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'preparing for IIT's entrance exam for a long time' -MIT additional information essay


mrgzg1 6 / 14  
Dec 28, 2009   #1
"Over thirty years of IITs, yet, all it does is train some bring kids to work in multinationals. I mean look at MIT in the USA...," it was the first time I had came across 'MIT' in 9th grade when I was reading Five Point Someone by Chetan Bhagat who himself was an Indian Institute of Technology(IIT) alumni. Later in 10th grade when I was reading Jumpha Lahri's Namesake again I dashed across MIT, this time in a deeper context. I was astonished by knowing that there was something that was even better then IIT, yet even after knowing that fact I was determined to go to IIT. That was the best I could have got in India and may be even in the world.

I had been preparing for IIT's entrance exam since I was in 8th grade. That's how it is in India; bright students spend bulk of their time preparing for the IIT's Joint Entrance Exam (JEE). I wasn't any different, but the only thing that separated me from the others was that I also used to give time to other things in life. I used to exercise daily(Students ignore even health keeping), I was involved in many activities(this is the main thing that Indian students lack), I used to equally pay attention in school(As IIT requires only a minimum of 60% in 12th grade students totally ignore school). Last summer I when I moved to US I realized that I would not be able to go to IIT anymore; my parents are not ready to send me back to India this spring for the IIT test.

When I came here I was amazed by the opportunities this country had for me. I started grabbing all I could and the best one was when I joined Chicago Android Group. At Chicago Android Group I met the best minds from my area including many of the MIT's alumni. I was not ashamed to be the only high school student in the group, but I was proud that even though I was a high school student I was invited to give a presentation. When I joined school I was overwhelmed with the excitement of joining many clubs and contributing to the community. I also have plans to volunteer at a Kinder Care next semester.

Lately I have been thinking how my life would had been like if I were in India. Especially with just few months for JEE I would had been studying day and night for it. Even if I were not destined to come to US I might had given up my position from the board of advisory at the Science Museum due to the pressure from the test.

Please help me correct grammer and let me know about the content of the essay...
Frydafly 5 / 13  
Dec 28, 2009   #2
What is the prompt? Try to make it as personal as possible. Maybe a little more about how you felt in IIT and how you feel about engineering/math/science. That might give them a better idea of who you are. They already know your credentials through the rest of your application.. try telling them more about your personality here.

Maybe you can edit it again and post it as a reply to this comment so you can keep on polishing it.

Good luck! Hope you get in!


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