|I believe that m Motivation, determination, and hard-work lead enabled me to excel in all my classes. My success was also facilitated by my teachers. Their encouragement, dedication, and enthusiasm towards learning attributed contributed to my success in math and chemistry.
Personally, I learn by visualization and through examples especially when it comes to math. ---This sentence intrigues me, but I think you should use it as the beginning of a new paragraph. It seems to be about a different subject, so give it its own paragraph.
I believe that
if a teacher uses teachers who use their white boards or even chalk board are the best kinds of teacher because they help students visualize the problem and the solution.
You clearly are a very intelligent and serious student! Can this essay be longer? I think you should try to use 3 paragraphs, and make it longer. :-)