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xamandaThreads: 8
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Author: Amanda Chow
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Oct 29, 2012, 11:39pm   #1
Please tell us more about your cultural background and identity in the space below (100 word limit).

I'm Asian. More specifically, my mom is from Hong Kong and my dad is from Taiwan. Both their families come from Mainland China. However, I instead consider myself as part of a small, yet growing cultural group known as American-born Chinese. ABCs, as we frequently call ourselves, are generally young, second-generation Chinese with strong grasps on both American and Chinese culture. We stock our cabinets with both Chef Boyardee and shrimp crackers and we are fluent in "Chinglish." I've grown up equally amidst both cultures and both have played an equally important role in my life. (96 words)

Although you may not yet know what you want to major in, which department or program at MIT appeals to you and why? (100 words or fewer)

My interest in coding began when I was nine years old, designing my Kacheek's webpage for my Neopets account, fascinated with how my <br>'s turned into line breaks and how my <img src="image.jpg">'s turned into images. Years later, I was struck with this same feeling while sitting in Computer Programming class, typing lines of seemingly meaningless text into my Java IDE and watching it exactly generate my intended output and display a screen flashing, "Hello, world." MIT's Electrical Engineering and Computer Science department appeals to me because of my interest in computer science, something I hope to pursue in college. (100 words)

Tell us about the most significant challenge you've faced or something important that didn't go according to plan. How did you manage the situation? (200-250 words)

When you grow up with a speech impediment, in addition to the constant questions of, "Why do you t-t-talk like th-th-this?", you often find yourself surrounded by the phrase, "self-confidence." Well-meaning people, people who actually speak every syllable the correct number of times, suggest you tell yourself this problem doesn't exist. It was something I'd always roll my eyes at, this unrealistically oversimplified solution. As a realist, I knew there was no magical cure-I was a stutterer. And so, faced with no other option, by the time I started high school I began forcing myself to accept the facts. I stopped feeling panicked whenever I stuttered. This fear of stuttering was, over time, reduced to an annoyance I was tired of putting up with. With a so-be-it attitude, I learned to feel comfortable about my speech. But ironically enough, this, in itself, is self-confidence. I overcame the worst of my speech impediment by accepting the fact that I have a speech impediment.

Sometimes I'll still stammer a little if I'm nervous. It's made me realize that stuttering was not my greatest challenge-It was the emotional burden that came with it. I'm still working on fully ridding myself of my stutter, but I'm no longer ashamed of how I talk. I no longer cringe whenever I watched a video of myself talking. I no longer feel this anxiety weighing over me. I get my message across, stuttering or not stuttering. For me, this mentality is my greatest accomplishment. (249 words)



xamandaThreads: 8
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Author: Amanda Chow
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Oct 30, 2012, 12:18am   #2
Okay I just finished my other one: (I'm new to this site and I don't know if it's weird to attach more essays or something so bear with me)

We know you lead a busy life, full of activities, many of which are required of you. Tell us about something you do for the pleasure of it. (100 words or fewer)

“They will see us waving from such great heights.”

It might sound a little boring that my “activity of choice” is collecting quotes. This quote, for example, I stumbled across online while I was having a quiet night at home. For a second I could imagine myself leaving my small town for a big city or winning an award and waving to people back home–all the emotions that came with this quote. As an artistic person, I appreciate eloquence in words. I absorb the emotions, experience, and stories I find in nine-word quotes. And that’s pretty exciting to me.

// I'm scared this one is really... just.. bad... I mean I feel like it either works or it doesn't, if you get what I mean. Do you think it works? If not, these were my other ideas to write about:

- Painting birdhouses (It would be kinda joke-y but I don't think I can expand much about it)
- Working out (Obviously as a stress/health thing and not an image thing--Kinda boring IMO)
- Tennis (I feel like the sport thing is overused..?)
- Dance (Same thing, overused IMO)
- Walking around Boston and going to this reflecting pool I sit at to think about stuff (This one would be mad cheesy/cliché--Probably even more so than my current one)
- Helping kids in math (I sound like a brown-noser)
- Listening to music/finding music (Cliché and I'd expand pretty much the same way I did with my current one--I chose my current one because I thought it was a more unique way of expressing this one)


Lina101Threads: 3
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Author: Yunting Xie
   
Oct 30, 2012, 12:43am   #3
HI!
umm the most recent one you just finished...
- the idea is unique and I like it!
- you have couple of run-on sentences
ex)
xamanda:
This quote, for example, I stumbled across online while I was having a quiet night at home.

this is a run-on. What are the subject and verb and object in here?
do you mean "For example, this is a quote I stumbled across online....." ?
You should just read what you wrote out aloud so that you can sense wherever is awkward and fix it.

