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Author: Tut Gai
   
Dec 16, 2010, 12:09am   #1
Tut Gai
11/22/1980
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Under tree classroom

My parents were cattle headers and farmers neither of them ever attended school, but I learned that my father wanted to send me to school so I can become not the same person he is. But unfortunately, as the civil war in South Sudan goes on my village was attacked and I lost members of my family including my father who was killed. Suddenly I end up in a refugees Camp in Ethiopia together with a large numbers of lost kids known as 'Sudanese Lost Boys" where I first started school in under tree class room.
At age of sixth before I become a "Lost Boy" I remember one of my conversation with my father, he told me that he will sell all his cattle someday to pay for my schooling. He goes on and tells me some example of how life could be different if he were educated. First he said with education you can be a pilot, drive a car, Motor boats, talking in the radio, those sound awesome to me and become a plan to me. And then he concluded with "and there are some more good things" he pick only what he knows that I like to capture my attention.
As a "Lost Boy" or an orphan war child I started my school under the tree class room in refugees' camp in Ethiopia camp run by UNHCR in late 1980th. In the beginning we don't have exercise books, black boards, chalks. The first blackboard I ever seen was a skin of an animal, the teacher was writing on it with a piece of charcoal, while I and other pupils write with our fingers on the dusts. Few months later the "Red Cross" provided some blackboard text books and exercise books but the classes remain under the tree before installing plastic tents.
I came to United States in Jan, 2007 under refugee program sponsored by "World Relief" of Evangelical Church. A huge white snow was on the ground; my host family gave me winter clothes in the airport but it still too cold for me. In the city everything was different, how people talk, make things, and behave. A week later I started attending school in the real class room for the first time in my life different from the one under the tree. And my hope for education started to strengthen. I remember what my father told me about education and I believed that with education I will be someone someday as my father wanted me to.
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Author: Danielle Flowers
   
Dec 16, 2010, 10:16pm   #2
My parents were cattle headers and farmers. Neither of them have ever attended school, but I knew that my father wanted to send me to school so I could become not the same person he is(perhaps the phrase is more than what he is). [font#FF0000]He told me that he would sell all his cattle someday to pay for my schooling.[/font] He goes on and told me some example of how life could be different if I were educated. But Unfortunately, as the civil war in South Sudan went on, my village was attacked and I lost members of my family including my father and others in my family who were killed. Suddenly, I end up I found myself in a refugees camp in Ethiopia together with a large numbers of lost other kids known as 'Sudanese Lost Boys". It was there that I began school in under tree class room. (I'm not so sure I understand this phrase)
In the beginning we didn't have exercise books, blackboards, chalks or chalk. The first blackboard I ever seen saw was a skin of an animal, the first piece of chalk, charcoal. while I and other pupils write with our fingers on the dusts. In wasn't until a few months had passed Few months later that the "Red Cross" donated some blackboards, text books, and exercise books but the classes remain under the tree before installing plastic tents.
I came to United States in January, 2007 under a refugee program sponsored by "World Relief" of an Evangelical Church. A huge White snow sat(I think this sounds better) on the ground. Though my host family gave me winter clothes at the airport, I couldn't get warm. In the city everything was different. how people talk, make things, and behave. I began attending school in a real classroom, for the first time in my life and it was different from the one under the tree. Yet my hope for education started to strengthen. I remember what my father told me about education and I believed that with education I will be someone someday as my father wanted me to (This sentence is a little awkward. I would say revise it to sum up the whole essay and the journey you completed)
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Author: Tut Gai
   
Dec 17, 2010, 02:41am   #3
thx Danielle your response help a lot, i really i appreciated
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Dec 26, 2010, 03:56pm   #4
Great job here, Tut Gai. Danielle made a great edit! I think it would be helpful for you to type the essay again right here in another post within this thread.

Type it again, and try to include all the corrections Danielle made. Then, we will look to see if you still have errors. Practice this way, and your English will soon be perfect. :-)


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