He was like a Greek God with a well sculpted body and features that even men envied
hey......... women don't envy good looking guys, but go crazy............ only men envy ...................lol
So, I suggest you to take off the word "even" and say:
He was like a Greek God with a well sculpted body and features that
even often make men envied
both John and Ariel
I wasn't sure that Ariel was a girl until you said that they fell in love because that name is not a common female name for me....... Just give some thought on that and introduce her to the reader in your earlier para.
Both (no fullstop: hope it's a typo :D)
worked hard and they flourished in their respective careers and soon they decided to
settled down tie the nuptial knot.
It was a simple yet a beautiful marriage ,attended by close friends and family members.Initially, they rented an apartment in the suburbs but within a short span of five years, they become well established in their respective fields and prospered financially .It was the right time for them to start a family, Ariel conceived with a baby. It was the happiest day for them when they heard the first cry of
. After their child was
John was offered the position of a senior manager and Ariel left her job
b a stay at home mum to be the best mom for her baby.
Life was good for them .They bought a semi detached home in an exclusive neighborhood .They dined at the best
restraints restaurants and hopped into frequent
popular clubs frequently
.Their child was literally born with a silver spoon in her mouth ,she
went was admitted
to the best private school in the locality
and had the best tutor to coach her personally. Basically their
life was heavenly until Lily
came about entered the scene
You are quite creative in presenting ideas.......... Good Job!