[As one of the lone vegetarians in the Midwest, this has an impact on everyday life] and leads to numerous conversations with belligerent cowboys.
-Ha, Cowboys. Might sound a bit too stereotypical; it sounds like the cowboys are those that do manly things and would be shocked at vegetarianism or sensitivity.
-The first part of this sentence is too general, it is also grammatically incorrect.
Correction: Being one of the lone vegetarians in the Midwest has an impact on my everyday life.
-But like I said, what kind of impact? A summarizing conclusion is not necessary for such a short response.Eight years ago in my elementary school, I licked the
last remnants of Shepherd's pie from a fork. Such a meaty morsel has not passed my lips since then.
-Kinda sounds like you miss meat
-last remnants is repetitive
-You could shorten it a bit to allow for more about your personal decision to become vegetarian. E.g. The last time I've swallowed a piece of meat was eight years ago, when I licked the remnants of a Shepherd's pie.Some perceive vegetarianism as a dietary choice, but for me it is a life path with roots in appalling cafeteria victuals.
-You became vegetarian just because you didn't like how cafeteria food tasted? Not very compelling.Vegetarianism prevents many of the health problems sweeping America, pushes back against inhumane treatment of animals, and moves the planet towards a more sustainable existence.
-You aren't trying to persuade the reader to become vegetarian; rather, you are trying to show
them how being vegetarian has affected you.