Using computer every day can have more negative than positive effects on your children?
do you agree or disagree?
Nowadays, thanks to the development of technology, computer is now indispensable to life. Some people think that computer is good for children and it should be used daily by children but some others think differently. In my opinion, the latter opinion is true.
Twentieth century is known for its technical advancement in the field of transportation, communication and many more. Among these one greatest advancement is development of computer technologies,it is now indispensable to life. Some people think that computer is good for children and it should be used daily by children but some others think [font#FF0000]It is effecting their children in different ways
differently. In my opinion, the latter opinion is true [/font]
First, using computer constantly has bad influence on children's eyes. When they concentrate on computer for too long, their eyes
will gets tired, which is the main reason for some eyes problems, typically shortsightedness .
Moreover, children who play games too much on computer can seriously lack communicating skills, they will know little about the outside
lifeworld. It is a well-known fact that people who are addicted to games, especially online games, can eventually bear dangerous consequences. For instance, several teenagers play games without rest, which leads to health depression, a typical example is the death of Korean gamer, who had aplayed non-stop playing for 3 days.
Finally, even people who are not interested in online game can still be negatively affected by using computer too much. Some social surveys have shown that a few children use computer for studying purpose, most of them are attracted by facebook, blog, etc.
instead. Due to this neglectneglegance [/s], they will have a bad result in school because when they can not live without internet, they will have no time for their studying.
In conclusion, although it is undeniable that computer is a crucial part of human life, it still has its bad sideadverse effects , especially for children. People should learn how to use it properly to make it an effective tool because computer should be used not only for entertaining but also for working and studying purpose.
This is my practice essay for IELTS task 2.please give me some feedback about it and the possible bandscore.
Hi I tried to incorporate what came in mind after reading your essay,