Cornell University will not only prepare me for the path of being an engineer, but most importantly, will teach me how to think like an engineer.
instead: Cornell University will not only prepare me for the path of being an engineer,
but also teach me how to think like an engineer
"The things worth doing in life," he says, "comes with no instructions because it has never been done before."
what a nice quote! I feel like you should expand on this more. What does this mean to you?
For the last paragraph, in my opinion...it feels kind of scattered. Maybe try focusing it on one particular aspect? You have topics like co-ops, hands-on activities, and Cornell Build Fly Team. Maybe try going in depth in one or two particular aspects. It will add more depth to your essay.