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WHY NYU? 1500 CHARACTERS read! ill return the favor!!!

anshikavThreads: 5 Posts: 30	Dec 29, 2011, 06:19pm #1
Why NYU? 1481/1500 character limit New York University was an automatic choice for me. I grew up in Manhattan, and though we moved away years ago, part of me has never left the city. I'm in love with the city; it is inspiring, eclectic, colorful, varied, and full of opportunity. As an artist I am constantly looking for new ideas, experiences, sights, smells, sounds, and new ways to be inspired. The constant influx and churning of new ideas, ethnicities, beliefs and thoughts make New York the most inspiring of cities for me to train and work in. Attending New York University would put me in the midst of an environment I love, while providing me with the unbeatable education I need. The myriad of majors and minors offered at NYU in every subject from anthropology to neurological sciences would allow me every opportunity to broaden my views, and bring a whole new aspect to my drawings and paintings. Also, the numerous internship and job opportunities New York has to offer would give me first-hand experience in the field, as well a competitive edge over graduates from other schools. I am sure that many colleges have the facilities to give me a good education, but only New York University has the ability to transform me from a student to an experienced career woman and give me the skill set I will need to get to and stay on top of everyone in my field. New York University would be the perfect place for me to learn and grow, and I would be honored to get the opportunity to pursue my education here.

Mauru23Threads: 3 Posts: 23 Author: Melissa Munoz	Dec 29, 2011, 06:29pm #2
Wow.. this is really good! I think you answered the prompt perfectly! Good job! The only things I could correct would be where you say "I'm in love with the city" You should change it around so that you don't say city twice in that same line, it just sounds repetitive. Check mine? I revised it.

anshikavThreads: 5 Posts: 30	Dec 29, 2011, 06:48pm #3
Thanks! I'll check yours out right now

sailorb111Threads: 3 Posts: 12 Author: Teresa Westin	Dec 29, 2011, 06:53pm #4
this is very good! i agree with mauru23 completely! you still have about 20 characters so maybe if you want to add anything, simply had some adjectives to spice it up maybe but otherwise its great! could you check mine as well? thanks!

calvinwangThreads: 3 Posts: 39 Author: Calvin Wang	Dec 29, 2011, 07:03pm #5
as well as a competitive edge small typo churning of new ideas, ethnicities, beliefs and thoughts I feel like their really really similar words and a bit redundent in the same sentence, but ur choice :P only New York University ~~has the ability to~~ can transform me has the same meaning but less characters overall its rly good. good luck on NYU. i applied there too :o check mine out too. i rly need help D:

anshikavThreads: 5 Posts: 30	Dec 29, 2011, 07:08pm #6
Thanks you so much!

easyfuThreads: 3 Posts: 24	Dec 29, 2011, 07:13pm #7
anshikav: I am sure that many colleges have the facilities to give me a good education, but only New York University has the ability to transform me from a student to an experienced career woman and give me the skill set I will need to get to and stay on top of everyone in my field. is it gives?

np9494Threads: 1 Posts: 4 Author: Nilam Patel	Dec 29, 2011, 07:18pm #8
easyfu: anshikav: I am sure that many colleges have the facilities to give me a good education, but only New York University has the ability to transform me from a student to an experienced career woman and give me the skill set I will need to get to and stay on top of everyone in my field. is it gives? i think it would be "to give"

anshikavThreads: 5 Posts: 30	Dec 29, 2011, 07:20pm #9
i think it's gives

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