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I will try to elaborate on why I would make a good roommate; Stanford Supplement


schlotti 2 / 3  
Sep 23, 2012   #1
Prompt: Virtually all of Stanford's undergraduates live on campus. Write a note to your future roommate that reveals something about you or that will help your roommateïand usïknow you better.

My essay: (2000 characters max)

Since I have never had a roommate before, my perception of what it's like to live with myself may be slightly distorted, but I will try to elaborate on why I would make a good roommate.

The most defining property of me as a roommate is that I am easy to talk to. There is little I am not interested in, and I'm great to talk to about literature, science, mathematics, philosophy, politics, history and languages. I am impossible to offend, very easy-going, and since I speak English, German, Hebrew and Russian and understand most Romanic languages, there is a good chance that my roommate and me won't have a hard time conversing in their native language if it happens not to be English.

Furthermore, I produce very little noise, for I do not usually listen to music while working. Since I like staying up until late at night, waking up late, and generally am more of a nocturnal type of person, I guess that's a quite relevant property of mine. It also attributes to the fact that I can easily ensure the absence of sleep-impeding mosquitoes at night. I feel obliged to also mention that I have a slight aversion to spiders, and prefer to "take care" of those in my proximity ï with as little complaining as my arachnophobia permits.

Lastly, I would like to say that I am a very humorous person and I love joking. While some people told me that they don't know whether or not I'm being serious half of the time, I can but hope that this is not too bad, especially considering that the other people I talked with deemed the former ones as lacking a sense of humor. One minor quirk of mine is that sometimes, I might have a hard time to stop laughing, but other than that, I think I am a person that is easy to live with ï keeping in mind, of course, the objectivity I can or cannot maintain while judging myself.

Any ideas how to improve it and on whether it's appropriate for Stanford?
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Sep 23, 2012   #2
" that's a quite relevant property of mine"

That's stating the obvious, it doesn't seem out of place, but if you continue the trend you may sound redundant. "I am a very humorous person and I love joking." < If you're humorous, I'm sure you love to joke.

Otherwise your use of rhetoric is great.

Please help with mine!
OP schlotti 2 / 3  
Sep 23, 2012   #3
Here's a revamped version of my essay:

Since I have never had a roommate before, my perception of what it's like to live with myself may be slightly distorted, but I will try to elaborate on why I would make a good roommate.

The most defining property of me as a roommate is that I am easy to talk to. There is little I am not interested in, and I'm great to talk to about literature, science, mathematics, philosophy, politics, history and languages. I am impossible to offend, very easy-going, and since I speak English, German, Hebrew and Russian and understand most Romanic languages, there is a good chance that my roommate and me won't have a hard time conversing in their native language if it happens not to be English.

Furthermore, I produce very little noise, for I do not usually listen to music while working. Since I like staying up until late at night, waking up late, and generally am more of a nocturnal type of person, I guess that's a quite important property to those rather diurnal specimens of mankind who might happen to share a room with me. It also attributes to the fact that I can easily ensure the absence of sleep-impeding mosquitoes at night. I feel obliged to also mention that I have a slight aversion to spiders, and prefer to "take care" of those in my proximity - with as little complaining as my arachnophobia permits.

Lastly, I would like to say that I am a very humorous person. While some people complained to me that due to my love to joke, they don't know whether or not I'm being serious half of the time, I can but hope that this is not too bad, especially considering that the other people I talked to deemed the former ones as lacking a sense of humor. One minor quirk of mine is that sometimes, I might have a hard time to stop laughing, but other than that, I think I am a person that is easy to live with - keeping in mind, of course, the objectivity I can or cannot maintain while judging myself.
hannahlorelei 3 / 11  
Sep 23, 2012   #4
Your use of humor is tasteful, and gives the essay enough personality to liven it up without being over the top. Nicely done!
ndiduch 2 / 3  
Sep 23, 2012   #5
I actually like the humor! It is awesome. I think you did an excellent job. I think you would make a cool roomie.
OP schlotti 2 / 3  
Sep 24, 2012   #6
Thanks for the kind feedback! Any criticism regarding my grammar?


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