I thought God they offer the most choices for students
You don't have to include God, it sounds awkward. You could say, I was amazed by the number/variety of courses...
I love Math, and Writing, and foreign languages (specify if you want to, its better to) and have beening playing the Piano for over 13 years. I've always wanted to become a well-rounded student .
I suggest you get rid of that line as its cliche. Everyone wants to be a well-rounded student, right??
the May Term program
attracted (grasped) my attention
The third thing I love about IWU is the attention to sports. Doing sports makes me feel lively and fiery and I always find ways to do exercises.
Start off with finally instead of third. Attention sounds awkward, use dedication.
Doing sports makes everyone feel lively - try something else!
When I found that the IWU Titans ranked seventh among all colleges and universities in the number of athletes who honored Academic All-America and IWU sports teams
hold top ranking positions nationally I knew that IWU is the place where I can feel
my burning youth.Sounds awkward.
Good Luck!