We see all sorts of problems in our society today, but one of the world's major issues has always been racism.
it's very generic and pretty much useless
and a lot of people are oblivious to the fact that it still exists
but a lot of people? don't you want to establish a contrast?
conclusion from racism?
your next sentence should answer this question
Choose an issue of importance to you-the issue could be personal, school related, local, political, or international in scope-and write an essay in which you explain the significance of that issue to yourself, your family, your community, or your generation.
alright, you answer the part "choose an issue", but that's IT. THE ESSAY IS NOT ABOUT YOU CHOOSING THAT ISSUE ONLY, IT'S NOT ASKING YOU TO DESCRIBE A CONCERN, BUT TO
write an essay in which you explain the significance .
the admin won't give a f about facts racism. the admin already knows what's racism, no need to remind. your essay would fit great if the prompt were: describe an issue, but that's not the freaking prompt!
this question doesn't want to know how much you know about an issue, but how YOU are changed. Point to me 1 sentence in which you described the impact of racism to you? were you discriminated against?
"People must understand that racism still exists to this day" so what? why should UT accept you?
COLLEGE ESSAYS NEED I's. If you don't have an "I" every other sentence at least, you are not doing what you are supposed to, which is to convince the college that you are an insightful person aware of a problem and changed by it. If you talk from the perspective of another person, then how will the admin learn about YOU?
My suggestion: either you have been discriminated against, talk about it, or change the subject to something much more person. It doesn't matter how much you care about it, if you can't say how you were changed or at least what you did to correct the problem, it will be a documentary and the reader will throw away your essay in 5 seconds (literally, the admin has about 5000 essays to read during a day, so s/he doesn't have time to read your impersonal view on slavery)
ANSWER THE PROMPT!!!!!!!