Volunteering (a short extracurricular activity essay)

One of the things I like to do is volunteer my time to help others. This summer I had a chance to help landscape a newly built house through Habitat for Humanity with my church's youth group. When we got there, there was a brand new house that was built but the area around the house looked uninviting and sloppy. Our job was to help take out all the big rocks around the house so that they could plant grass. When we started doing this, we saw how hard it actually was. After about two hours of removing large rocks from around the house, we started to dig a hole in which we would later plant a tree. Through this I learned how important it is to help the community. Without my help or the help of my youth group, the workers would have a much harder time finishing the house, delaying the arrival of a family that really needs a place to live. I also learned to work with others. I learned that even the simplest tasks could seem hard unless you have others to help you with.

Help would be much appreciated =)

the workers would've had a much harder time finishing the house, which would've delayed the.

and I would say either add 'it' and the end or that the 'with' off.

Just my opinion. :)

That is god advice from kikozang! I'll help, too:

I volunteered my time over the summer when I had a chance to help landscape a newly built house through Habitat for Humanity with my church's youth group. When we got there, there was a brand new house that was built but the area around the house looked uninviting and sloppy. Our job was to help take out all the big rocks around the house so that they could plant grass. When we started doing this, we saw how hard it actually was. After about two hours of removing large rocks from around the house, we started to dig a hole in which we would later plant a tree. Through this I learned how important it is to help the community. Without my help or the help of my youth group, the workers would have a much harder time finishing the house, delaying the arrival of a family that really needs a place to live. I also learned something important about working with others: even the simplest tasks could seem hard unless you have others to help you, but in the presence of friends the most daunting tasks become enjoyable.