kenben12 2 / 5 Dec 30, 2011 #1How has your family history, culture or environment influenced who you are?My family environment has construct me into the I am today. I was raised my a strong and encouraging mother. Throughout my life my mother showed me how to do things the right way. If I show impatient ambition for materialistic things such as cars or sneakers, she tells me to put a hold on my eagerness and continue to follow the traits of a good person and I will fufill my aspiration. Adoring someone like her, gives me a motive in succeeding in life. Every admirable action I do, is because of her provacation which sparks my personality. I believe I carry the characteristic traits of a diligent, amicable, and blithe person.
nodumblonde1616 1 / 4 Dec 30, 2011 #2I love the message, but you have some unnessecary commas in there. Just a syntactical fix :) I love it!-Adoring someone like her, gives (Take that one out)-Every admirable action I do, is because (That one too)