Toastmasters Experience; Common App Short Answers

"Good evening ladies and gentlemen." I could feel my heart beating, as I stood on the platform confronting hundreds of pairs of eyes. Public speaking did not come naturally to me, and I felt remarkably self-conscious and nervous for the first few minutes. I belong to Toastmasters an organization for developing public speaking and leadership skills. During meeting, it gives impromptu talks on assigned topics, conduct meetings and develop skills related to parliamentary procedure.

To be honest, standing in front of people and conveying ideas was easy for me in Korea since I was used to be the class president in my school. However, because English is not my native language, I knew it would be beneficial for me to join Toastmasters, and it has been a valuable experience.

When I was participating in Toastmasters, it was a driving for in developing my English-speaking skills and it taught me how to communicate in a high-pressured atmosphere.

My comments are in bold:)


as i stood on the platform confronted by hundreds of pairs of eyes


does not come naturally to me


i belong to Toastmasters, an organization


During meetings, i


Since i used to be class president


I know what you're trying to say here but you need to make it clearer, you found it easier to speak in your native language and public speaking was hard at your school because you had to do it in english - a language you are not confident in...


Participating in Toastmasters has developed my english speaking skills, and has taught me to communicate in a high pressured atmosphere

Other comments:
Personally i feel like you should re-write this becuase you have the content but you can express the content in a much better way. Make the moral or learning lesson from this experience very explicit. " You were able to bush the boundaries of your comfort zone, it has taught you all fear can be overcome...etc

I appreciate it that all of you are helping me :)
But at this part
When I was living In Korea, standing in front of people and conveying ideas was easy for me. Since I used to be the class president in my school and it was required of me to speak to a crowd. I knew it would be beneficial for me to join Toastmasters and it has been a valuable experience.

I do not know how to express my experience very explicit

Thank you everybody to help me :)