Topic : Describe a circumstance, obstacle or conflict in your life, and the skills and resources you used to resolve it. Did it change you? If so, how?
"If you have good thoughts, they will shine out of your face like sunbeams, and you will always look lovely" A powerful quote by Roald Dahl. Life is different for everyone. Some people live a very easy life, some, a sheltered life, and some, a very hard life. Then there's the ones who live a mixture. People come and go and they will change your life in ways that you never would've thought. Sometimes all you want to do is crawl into your room and never come out. You can live half of your life in a deep malaise and never want help. Yet, you just want to be reached out to, you want someone to notice your pain. Maturing is taking those feelings and problems and not letting them control you.
For much of my life, I was in a deep depression. Whether if it was from being bullied or because of my own mental problems, I'm not too sure, but I believe it was because of both. I would lay in my bed for hours, doing absolutely nothing. It's scary to look back on, because I know that I just didn't care about anything, or anyone. It was a darkness that never seemed to go away. The darkness was darker than black, darker than the darkest thing ever. Emotional sadness doesn't describe how I felt, it was deeper. My whole body ached from just being sad. I felt as if my entire body would break if I were to even move. I was disconnected from everything I loved. I craved for attention, for someone to ask me what was wrong, but when someone did, I snapped. My family would be worried about me, but I would turn around and pay no mind to them. I didn't want to come to terms with what was wrong with me, but I knew exactly what it was.
At the end of freshman year, I decided to reach out. I met someone who understood how I felt, respected me, and was there for me. Also, I reached out to my family. My friend Haeley was going through the same things I was going through, and we supported each other's recovery. Our bond was immediate, we only knew each other for a few months, but it felt as if we had been best friends our entire lives. She taught me that there was more to life, and that I should embrace the love that was poured out onto me from family and friends. Being encouraged by her made me so much happier. The perpetual sadness that once haunted me was slowly disappearing, The cliche saying of "see the light at the end of the tunnel" suddenly became true for me. A light switch inside of me switched on and it seemed as if the darkness vanished.
Sometimes life seems to not play in my favor. As if everything is out to get me, but I can't nor will I let it get to me. Going through my darkness and finally seeing light has showed me that life will only throw at me what I can take, and I now know that I can take a lot. Being sad for so long and finally being happy is a revelation of how strong I am. There are days that all I want to do is crawl into bed and sleep. These days test me and my strength, but I am oblivious to these feelings. My favorite quote is from a song that I learned growing up in Sabbath school, "this little light, I'm going to let it shine". My light is going to shine bright throughout all my struggles. Nothing is going to get in my way of happiness.
I think some parts in your essay are not quiet relevant to your main topic and idea.
Don't worry about that one essay cannot show all your perspectives. We have supplements. You can further narrow down what you wanna show in this essay and then put focus on this one. If you have space to add other things , then do it until the maximum of words. But do not forget explore them well in your essay.
I hope this suggestion can help you
- Then there's the ones who live a mixturemixed life .
- MaturingBeing a Mature individual meansis taking those feelings
- Emotional sadness doesn't describe how I felt, it was deeper .
- Also, I also reached out to my family.
- Being encouraged byThe encouragement from her made me so much happier.
- Sometimes life seems to not play in my favorbe unfair .
- Going through mythis darkness
- and finally seeing the light has showed me
Quiet a sad story you have there Mary, however, you know that there is always that light at the end of the tunnel as well as the rainbow after all the rainy days.
You did write this essay well, I'd like to remind you of the linking verbs, you seem to forget that you have them and you need them as part of your sentences, they may seem a few little characters but they definitely make a huge difference, they complete your sentence.
