Their work plays a major role on the quality of life for communities and individuals for generations to come.
replace with "in" & "of"
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This is what HAS inspired me to want to become a civil engineer" you don't really don't really specify what exactly has inspired. the previous statement says more about the importnace of the profession
"interest was prompted" I'm not sure whether interest can be prompted
"when I was able to witnessED two of the tallest buildings in the world" maybe sth like "saw with my own eyes"? usually you can witness some action. The buildings were, at least one of them was. I think it's better if you mention it. and start this sentence with a new paragraph
"and working with a team to solve innovative problems that" you don't have say about the team
"However..." new paragraph
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During my time interning " it's better to say "internship"
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opportunity to shadow a civil engineer" what do you meam by this?
"worked ON solvING"
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the willingness to think creatively." it's better to say just "creative thinking" you can want or not want to think creatively it's a skill, ability and you eaither have it developed or not
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From my experiences academically and through my internship" "academic experience and at the internship"
Overall impression is good. Only that you have to tell more what you did at the internship