A few years back I took this idea literally and moved from Russia to the States.
Add one sentence after this sentence to show that you moved BECAUSE of "a desire to participate in the process of globalization." This idea of taking globalization literally is such an interesting idea!! :-)
Great job, I really like the premise of this essay.
use twenty-one instead of 21.
separate the 2 parts of a compound sentence with a comma:
I was 21 years old, and I was sure that anything is possible in this life as long as you know what you want.
And change so the verb tense is consistent:
I was 21 years old, and I was sure that anything was possible in this life as long as you knew what you wanted. --- it is not incorrect to do it the way you did it, but it sounds nice to the reader if you keep the tense consistent.
atBut I couldn't stand the idea of studying the society without knowing anything but the only place I've ever lived
at .
A decision like that is hard to make and even harder to bring
it to life.
Lengthen the last few paragraphs by adding a few sentences about the plan you developed for your future. That wll really complete the essay. Be specific when describing your future plans.
:-)