It is not by chance that I want to study at JKP. To my mind, JKP is the convergence of my dream, my liking, and my ambition. JKP is very meaningful to me because it not only supplies an outstanding education but also brings me an environment that I always desire from the childhood.
When I was a child, I often read The Chicken Soup for the Soul, a kind of book writing about the meaning of life. Life is always filled with many adversity but it does not lack fruits behind. Therefore, I need to try very much try to get the goal of my life. The chance of success seems less when I realize that each of us just can live one time. One time for reaching dream by trying and risking .Growing up in a poor country, I see the way my sisters growing up, studying as a completion of duty and getting married. They work in small companies with boring and repeated tasks and stable salaries. Without reason, I do not want to follow their way which older persons in my town consider suitable for girls. I want to turn into another way. However rough or hard it is, I still want. I want to do something which makes me try continuously all my life so that when I am old, I can see back and smile satisfactorily. Many nights I thought a lot about what I can do to change my life, to escape from the old way of many older girl in my country. Finally, I found a way_ that is studying abroad. Just through it, I can reach the new horizons and touch my dream.
However, with my family financial resource, I can not easily to afford my studying abroad. Time goes by, I grew up and went to Ho Chi Minh city- a big city in my country to enter into university with an burning dream in my heart. In fact, I always believe that if I try non-stop for something, that will come. And marvel occur when I found JKP through a story from my close friend. I was nearly breathless at the news about JKP's generosity. Although it is a big university with a fame as a top business school in Europe, JKP give out free tuition. Long time ago, I was engrossed in wonderful landscape in Europe. Imaging studying in a beautiful country such as Sweden makes me exhilarating. I can see the beautiful landscape and the famous companies .Through research, I learned that JKP is belong to Community of European Management Schools( CEMS) and graduates have a very big chance in the future. I really want to work in a global environment and experience challenge of the life. A friend came from USA told me that my dream is so adventurous because I do not know the language and have no relative in Sweden. However I think that challenge will force me to change into a strong person if I do not give up.. I have ever imagined my life in Sweden. I will be engrossed in thick books about Business in large library, I will stay up late to learn new language in the evening, and may be work part time job in the weekend. A saying goes that :One thing that can not kill you will make you stronger . In my opinion, Business is not simply a job. It is an art, a combination of many skill such as communicative skill, critical thinking and analytical skill, etc. Doing business will make us be creative and nimble with the change in life. Besides, I can help many poor people by creating the work for them. I believe that studying Business at JKP will give me the best chance to master my Business.
I believe that I will study hard not only because of my ambition, my interest in Business but also show my gratitude toward Swedish government who has given me a valuable chance.
These days, I am studying Sat I for the coming test. The time is still little for me, plus a lot of other tasks I must carry on. I have to refuse most of the invitation for going out. I set a strict schedule for myself. Some friends did not understand me, thinking that I am too strict to my life. But I accept all, I accept their misunderstanding although I feel very hurt. Just I know that this is the only chance for me to JKP.
I believe that chosing me as a member of JKP will never make you regret. I am totally confident with my abilities and my ambition to become a successful businesswoman coming from JKP- a famous University in Europe.
Please include the whole and complete prompt.
To my mind, JKP is the convergence of my dream, my liking, and my ambition.
----Ambition to do what? Also, JKP is not the convergence of these things, it is your desire to attend JKP that is caused by this convergence.----
JKP is very meaningful to me because it not only supplies an outstanding education but also canbring me an environment that I have always desiredsincethe childhood.
----You should probably not refer to yourself here as if JKP has already given these things to you. Say that either they "can" give you these things or that they give these things to other people.----
When I was a child, I often read Chicken Soup for the Soul, a kind of book writing about the meaning of life.
Life is always filled with manyhardships but it does not lack fruits behind .
----I would suggest completely rewriting the above sentence or just removing it.----
Therefore, I need to try very hardtry to achieve the goals of my life.
