My future roommate,
Whenever I think of sharing an apartment or a room with one person, I couldn't help but smile at the memory of the episode of "The Bernstein's" when "brother bear" and "sister bear" are seen painting a white line along the middle of the room explaining: "This is my side; this is yours. Don't go on my part!"
Looking back nostalgically at the stories of these anthropomorphic bears, I notice that despite being angry at each other for certain moments, they have always been able to reach a compromise; as I look forward to doing with you.
Born and raised in a family of five members, negotiation and compromise have become regular routine to me. Whether it's "Lower the volume and stop listening to music!" or "turn off the air-conditioning, I'm cold" or "change the channel, I want to watch the news!" I've always been capable of reaching agreements and organize arrangements to avoid meaningless disputes and unnecessary squabbling.
I am from Lebanon, a country off the coast of the Mediterranean, and have lived there for as long as I can remember, so I might bring some colorful bed covers and small ornaments to spice up our living arrangement. Renowned for our cuisine and famous in the family for my excellent cooking, I look forward to surprising you with the traditional Tabbouleh and Kafta dishes along with a marinated filet of Red Snapper, broiled and topped with lightly spiced sauce. I'm sure you will appreciate and be delighted with the hospitality and outgoingness that I have learned from my culture, well that, and our passion for sports. I can't wait to spend my Sunday afternoons laying on the couch, watching Major League soccer and eating pepperoni pizzas.
I'm very eco-friendly, so we'll need two bins in the kitchen to separate the items that can be recycled from those that can't! As you look around the room, you might see many picture frames with photos that I took of my family and friends, for I especially like having pictures of my beloved ones as motivation, oh and don't worry I can get some more picture frames for your photographs. Moreover, I have an insatiable appetite for reading and I can be a voracious reader at times, so I will need you to spare me a few bookshelves for all my novels.
One more thing, can you sleep with lights on? I tend to be a hard worker and study till quite late in the night. However, if you can't, I'd gladly move to the library.
You will find out soon that I am a friendly person; I enjoy sharing my thoughts, and giving my opinion on yours. I'm sure that we will enjoy our freshman year and I hope we will not have to paint a white line along the middle of the room.
With Love,
Jawad
-One of the things I believe need editing: The last two paragraphs, the greeting and signature
PLEASE SUGGEST A TITLE (and dont forget to proofred my other essay ;))
-The essay is too long, what can i remove?
Aside from all the grammar mistakes, what do you think i should change?
I feel that the transition between paragraphs isnt very smooth, any ideas?
How do you think I can begin and end it in an "unconventional" way?
