crystalcat 1 / - Feb 9, 2014 #1Here is my application essay for a business program in university.-1500 characters or lessPlease comment if you have any suggestions. I kinda suck at essays. ;PI am a quiet girl in my leisure time and what I like is reading and sketching. The books open a whole new world in front of me. I like the way detectives find out who the murder is in Agatha Christie's novels, and I like the magic and power of a completely different world in Lord of Rings. Reading offers me a chance to have the feeling that I am actually being one of the people on scene. It brings me knowledge about various cultures. Also, I am able to be more creative. I usually sketch the characters from the novels I read based on my imagination. Sometimes I even create my own characters and I draw my own stories. Similar to reading, I create a new world in my drawing, where I can express myself and what I see in the real life. I look through others' art pieces and I get more ideas from them. I take these two hobbies to my daily life. I find a volunteer work to do art and crafting making. I met a lot of people who have the same hobby as me. I like having conversations with them and I appreciate their art work. I surly learned a lot from their enthusiasm towards their work and the spirit of never give up what they like. I get inspiration from them and I have more stories to tell in my own work. Part of the reasons I really want to get into ...(the name of that program) is also related to my hobby. Besides being a successful business girl, I would like to continue my childhood dream of having my own art shop. Reading and sketching are good ways to learn knowledge since they are what I like to do. I absorb new things from books I read, and I draw things to have more understanding of these knowledge. They bring colours to my life and I will never give up on them.- I appreciate that if you could make corrections to my grammar and the organization of this essay. Thank you so much! :) -
jjs6067 1 / 1 Feb 9, 2014 #2I am a quiet girl, and in my leisure time I like to read and sketch.The books open a whole new world in front of me.Change "Lord of Rings" to "The Lord of the Rings."I find a volunteer work to do art and crafting making.I surely learned a lot from their enthusiasm towards their work and the spirit of never giving up what they like.
dumi 1 / 6,925 1592 Feb 10, 2014 #3I am a quiet girl in my leisure time and what I like is reading and sketching.I am a quiet girl in nature and I'd like to spend my leisure time reading books and sketching.I like the way detectives find out who the murderer is in Agatha Christie's novels, and I likeam fascinated with the magic and power of a completely different world in Lord of Rings.