The chance of success seems less when I realize that each of us can only live once .
One time for reaching dream by trying and risking. Growing up in a poor country, I see the way my sisters grow up, studying and getting married for the fulfillment of duty rather than personal desire.
Without reason, I do not want to follow their way which older persons in my town consider suitable for girls.
----Do you really not have a reason to not want to follow in your sister's footsteps? Perhaps you meant "with good reason". But then you need to state the reason.----
I want to live my life in a different way.
However rough or hard it is, I still want.
----You still want what?----
I want to do something which makes me try continuously all my life so that when I am old, I can look back and smile with satisfaction .
Many nights I thought a lot about what I could do to change my life, to escape from the old lifestylethat many women in my country have lead.
Finally, I found a way that is studying abroad.
----A way to do what?----
However, with my family's current financial situation , I cannot easily to afford to study abroad.
Time goes by, I grew up and went to Ho Chi Minh city- a big city in my country to enter into university with an burning dream in my heart.
----What is your dream? Also this sentence seems a little out of place.----
In fact, I have always believed that if I try non-stop for something, it will happen .
----These are just a few corrections to get you started----
One big thing you keep referring to is your "dream". Tell us about your dream and explain exactly what it is.
Oh, thank you very much for your comment, Gautama!I am very appreciated your help.
Life is always filled with many adversity but it does not lack the fruits of overcoming adversity make it worthwhile.
...reaching dreams by trying and risking .
Growing up in a poor country, I saw the way my sisters growing up, studying as a completion of duty and getting married.
However rough or hard it is, I still want. I want to do something which makes me try...
However, with my family's lack of financial resource, I cannot easily to afford my studying abroad.
A Long time ago, I was engrossed in wonderful landscape in Europe.
A friend who came from USA told me that my dream
A saying goes: that "One thing that can not kill you will make you stronger."
In my opinion, business is not simply a job.
These days, I am studying SAT I for the coming test. The time is still little for me, plus a lot of other tasks I must carry on. I have to refuse most of the invitation for going out.
I believe that choosing me as a member of JKP will never..
There is some more help! The English is rough, but this is an impressive expression of your personality and seriousness. Like Tyler, I wonder what they asked you to write about; did you follow the instructions for this essay? If it is supposed to be about your motivation to study at JKP, it will be good if you tell some more about specific resources and faculty members that attract you to the school -- and how this school can help you to achieve your professional goals after you graduate.
my essay's prompt: Motivation to business studies and taking the degree at JKP.
essay to demonstrate your interest to study at JKP
Prompt:. Motivation to business studies and taking the degree at JKP
From youth, my dream is becoming a successful business woman in the future. Then I could help the poor in the remote area in the world and have enough money to take my mother abroad to have her illness treated. Besides, I am often engrossed in delicacy of landscapes of Europe. Resulting from my dream and interest, I desire to study Business in a country in Europe. After a long time of searching, I found that ULA in Sweden is really what I am looking for. I believe that ULA would bring me an outstanding education and wonderful environment that I always long for.
Everything always has its origin. The reason why I want to have much money to help the poor and have my mother illness treated is originated in my childhood. At that time, my father often bought me Chicken Soup for the Soul books. Therefore, as a very young girl I realized that I am so lucky to have such a good life. I had the chance of going to school, the chance of living in the love of both of my parents. However, I feel sad to think that somewhere in this world, there are still many unlucky people who do not have a comfortable like mine. Although I am just a little girl born in a poor country, I believe that with my determination, I can become a successful business woman in the future to help the more unlucky persons than me. My ambition does not stop there because my wish also is having my mother illness treated. My mother had an illness with her hand which can be cured in nowhere in my country however many times my family tried. That hand has fed me, embraced me during my childhood and helped me stand up me whenever I fell. I can sacrificed my hand for her willingly, but the hospitals in my country have no answer to that illness. I wish one day I can have her hand treated and she would not feel painful as now any more. Two above reasons are what are always urging me to study abroad, especially in Europe, a region I often dream of and believe in its remarkable education.
