
Coca Cola's sales numbers - Task 1 IELTs (pie)

3 - Some grammatical issues: In writing task 1, a writer has to write an overview paragraph. Let me try to...

Writing FeedbackVns9x - Jan 29, 2015
tiaDS
Jan 29, 2015
IELTS: in-home work and in-home study, a development positive or negative?

4 - Many many thanks to you for your detaied and meticulous revision. It is quite a contribution. If it could be desired,...

Writing Feedbackmoleman - Jan 29, 2015
moleman
Jan 29, 2015
Group or on your own! Safety is a huge issue.

3 - English is not my first language,so what i can offer are just my humble thoughts. You have made a huge...

Writing FeedbackVns9x - Jan 29, 2015
moleman
Jan 29, 2015
Gem cannot be polished nor man perfected

3 - Thank you. I am grateful for your feedback.

Writing Feedbackpurpleperidot - Jan 24, 2015
purpleperidot
Jan 29, 2015
Stunning and nail-biting special effects in today's television.

6 - The only idiom of "word" I am familiar with is when you use it to mean "Yes, I agree with you"...

Writing Feedbackeftekharizade - Jan 28, 2015
TJLuschen
Jan 29, 2015
IELTS; 'our hectic schedule'; The need of music - Traditional Vs International

3 - You have some serious issues with punctuation, please revise the essay before submitting it. When it comes the content itself, it...

Writing Feedbackmariyuz - Mar 17, 2013
Vns9x
Jan 29, 2015
Social Media and reflection - my stand on it and why university prompt

4 - Hopefully this answers the prompt, as the deadline is in 2 days. Any help on grammar, sentence structure, creativity, is...

Writing FeedbackArachnid - Jan 26, 2015
Arachnid
Jan 29, 2015
Differences in wheat exports over three areas.

2 - Given is the graph illustrating the amount of wheat export[ed] between 1985 and 1990 in Australia, Canada and [the] European Community....

Writing FeedbackJohnny Doan - Jan 28, 2015
TJLuschen
Jan 28, 2015
Snitching people! They are inclined to move to another country especially to the rich one.

2 - These days, people [are] inclined to move to another countr[ies,] especially to the rich ones, ] due to various factors. It...

Writing FeedbackVns9x - Jan 28, 2015
TJLuschen
Jan 28, 2015
University degrees are very essential in job market and to pursue master education

3 - From the decades, the education is considered as important thing in the life. the education has been considered as an important...

Writing Feedbackdeepachiniwal - Jan 27, 2015
Vns9x
Jan 28, 2015
ielts: Are we becoming more independent ?

7 - Yeah you are right next time I'll be more careful. Thank you so much

Writing Feedbackamirafahmy - Jan 26, 2015
amirafahmy
Jan 28, 2015
Study blindfoldedly without analyzing the assumptions made in it will certainly bring one's downfall

2 - this is not a nice approach of questioning a work. The data are not "trustable", "legitimate" or "valid" would...

Writing Feedbackthelearner - Jan 28, 2015
ah_zafari
Jan 28, 2015
The current energy sources that we use, contaminate our environment, as well as the mankind.

4 - just electricity? I suggest to change electricity to "energy" as a more general term. electricity is...

Writing FeedbackVns9x - Jan 27, 2015
ah_zafari
Jan 27, 2015
Essay on being unique - Everybody is unique in their own way.

4 - this essay has alot of great ideas just try avoiding the part where you say because although it shows great confidence...

Writing Feedbackrone - Jan 26, 2015
omarsamahy
Jan 27, 2015
The creation of a government is definitely for solving the problems (welfare) of the society

2 - The creation of a government is definitely for solving the problems(welfare) of the society, and problems here does not confine to...

Writing Feedbackthelearner - Jan 27, 2015
confusee123
Jan 27, 2015
Media should be allowed to publish information about the private life: Discuss two different views

2 - Okay, first up, you were being asked to only discuss 2 opinions in this essay, the pro and the con. Why...

Writing Feedbackah_zafari - Jan 27, 2015
vangiespen
Jan 27, 2015
If the students study the same nation curriculum then they can equally perform in all the field

3 - All students should study the same national carriculum CURRICULUM at the school level is the...

Writing Feedbackkumawatakki - Sep 19, 2014
Elith
Jan 27, 2015
Ielts: People watch more movies from overseas? What are the reasons for this?

3 - Globalization has decreasednarrowed the gap between different societies. One of the consequence of this change is that people are leaning...

Writing Feedbackswathi_12345 - Jan 26, 2015
ah_zafari
Jan 27, 2015
The different floor plan design; sharing space, bedroom, toilet, tatami room, balcony, kitchen

3 - Thank you!

Writing Feedbackkonbon - Jan 24, 2015
konbon
Jan 27, 2015
Piano, my source of motivation - Umich/ Extracurricular CommonApp Essay

2 - Yes, you should make applause italics in the middle of the paragraph. It signifies that the action is not a part...

Writing Feedbackf3bruar7z - Jan 26, 2015
vangiespen
Jan 26, 2015
Weddings in Vietnam and America - two different ways to celebrate it

2 - Lin, I am not sure where you got your ideas about how the American wedding is celebrated but there are a...

Writing Feedbacklinhchi - Jan 26, 2015
vangiespen
Jan 26, 2015
Spending for space Project is Justify, other consider to be useless.

