Unanswered [6] | Urgent [0]
  

Home / Undergraduate   % width Posts: 5


I was confident about the exam : Account of my failure


HelloPeople 1 / 2  
Oct 12, 2013   #1
Hello Guys
I finished my underraduate essay. And I am not quite sure if it is appealing to people, giving my critical account and my thorough reflection. I would really appreciate if you liked it, if opening sentence is orginal et cetera. In addition, if you find any discrepancy in grammar, vocabulary, I will be grateful

Thank ya!
----------------------------------------------
Prompt.
Recount an incident or time when you experienced failure. How did it affect you, and what lessons did you learn?


That failure was the best what could ever happened to me. Through this occasion I realized my vices and was induced to take action.

I was ascending a stairway in Charles University up to highest floor, where I was supposed to do a medical exam. I progressed the stairs sedately, holding my breath, keeping the pace; I began slowly to overtake other students climbing the stairs. No wonder, I had been training cycling and running, thus these high stairs were not a big deal for me. Likewise, my legs weren't trembling nervously because I knew this exam is going to be easy task for me.

When I drew closer, I joined the queue lining up in front of the examination room. I looked up at the girl in blue t-shirt who was trying to catch up every word from her preparation book for medical universities. "You won't remember it", I told her condescendingly and I went on: "You'd better calm yourself. Then you'll be more concentrated on work with clear mind". She looked up at me sharply, "I think I'll get by without your advice", she retorted. I excused myself and left her alone in her desperate attempt to learn everything at the very last moment.

I was confident about the exam above all. Possessing the experience from the Biology olympiad, working at laboratory in Charles University, or lectures of physics at faculty of mathematics and physics were enough satisfactory for me that I would not have any problem to pass easily the exams. However, the exam has started, my positiveness faded slowly away. The chemistry tests was above my capabilities. Likewise, the physical tests was a pitfall as well. During the break between physical exam and last, biology test I encountered the girl in blue t-shirt in the corridor and I opted to rather avoid her. I attributed my debacle to the improper preparation of my school. My self-confident had suffered a total wipeout.

Descending the stairs was more painful and difficult than ascending them. At the end, I failed in the exams. I was 20th below the line. I was ignorant to every advice about studying. It was due to my conceit that I failed so dishonestly. If had bought preparation books for medical universities, from which those exams were composed, I would have passed the exams. I was convinced that without a studying I could pass the exams. I was frivolous. I was ill-prepared. I have learnt a lesson.

Micheal Jordan, the famous basketball player, was cut from his high school basketball team. This failure was an incentive to work harder at perfecting his game. Later on, he said that without this event, he would probably not become the star. Jordan's rise serves me as an ideal for new approach. I've learnt to take things seriously and do not ever understimate any challenge yet it looks as easy task. I also realize, now, that being satisfied with the little I have leads to destruction; to be successful I need to be tenacious and willing to push the limits. And it also shows that being conceited always causes trouble, that we realize our failures and grow better.

Luckily, after making an appeal I was accepted ultimately. I met the girl in blue t-shirt and we have become friends.
Pahan 1 / 1,906 553  
Oct 13, 2013   #2
That failure was the best what could ever happened to me. Through this occasion I realized my vices and was induced to take action.

I feel this should come in the latter parts of your response. The reader is eager to know what your failure is before anything else.

I was ascending a stairway in Charles University up to highest floor, where I was supposed to do a medical exam

I was climbing up stairs to the top most floor at Charles University (specify the building_ to show up at the medical examination.

"I think I'll get by without your advice", she retorted.

"I think I can handle it without your advice", she snatched me.
OP HelloPeople 1 / 2  
Oct 13, 2013   #3
Thank you! Was it appealing to you?

Pahan writes: "I feel this should come in the latter parts of your response. The reader is eager to know what your failure is before anything else."

I thought this opening sentence attracks reader to proceed further in reading. The first two sentences also serve as thesis substantiated with last paragraphs. That that failure helped me to realize my vices and was induced to take actaion. Do you think i can refine it with something more lucid and straightforward?
Pahan 1 / 1,906 553  
Oct 13, 2013   #4
Pahan writes: "I feel this should come in the latter parts of your response. The reader is eager to know what your failure is before anything else."

hey, that's my idea .... let see what others have got to say .... :)
OP HelloPeople 1 / 2  
Oct 13, 2013   #5
That would be awsome if somebody shared his or her opinion too..


Home / Undergraduate / I was confident about the exam : Account of my failure
Writing
Editing Help?
Fill in one of the forms below to get professional help with your assignments:

Graduate Writing / Editing:
GraduateWriter form ◳

Best Essay Service:
CustomPapers form ◳

Excellence in Editing:
Rose Editing ◳

AI-Paper Rewriting:
Robot Rewrite ◳