'daydreaming about my Senior Night' - Short Response

Prompt: Elaborate on one of your extracurricular activities

As my final track season nears, I keep daydreaming about my Senior Night - the party at the end of the season where the team shows their appreciation for the seniors. It's tradition for each senior to give a mini impromptu speech, but I can't stop mentally preparing mine early. I'm scared that if I think on the spot, the words won't come out right. I can't afford for that to happen, because I need my teammates to know what they mean to me. I need them to know that practicing alongside them has taught me about passion and endurance. I need them to know that representing them at important meets has given me invaluable experience in performing under extreme pressure. Most importantly, I need to thank them for showing me how it feels to belong - for loving and accepting me when I needed it most. I need to let them know that they've taught me the importance of a strong community. I need them to know that I love them, and that I'll always be there for them. Once a family, always a family.

Any comments are appreciated!

I think this is actually pretty good at its core but I wish it told a bit more about what made you want to do track in the first place....maybe mention one of your events

You might want to focus on what you do in track. What event do you run. Details would perhaps be helpful for other admission officers. This is a very interesting way to express your love for the sport and your team mates. Good luck!!!