On the first day of the Macaulay Summer Scholars Academy, I was
ready, ready excited/eager
to learn the basics of Algebra II
and so in order
to advance to Pre-calculus in my junior year. However, the instructor
taught no did not teach
algebra II basics,
but advanced trigonometry and College Algebra. His mouthful of math jargon such as scalar, vector, delta, and theta
When I got home, I emailed my math teacher about my situation. He wrote back: "YingBin, you should stay in the program. It is always good to challenge yourself. Just learn as much as you can. Try to teach yourself the basics so you can understand the advance topics."
In the following week, after another arduous day, as the A Train arrived, I crammed into the train and dropped down in a seat. I closed my eyes and rested my head on the board. But, my determination to master the basics,
flickered in my mind. I rubbed the tightness on my temple and pulled out an Algebra II review book.
Is this for the common application extracurricular activity essay?
My only comment is that the transitions are not too smooth and each paragraph seems to be about three different things, doesn't feel very connected. The concluding paragraph needs some work. Otherwise it can be a really good essay.
Hope this helps. If you don't mind could you take a look at my common app. extracurricular essay. Thanks!