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"Medicine, Center of Culture, George Carlin" NYU + "Heart to Heart" Commonapp


NissanHaque 3 / 10  
Dec 28, 2010   #1
Hey, these 3 short essays are part of the NYU supplemental essays. Each have a 500 character limit and I am just under that. Please be aware of this. I thought I'd post these in one place so it would be easier for me to read and cycle through the corrections.

Please tell us what led you to select both your anticipated academic area(s) of study and the NYU school / college / program or the Abu Dhabi campus. What interests you most about your intended discipline? Mention any extracurricular or non-school-related activities or experiences that demonstrate your interest.

My fascination with medicine stemmed from a darker, more horrid story of my father's struggle with cardiac failure. Since the day he endured both a heart attack and a stroke, I've devoted myself to becoming a cardiologist. What ensued was a rapid development of a newfound passion, internships with top cardiologists in NYC, volunteering at local hospitals, and studying vigorously on the human heart. NYU offers both unparalleled academic opportunities and the chance to grow as a global citizen.

NYU is 'In and of the City' and 'In and of the World.' What does the concept of a global network university mean to you? How do you think studying in New York City, Abu Dhabi, or one of NYU's global sites would change you as a person and equip you to build cross-cultural relationships at NYU and beyond?

New York City is the most pronounced center of opportunity, the heart of global culture, the very nucleus of international dialogue, and home to one of the most globally connected universities in the world. Studying at NYU will allow me to embrace my desire to become part of the larger scientific community and participate in investigative research on a global platform. I believe NYU will outfit me with the ability to contribute to society with a global perspective in mind.

If you had the opportunity to bring any person -- past or present, fictional or nonfictional -- to a place that is special to you (your hometown or country, a favorite location, etc), who would you bring and why? Tell us what you would share with that person.

A man dressed in all-black with slick white hair and pale skin shouted obscenities at a crowd and peculiarly received a thunderous standing ovation. He expressed not only his views language and free-expression, but his bleak yet humorous take on the progression of the human existence. George Carlin was a satirist like no other, but I'd like to show him my village deep in

Bangladesh. A community rebuilds after a flood, and their perseverance embraces the notion that humanity still has a chance.
Hannover96 4 / 17  
Dec 29, 2010   #2
Holy smokes. Unfortunetely we're in competition, applying for the same school, but your essays are sort of brilliant. Just one change. "He expressed not only his views of language and free-expression"

Congratulations on being scientific and articulate. Dang it.
OP NissanHaque 3 / 10  
Jan 8, 2011   #3
Could a moderator please close this thread?
EF_Kevin 8 / 13,321 129  
Jan 11, 2011   #4
studying vigorously on the human heart. --When you get to this part, it would be really helpful if you gave a sentence that told an example of a book, article, or online resource you have been reading. Back this assertion with evidence. Say you have been studying modern cardiac medicine, and then mention one or two articles/books you have been reading.

New York City is the most pronounced center----This essay does not seem to have much meaning. It has truisms. You should try to let this essay show that you have a carefully planned process with short term goals... explain why a globally connected school is important for someone with your unique plan.

That last essay, about bring Carlin to Bangladesh to cure his cynicism...it's brilliant!! Perfect.


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