PROMPT: In the space provided below, please elaborate on one of your activities (extracurricular, personal activities, or work experience) (150 words or fewer).
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It was love at first strum. I could practically feel tropical sunshine, the melody washing over me like mild waves: ukulele. While I've always loved music, this instrument seemed as if it were tailored to fit me. Like me, the ukulele is sometimes very funny, sometimes very calm, but always small and cheery. I like to think that in my life, there are endless possibilities. Similarly, the ukulele challenges its player to push creative boundaries for a unique musical experience. However, with its bright sound, it's difficult to make the ukulele sound melancholy. I can spend hours playing adaptations of my favorite acoustic songs, poppy radio tunes, hard rock anthems, or simple scales, and never once does the ukulele fail to warm my heart or stimulate my imagination. The ukulele is my catharsis, my amusement, my challenge. Some call it a hobby; I call it love.
Very well written. I especially like ur last line. But in my opinion, u wrote more about the instrument rather than the activity, i.e. u playing it.
Would u take a look at my 1?
I like to think that in my life, there are endless possibilities.
I sense a bit of structural problem. My suggestion : "I believe that there are endless possibilities in life."
Well written indeed! Nice conclusion.
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