I've learned that the only time the word success comes before work is in the dictionary.
First off, I really like how you started this essay with this. I thought that it was unique when you opened your essay. Just make sure you avoid contractions.
I've learned that the only time the word success comes before work is in the dictionary. Hard work is a central part of my philosophy towards success which is why I have taken advanced placement courses throughout high school to challenge myself as well as to prepare for college. I gained the ability to work hard and endure challenges through my involvement in sports, extracurricular activities, and church service. Progress reports and student awards reflect my hard work in school especially this year; I am enrolled in four advanced placement classes and three honors classes.
How many words does your essay have to be? If it needs to be longer then I would suggest giving examples. It helps to be specific when you have to answer these types of prompts. Give
specific examples of how your involvement shows that hard work is part of your philosophy. Also, the school would know through your transcripts that you are taking advanced classes, so there is no need to include that.