'I looked at rankings' - SANTA CLARA short prompt

Briefly describe how you learned about Santa Clara University.
I first heard about Santa Clara when my father graduated from the school and really liked it. In 4th grade, as part of the California missions unit, I focused on Santa Clara for my project. While researching, I came across many books that made positive references to how successful the university is. Later, I visited the campus while watching my cousin graduate, and was drawn to the unique architecture and the openness of the quad. The summer after 9th grade, l took a computer class during which I discovered the way the classrooms looked. By now, I was acquainted enough with Santa Clara to set my sights on spending my undergraduate years there. Then came the time for college research, during which I looked at rankings. The US News and World Report gave high ratings to the school in business and engineering - two programs where I am considering declaring a major in. After a lifetime of familiarity with and admiration of the school, I feel that SCU will be a great learning experience.

The first sentence can be broken down, it seems like it's all clustered up, you can say "I first heard about Santa Clara when my father graduated from the school. I really liked it because (then put why you like it).

The fourth sentence, you can say "A few years later, i visited the campus during my cousin's graduation, and was drawn to the unique architecture and openness of the quad.

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