alrighty, thanks a lot to all of you, and i do appreciate the critique! it is mostly the character count that's keeping me back from explaining. I usually have a problem with explaining too much...
but, actually, one of the goals of a feminist is to find out why society has made male and female so separate, or, why the gender barrier is there and how to tear the wall down.
so, would something like this be better:
I have always been passionate about equality. It started out as a search to find a reason behind my dad's yelling and my mom's insistence on staying with him. In high school, I became an outspoken feminist, or, as one of my friends says, "a dirty man-hater". I constantly ask why society has been separated into such opposing genders. It was easy to choose Gender Studies at NYU. This program not only gives me the chance to read and study- it gives me the chance to actively explore gender roles.
I had to shorten it, because the common app counts SPACES as characters, which is rather ridiculous.
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