4 - To conclude, spending government money on the space exploration is not wisely a wise decision On balance, my personal opinions...

Writing Feedbackfarazshamsi - Jan 24, 2015
Vns9x
Jan 26, 2015
Experiences will aid you in various ways, but are no more sufficient for this contemporary world

3 - Based on my personal experience I would rate your essay somewhere around 7 - 8.

Writing FeedbackVns9x - Jan 26, 2015
swathi_12345
Jan 26, 2015
Ielts - "successful in an egalitarian society or Capitalistic"

3 - There are few people who believe that communist or egalitarian societies make people more successful. On the other hand, some others...

Writing Feedbackswathi_12345 - Jan 26, 2015
Vns9x
Jan 26, 2015
Animals vs human needs; we should know how to protect the animals and suppress our avarice

4 - Animals are the most precious residues that have left on this planet because they are the beauty of our planet and...

Writing FeedbackVns9x - Jan 25, 2015
swathi_12345
Jan 26, 2015
Women should stay at home and raise children: Do you agree or disagree

5 - Definitely a better version that clearly addresses the prompt. I found some parts to correct though. Those parts are as follows:...

Writing Feedbackah_zafari - Jan 25, 2015
vangiespen
Jan 26, 2015
IELTS - Paying for clothes, haircuts and beauty products - just to enhance own appearence?

4 - The main reason why you got 5 is that the essay contains only 229 words, which is less that the requirement...

Writing FeedbackShankargouda - Jan 25, 2015
ah_zafari
Jan 26, 2015
English usage is increasing day by day, therefore various local languages are becoming extinct IELTS

6 - Still does not have a blueprint a bit informal, better to use "thus", "hence", "therefore", "as a result",...

Writing Feedbackswathi_12345 - Jan 25, 2015
ah_zafari
Jan 25, 2015
Modern technology has more negative effects than positive ones: Agree or disagree?

5 - Thank you very much Luisa. I'm happy this time the argument was not lacking any part of the prompt. Thanks for...

Writing Feedbackah_zafari - Jan 24, 2015
ah_zafari
Jan 25, 2015
Children don't think too much while acting. They have all freedom to do anything what they want.

3 - Thanks a lot andrew!

Writing Feedbackrohitkhadse - Jan 23, 2015
rohitkhadse
Jan 25, 2015
A cornerstone for a person to get successful in life is planning. TOEFL activities Essay

4 - The first two sentence say the same thing. So do not repeat yourself. Start the introduction with a strong motivator,...

Writing Feedbackblackcat - Jan 23, 2015
ah_zafari
Jan 24, 2015
Have you ever had the feeling of leaving your own country behind for an exciting adventure overseas?

5 - come on man we are in 2015, the time that guys hunted girls using letters has way passed, you need...

Writing Feedbackkibz95 - Jan 24, 2015
ah_zafari
Jan 24, 2015
TOEFL: People always debate on whether or not children should follow their parents' career paths.

6 - Albeit, it is quite a salient and interesting essay to read. Notwithstanding, i want to point out some of yours debilities....

Writing Feedbacksimonexi - Jan 23, 2015
Vns9x
Jan 24, 2015
While studying some students take weekend or evening jobs to help with expenses. Share your opinion.

3 - Thank you for guiding me .. It was a big mistake and I even didn't notice!! Will correct soon thanks

Writing FeedbackPayaldx - Jan 24, 2015
Payaldx
Jan 24, 2015
Online Shopping increase in our daily life

2 - Faraz, kindly review your essay for capitalization errors and problems. The country is called the United States and is always capitalized...

Writing Feedbackfarazshamsi - Jan 24, 2015
vangiespen
Jan 24, 2015
TOEFL: The famous adage 'No pain, no gain' is by far the most logical expression I have ever heard.

5 - Yes, it is not only a deviation from the topic but it is also out of place. Your relationship with your...

Writing Feedbackkibz95 - Jan 23, 2015
vangiespen
Jan 24, 2015
Do you think that arts need to take a large part of the school timetable? Agree or disagree

5 - The choice is actually yours. If you add it to the main body, you will be able to better develop your...

Writing Feedbackah_zafari - Jan 24, 2015
vangiespen
Jan 24, 2015
Trying to devise an optimal way to teach has always been one of the priorities in pedagogic research

2 - ^_^

Writing Feedbackethenian - Jan 22, 2015
cslove134
Jan 24, 2015
Students need to learn practical skills: Agree or disagree?

8 - Honestly, the essay is fine. The only problem like I previously mentioned, is that you use examples that require a certain...

Writing Feedbackah_zafari - Jan 23, 2015
vangiespen
Jan 24, 2015
TOEFL: The best way to relax and reduce stress is by spending some time alone.

7 - I see. Yes, you are correct, I was focused on writing other essays that I temporarily forgot the topic of this...

Writing Feedbackkibz95 - Jan 23, 2015
kibz95
Jan 23, 2015
Making noise as much as you can!! Discuss two viewpoints :)

4 - It is only hard at the start Ahmad. The more practice that you get in essay writing, and the more widely...

Writing Feedbackah_zafari - Jan 23, 2015
vangiespen
Jan 23, 2015
SAT: "If you tell the truth, you don't have to remember anything"

2 - I believe you meant to say "harmless" in the last sentence of the third paragraph when you said harmful. Overall...

Writing FeedbackBurki - Jan 22, 2015
AndrewB
Jan 23, 2015
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