Attached on merging: Revised short activity essay..would you please help me??
I need to delete almost 30 words..can you please help me edit it??
Is it a strong short essay??
I feel sick. I am nervous and my stomach is turning. Six people in a 9x6 volleyball field waiting for the referee whistle. The match has started, my mind moves to another world, where there is nothing beside that yellow-blue striped ball. Serving, running, passing and smashing: we got the first point and enthusiasm begun to raise encouraged by people's applause. The emotion turns to be concentration and determination and a lot of up's and down's accompany the whole match. At the we won the most important match of the championship: we were not going to relegate anymore. It was the energy, the teamwork and the perseverance that, that day, made me feel as if I had reached a great accomplishment. I am not the best athlete ever, but volleyball makes me feel free: while my body is under physical effort my mind literally flies and gets relaxed. Volleyball is the way I express the belief I have in my instinct, the motivation and the need of help I necessitate to improve every day.