I apologize for the meaning of colors (that I should have told you), and some information that I forgot.
1.
The blue color is for the phrase/sentence that I rephrase your words.
The green color is for the phrase/sentence that should have been added into your essay. For example, I think that adding "
at XXXX university " can help the reader become clear about your work place.
The red color is for the phrases/sentences that I am not sure about the meaning, and have no idea on what it should have been. Some sentences in red can be improved.
2.
You may tell the reader at the first sentence of your paragraph. For example,
My reason for transferring to xxx program is to broaden my resources to attain higher education.
can be changed to
My reason for transferring from YYY program in YYY university to bbb program in BBB university is to broaden my resources to attain higher education.
PS. BBB is the program that you are going to apply to/ that you are going to send this essay to.
YYY is your current program.