Other than that, I think your ideas are pretty good! :D I really liked the one about how you overcame your speech impediment!

Nice Job! :)


OptimistPRIM3Threads: 3
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Author: PAUL WINDSOR KALEBU
   
Oct 30, 2012, 12:57am   #4
I thought your essays were pretty interesting since I am interested in Electricl Engineering and I once had a neopets account too haha. If you're able to elicit more meaning out of the "bird-house painting" than the "quote" essay, then go for it. The quote essay did have meaning and insight to it. I thought you could go farther to explain on the impact of what you absorb from the quotes is on you. That's just my opinion though. Good luck!


admission2012Threads: -
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Author: Kevin Jackson - AdmissionsAdviceOnline.com Skype 24/7 @ Admissions_essay_advice
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Oct 30, 2012, 05:37am   #5
Hello,

I think your first three responses are really good. 9.5/10. Your final response is good, but should be strengthened a little more. When you say you collect quotes, how do you do it? Do you keep a physical journal, an electronic journal, or is it simply by memory. Why do you collect them? Once you add these elements, that essay will also be great. -AAO

Hope this helps.


ChapapoteThreads: -
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Author: David Andrés Antón
   
Oct 30, 2012, 06:27am   #6
Ok, I am telling about my culture background.
I was born in Valladolid (Spain). I have lived in this city where I was born all my life, but i would like to work in other place or other country. My family come from Palencia. It´s a region located on the north from Valladolid. Palencia is a town less industrial and in the fifties a lot people looked for towns bigger and with more employment to settle down. At that group of people below my parents.


xamandaThreads: 8
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Author: Amanda Chow
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Oct 30, 2012, 05:37pm   #7
Thanks to all you awesome people for your imput--I was kinda nervous as my first time posting on these forum things haha. And I get what everyone means about expanding my quote idea, but it was really hard to cram into 100 words and I don't think I could add something without sacrificing even more, that's why I'm nervous about it.


himanshusahayThreads: 3
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Author: Himanshu Sahay
   
Nov 8, 2012, 12:01pm   #8
Love your third answer. I have a similar problem and have worked hard to reduce the effect of it.


bileThreads: -
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Author: bile warsame
   
Nov 8, 2012, 12:43pm   #9
my great issue that i would like to share with u is that'' one day i have gone to the school, first time i sat my chair, a lady of my classmate sit a very close place to me and said with a quit voice helo bile repeated two times and continued to approach with me, in that time me, i got surprised because this lady has never talk to me before in that long time we had a classmate........ i will proceed the next part.


zhixiangdaiThreads: 1
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Author: zhixiangdai
   
Nov 8, 2012, 01:28pm   #10
I like your ideas in the third question. You got some specific stuff in it, but my suggestion is your answers should be strengthened a little more.


tchsrams11910Threads: 2
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Author: Samantha Lee
   
Nov 23, 2012, 12:46am   #11
I like your first response. It's really to-the-point, humorous, and clear to readers. I think you can elaborate on your third one a little further. Just add more details to show readers instead of just telling.


dumiThreads: 1
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Author: Duminda
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Nov 23, 2012, 04:49am   #12
xamanda:
However, I instead consider myself as part of a small, yet growing cultural group known as American-born Chinese

I guess you shoud remove the word "instead" if you need to improve clarity

xamanda:
with strong grasps influences
...... I prefer the word "influence"

xamanda:
We stock our cabinets with both Chef Boyardee and shrimp crackers and we are fluent in “Chinglish.”

Yep.......... that's the advantage of being multi cultural ....... that's actually more interesting : )

You've done a really good job!
Good Luck!


weeyizhiThreads: 5
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Author: Yi Zhi Wee
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Nov 23, 2012, 05:36am   #13
I agree with dumi, but I wanna add that if you use influences instead of grasp, make sure you change on into from.
with strong grasps on influences from both American and Chinese cultures.
The second one seems perfect.
About the third,
Sometimes, I’ll still stammer a little if I’m nervous. It’s has made me realize that stuttering was not my greatest challenge
Fourth,
It might sound a little boring (I suggest changing this into dull instead, but it doesn't really matter I guess) that my “activity of choice” is collecting quotes.
Try to avoid redundancy like "a little". Save your space to talk about how collecting quotes shaped you.
All in all, they're excellent. Good luck =)


dumiThreads: 1
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Author: Duminda
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Nov 23, 2012, 07:49am   #14
weeyizhi:
I agree with dumi, but I wanna add that if you use influences instead of grasp, make sure you change on into from.
with strong grasps on influences from both American and Chinese cultures.

Ohhhhhhhhhhh................. that's great............. I really missed it and thanks weeyizhi : )




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