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"the ritual of Labor Day weekend" - Significan Experience Essay - Common App


jgirl3 2 / 3  
Oct 14, 2010   #1
Evaluate a significant experience, achievement, risk you have taken, or ethical dilemma you have faced and its impact on you.

My favorite holiday is Labor Day. Unlike most people, I love the holiday that indicates the end of the freedom and relaxation of summer and the start of the stressful school year. I enjoy Labor Day so much because every year my entire family spends the weekend together at my favorite place in the world, my grandparent's lake house. It is a small red house overlooking a small lake in rural Pennsylvania. It's a three hour drive from where I live and is far away from cell phones and internet access. My grandfather built the house on the weekends in early seventies and my family has been going there every Labor Day weekend since. The house and the people in it have inspired me to be creative, unique, imaginative, and believe that I can do great things.

When I was ten, my younger sister and I added to the ritual of Labor Day weekend, with the invention of the Hot Sauce Festival, to celebrate our love of spicy food. We requested our family to cook a spicy dish for the hot food contest, prepare a talent for a talent show, and bring a piece of artwork for an art showing. My Dad's family, which is full of great musicians and creative people, embraced the idea and we now have the Hot Sauce Festival every year. Throughout the weekend I learn to be more inventive, imaginative, and resourceful in my everyday life. I am forced to use my artistic side and be original when creating new foods and artwork for the Hot Sauce Festival which gives me practice and insight that I can apply to school and activities.

Many people in my family can play an instrument, so whenever we are all together we play music and sing together. Being around such talented musicians motivated me to learn to play guitar. My gifted cousin, who can play almost anything, gave me and my sister guitar lessons, and I now am capable enough to join in and play with everyone. Though I love playing guitar, I know I will never play music professionally but performing in front of family at the mountain house feels almost as satisfying.

The overall experience of the Hot Sauce Festival and the mountain house radiates originality and resourcefulness which all has a great impact on me. I believe my best qualities are my ability to be creative, artistic, and inventive and this has definitely affected the way I relate these traits to my education and daily life. Through these experiences, I have become the diverse, unique, and imaginative person I am today.

Please give me your thoughts! I'm having trouble putting my ideas into words and I don't know if the showed how it impacted me well enough.
ravkaurg 3 / 7  
Oct 14, 2010   #2
Add quotes into your essay like a dialogue between you and your family as you arrive at the house. That will add a more personal touch. Other than that it is good but maybe more imagery and describing your emotions would add a special touch.
EF_Kevin 8 / 13,321 129  
Oct 18, 2010   #3
the invention of the Hot Sauce Festival, to celebrate our love of spicy food.

hahaha! Cool...

Capitalize Internet.

I know I will never play music professionally

You must have a misconception. You must think a particular kind of talent is necessary. Actually, music is just another form of communication. If you communicate something excellent through music... that is all it takes. You write well, and you know some chords, so write a song!

In that first paragraph, it is important to clearly establish the experience you are discussing... labor day, the lake house, the hot sauce festival... at the end, you specify "the overall experience" of all that... but I think you can NAME the experience in a creative way.


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