There are various universities that provide students with good study environment , faculty but lack the ability to integrate students into the local community .However NYU provide students with good study environment and also helps them to connect with the community through local institutions , community service and public participation. I choose NYU Abu Dhabi due to its capability to involve student with locals while at the same time preparing them for future career in that area or other else. Apart from that I also choose NYU Abu Dhabi because of its highly skilled faculty. I believe that it is very important for an individual to have a well placed and structured campus that allows student to practice or carry out any particular research , but also gain an experience that would help them later on in their lives.
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Hope, you spend most of your essay mentioning the qualities NYU Abu Dhabi has, especially in comparison with other institutions, but you don't speak much about how you fit into their campus. I don't know if you have a required word limit, but maybe add in what YOU specifically bring to the campus and how you would fit in there.
Talk a little more about features the school has to offer. I would mention your major, just to give the school a little more insight about what you hope to accomplish at NYU Abu Dhabi. I would also mention the location of the school also, maybe talk about how much you like Abu Dhabi, if you visited there before or maybe you want to continue travelling the world.
You are opting to attend a branch of NYU outside of the United States. That makes your interest in this particular university different and out of the ordinary. the current discussion that you gave submits only a general discussion that could be used to describe any university in the world, including NYU. Therefore, you need to make sure that your statement will "pop" in the eyes of the reviewer.
Making the essay stand out will depend upon how well you discuss the reasons that you opted to study at NYU-AD instead of NYU itself. You have a rare opportunity to attend college at the main campus in New York. So why did you opt for the Abu Dhabi setting? if you can differentiate the reasons behind your choice, then your response will be able to discuss a number of reasons that, quite possibly, other students may not think of when discussing your interest in NYU- Abu Dhabi.
