Hi, this is a very rough draft of my essay, I was hoping to get some advice on how to refine it. The end Batman quote I just threw at the end so I wouldn't forget it, I was hoping I might be able to put it more into the context of my essay. It is one of my favorite quotes and I love batman. Do you think my essay starts to go off topic? Should I have more specific examples to reinforce my arguments?
Living my life to the fullest, so that when the time comes, I will look back and have no regrets. This is just a more complicated way of saying I want to pursue happiness. The unique part of that statement is how I define happiness.
To me happiness is achieving my highest ambitions. Integrated into this however, is a tug-of-war between my own happiness and the happiness of others as I do not want to further myself to the detriment of others.
Integrity gives me a special peace of mind that at times can be more welcome than any other pleasures. This can range from simple tasks like helping a classmate with homework, or giving advice to a young hockey player who is in the same position I used to be, or to trying to follow up on my friend's legacy after he passed away. I want to be remembered as somebody who had a positive effect on the others around him.
There comes a certain point where I push myself to hard, leaving me exhausted and sometimes depressed. At these times, I usually take some to myself, and dwell upon my favorite memories. When it comes down to it, I remember one of my favorite quotes from Calvin and Hobbes. Calvin is talking to his imaginary pet tiger, Hobbes, during a starry night. Calvin says, "If people sat outside and looked at the stars each night, I'll bet they'd live a lot differently." Hobbes responds, "how so?'. "Well, when you look into infinity, you realize that there are more important things than what people do all day." Sometimes, I need to sit back, take a breath, and enjoy the little things in life that I am so lucky to have.
It's not who I am underneath, but what I do that defines me. - Batman, an incorruptible, everlasting symbol
yes, I think you should give some examples.
I also think that some of your ideas are to stereotyped. I think too many would say that they want to pursue hapiness etc.
I actually already wanted to start writing about a topic very similar to this.
You actually want to be unique!!!
Integrated into this, however, is a tug-of-war between
I find your essay interesting, as your idea is philosophical and deep. I also like how you want to balance to a certain point where "perfectionism" doesn't become detrimental to yourself. However, I think your essay focuses on a very general topic, which might affect you badly to some degree. Yet, you can keep your focus if you wish to, as it shows your positivity.
Great essay, and I like how you ended with quotes that exactly represent your point of view on happiness!
Cheers
