Your prompt was very broad - is this an essay on your concept of common sense? You also write that it is for the comm app. As such, I was hoping to read more about what common sense means to you as a person and how you apply it in life (as it relates to applying to university.) Using my common sense, this was the context in which I read your essay.
As such, before getting further into the essay, please confirm if this is the right essay for the comm app. If this is just for essay-writing, then here are general comments:
- the first section of your opening sentence does not make a connection to the second section
If a man is raised knowing to fight for every dispute, as far as he is concerned, that is what is right; it is only common sense to show that your opinion is right, no matter the cost to yourself
Are you confusing common sense with natural physical reflexes or habits?what theyone perceives and what they believes in are the utmost key factors to how the common sense works?? acts.
I was lost in the final paragraph. You posited a question, then provided the answer that "
proper morals" could "
solve the dispute." You did not define what this meant and ended with statements that seem to defeat the purpose of the essay.
p.s. You are missing some punctuation (hypens, commas and and ' possessives.)