Overall, this is great and unique. I just have a few wording suggestions:
In elementary school, I wanted to make sure everyone knew that
I was as good as any boy. Throughout
high school, I developed into an outspoken feminist, or, as one of my friends calls me, "a dirty man-hater".
(only because of the word "developed"; it suggests between a period of time)Therefore
, it was natural to choose Gender & Sexuality Studies as my major at NYU. This program not only offers
me a chance to read and study- it gives me a
chance to actively
explore the meanings of "male" and "female".
If you can, please check out my NYU supplement: