I thought the same thing about the conclusion. Here is a slightly edited second draft.
"The wind of Freedom blows".
It is this time of year where many eager students look forward to ending their high school education, and to pursue college, to mature from childhood to adulthood. To us, it is freedom; from our high schools, from our families and even sometimes from our country. This is not to say that we do not love these things, but rather that they inhibit us, limiting our perspective of the world.
But to me, Stanford's motto means far more. For me, the "wind of Freedom" symbolizes a breaking of conventions and restrictions. Rather than following the beaten paths of others, Stanford is a place to innovate; a place for unconventional solutions to unusual problems; a place to think outside the box; even if what is outside that box is frightening and unknown.
Professor Susskind's YouTube videos gave me an insight into topics I could have hardly comprehended otherwise, using simple examples to describe complex phenomena, from the quirky quantum physics to the bizarre world of string theory. His explanations radically transformed my outlook of the world, yet simultaneously left me even more mystified than before.
Stanford is unique because it combines my love for the intellectual thrill of innovation, with my views on moral obligation. Stanford's uncompleted Green Dorm project is a perfect example of this. Using salvaged wood combined with PVC to create green building materials and radiant floor systems to provide heating epitomizes the concept of taking the theoretical aspects of science, and transforming them into practical designs.
"The wind of Freedom blows" is an invitation for open scientific inquiry. But it is also a plea, a plea to keep these winds of Freedom blowing. A plea that I will gladly respond to, and hope to do so alongside Stanford.