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"the photograph" - MIT: Describe the world you come from (200-250 words)


Xeltar 2 / 3  
Sep 28, 2012   #1
First of all my essay is around 20 words above limit is this ok, I'm having a lot of trouble elaborating on my topic =(.

Rummaging through boxes in the garage, desperately searching for a sorely misplaced copy of Age of Empires, a 12 year old me stumbles upon a photograph. Despite the fact that this was not my beloved video game, I inspected the find. The photo was in bad condition, the brown leather frame worn, a spider web crack blocked the view of the bottom half of the glass pane. The background was grainy and colors seemed to blur into one another. One of the people in it was a sunny looking woman with a warm smile wearing a plain beige dress, to her right was a young man. He was dressed in a faded oxford blue shirt and had on a pair of awkward looking eyeglasses. Hands at his side, he was smiling meekly at the camera. I saw an inscription in the photo graph reading "College Station". I put the photo back and continued searching.

Now looking back at that photo of my parents, taken shortly after arriving in America to study at Texas A&M with little English and 500 dollars to their name, I realize how extraordinary their odyssey was. Today I see the reason for the young man's shyness and the lady's mirth, for it was an expression of gratitude and hope at being given the opportunity to forge their own path. I feel pride and awe at their accomplishments and this respect pushed me to excel in my endeavors. Taking a quick peek out of his study, a 17 year old teenager catches a glimpse of the same two people smiling triumphantly
ruhama30 1 / 1  
Sep 28, 2012   #2
Your essay is really good! It caught my attention instantly and I know it will catch the attention of MIT as well! Good luck to you!


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