However, with my family's current financial situation, I can not easily afford to study abroad. After studying the educations and the policies of many countries, I feel very impressive at the "free tuition" of ULA university in Sweden. With an outstanding education standard, ULA is ranked as the top business university in Sweden as in Europe. Through research, I learned that ULA is belong to Community of European Management Schools( CEMS) which first mission is to set a global standard of excellence for pre-experience Master's in management. I believe that with opportunities and accesses which ULA bring to its students, ULA's students can develop their abilities fully and even further their expectation. Born in a poor country, I understand deeply how crucial studying environment is. I hope after graduating from ULA, I can take part in and make my little contribution to CEMS in order to develop and resolve financial matters of the world. After my friend's narration, who is studying in ULA, this university bring students the practical knowledge and sharp skills to work out hard problems under the limited time. Far from a passive approach of studying, students here are required to make a habit of being active in their work and self-motivated. Those skills are really what I found that we need to master nowadays. Next year, ULA is going to cooperate with two famous universities about Art and Technology to make up a big general university. I more eager to study in such a comprehensive environment. Some friends told me that my plan is so adventurous because I do not know the Swedish and I will stumble over the cultural shocks. However I think that challenge will force me to change into a strong person. I have ever imagined the student life in ULA if I am admitted. I would be engrossed in thick books in the modern library, taken part in school's activities enthusiastically and mastered critical skills with other colleagues through team-work tasks. I also would stay up late to learn Swedish in the evening, and may be work part time job in the weekend to get the experience of the practical life. A saying goes: One thing that can not kill you will make you stronger. Indeed, life is always filled with adversity but the fruits of overcoming adversity make it worthwhile.
These days, I am studying Sat I for the coming test. The time is still little for me, plus a lot of other tasks I must carry on. I have to refuse most of the invitations for going out. I set a strict schedule for myself. Some friends did not understand me, think that I am too strict to my life. I accept their misunderstanding although I feel very hurt. Just I know that how precious the chance of being admitted into ULA to my life.
I believe that with the specialized academic environment, developed over the years by dedicated researchers, teachers and even students, ULA will put its students on the fast tract to a career in international business. The wide range of knowledge acquired during the years of study enables students of ULA, equipped with the skills and competence required in our rapidly changing world, to find suitable work in a great number of institutions and enterprises.
I believe that choosing me as a member of ULA will never make you regret. I am totally confident with my abilities and my ambition to become a successful businesswoman coming from ULA- a famous University in Europe. Moreover, I came from Asia, where future market growth will lead to huge opportunities for doing business. I am totally confident that I understand and can work well in Asia market. A little further, I hope to make a bridge between Europe and Asia to build associations to help the poor in the world. Anyway, whether I am admitted or not, I wish ULA more and more successful in training businessman of the world, create a community of talented students to make our world more and more wonderful.
From youth, my dream has been to become a successful businesswoman. in the future. Then I could help the poor in the remote area in the world and have enough money to take my mother abroad to have her illness treated. Besides, I am often engrossed in delicacy of landscapes of Europe. Due to my dream and interest, I desire to study Business in a European country. After a long ...
After studying the educations and the policies of many countries, I feel very impressed with the "free tuition" of ULA university in Sweden.
I feel eager to study in such a comprehensive environment. Some friends told me that my plan is so adventurous because I do not know the Swedish and I will stumble over cultural barriers .
A saying goes: Anything that cannot kill you will make you stronger.
Some friends did not understand me, and think that I am too strict to my life.
I believe that with the specialized academic environment, developed over the years by dedicated researchers, teachers and even students, ULA will put its students on the fast track to a career in international business.
I am totally confident in my abilities and my ambition to become a successful businesswoman, coming from ULA -- a famous University in Europe. Moreover, I came from ...
Nice ending!
Thank you very much, Kevin!!
