'work ethic principle' - Transfer Application

Please provide a statement (250 words minimum) that addresses your reasons for transferring and the objectives you hope to achieve.

Note: The Common Application essay should be the same for all colleges. Members that wish to review custom essay responses will request them on their Supplement form.

Hi guys,

I am trying to transfer out of SUNY Farmingdale to SUNY Binghamton. Any input/editing would be greatly appreciated and the favor WILL be returned. I put a little more than an hour into this and I know I need to add some personal touches to it here and there and a conclusion but anything that you guys see I will fix! THANKS! Feel free to be harsh and to the point! I'm not a very good writer!

I came to an extraordinary realization at the end of my junior year in high school that enabled me to understand an essential principle that I had yet to discover, work ethic. Throughout my first three years in high school, I did the minimal requirements and only did what was asked of me rather than overshooting above and beyond. As a result, my grades were relatively mediocre and my SAT score was weak. After receiving my high school cumulative G.P.A. and my SAT's, I became frustrated with my inability to apply myself. Despite my frustrations, I had discovered the concept of applying one's self and using self-discipline to achieve my highly set goals and get the job done at whatever cost. I had learned the hard way that our destiny is decided based upon one relatively harsh reality in this world; the reality that our lives are shaped according to the choices we make along our journey. Often times, it takes one to be pushed down in order to rise above, and that is what happened to me. The overwhelming sensation of, "it's too late" and, "there's nothing you can do now", left me gritting my teeth and shaking my head with helplessness. I hadn't necessarily made bad choices throughout high school, however I was just stagnant enough where I never sought to make the choices that would best prepare me for a successful future. I was essentially irrelevant to society, zero benefit, and just another molded teenager with ultimately no impact on anyone's life other than my family. After that feeling of helplessness that I received that day, I never want to remain stagnant again.

Attracted by the effortless commute, the coziness of living at home and the convenience of playing another season of ice hockey, I enrolled at SUNY Farmingdale in my senior year, based upon the luxuries of convenience and comfort. Little did I know that this is where my problem laid, comfort. I believe that in order to progress, we must step out of our comfort zone and despite my "comfortable" lifestyle throughout high school; I now see what I am capable of. I learned that reaching the brink of my potential is merely a self-test as to see what I am made of and now that I can see, I only crave progression. In all sincerity, I love my time thus far at Farmingdale and completing this application is slightly difficult because I have built a lot of close relationships with my classmates and professors. Farmingdale has provided me with a stage where it gave me the blank slate to implement these new principles into my work. Despite this, it just does not provide the challenges that I seek academically. Furthermore, during my visit at Binghamton, both the people and the landscape warmly welcomed me to the campus. With this, I have come to learn that I would like to move out of my cookie-cutter, small town suburban home and live at Binghamton to appreciate the tranquil rural lifestyle while living the college experience with the new dorms on campus. After visiting Binghamton I learned that it is the school of my dreams. Academically, it provides the rigorous challenge that I crave to expand my knowledge and intellect while allowing me to fulfill the much desired college experience. In three years from now, my objective is to be attending a tier one law school with a background in Economics or Political Science, in which I hope to have obtained from Binghamton, in order to give me a strong foundation in becoming a corporate attorney. I understand that a major factor of law school acceptance is an applicant's G.P.A and therefore I intend on working at whatever cost to achieve the highest grade I can reach. Throughout my years, I would like to be an active member on campus, becoming a member of the ice hockey team, pledging at a fraternity, joining the Chabad House and beginning a recycling club.

Thank you for your time.

rather than saying


, say "shooting above and beyond or else it sounds kind of redundant.


. i would consider rephrasing this to something more like, "i was essentially irrelevant to society, contributed very little, and was just another..."

change


to family's


maybe change that to "a test of my willpower" or something like that.

delete in in


other than those few mistakes great paper!